Winds of Change
a poem about darkness and light81 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Earthwriter,
A well written poem with excellent rhyming throughout. A celebratory verse that says "With God's help I have solved my problem."
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Dear Earthwriter,
A well written poem with excellent rhyming throughout. A celebratory verse that says "With God's help I have solved my problem."
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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thanks so much my friend
Comment from w.j.debi
Depths of emotion from both ends of the spectrum. How joyous that it has a happy ending as the speaker finds the light in a life worth living. Good abab rhyming pattern. Haunting picture to provide the threat of darkness to vibe overcome.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Depths of emotion from both ends of the spectrum. How joyous that it has a happy ending as the speaker finds the light in a life worth living. Good abab rhyming pattern. Haunting picture to provide the threat of darkness to vibe overcome.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thanks so much my friend
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
We may not all have bi polar or need meds to help regulate anything but we can all relate because we've been through hard times. What we need to remember is that we're not alone, people do care and you are loved. I'm here if you need talk
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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We may not all have bi polar or need meds to help regulate anything but we can all relate because we've been through hard times. What we need to remember is that we're not alone, people do care and you are loved. I'm here if you need talk
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thanks so much my friend
Comment from ELumpkins
Good work...The Poem has an easy flow and is an easy read,it is well written and rhymes very well. Depression is a very depriving condition. One never seems to be in harmony with their surroundings. Good presentation
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Good work...The Poem has an easy flow and is an easy read,it is well written and rhymes very well. Depression is a very depriving condition. One never seems to be in harmony with their surroundings. Good presentation
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thanks so much my friend
Comment from pipersfancy
How powerful this is - steeped with meaning and truth. And, just as beautifully penned, with perfect flow and rhyme... Simply lovely.
You, Sir, are more than an "aspiring poet"...
PF
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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How powerful this is - steeped with meaning and truth. And, just as beautifully penned, with perfect flow and rhyme... Simply lovely.
You, Sir, are more than an "aspiring poet"...
PF
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thanks so much my friend i really appreciate your review
Comment from boxergirl
I liked the positive message of your poem. You started in the darkness but by the end had found your way. Also, the rhyme scheme added to the rhythm of the poem. Good job!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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I liked the positive message of your poem. You started in the darkness but by the end had found your way. Also, the rhyme scheme added to the rhythm of the poem. Good job!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thanks so much my friend i really appreciate your review
Comment from elpsog
In this review I am going out on a limb. The poem's flow is smooth on the tongue. Its message of the struggle is clear as a bell. Best of all it is full rhyme almost. That is the my "limb" Quatrain 2 verse 4, "again" does not rhyme with "pain" of verse 2. At best it may be called poetic justice. Nevertheless for me it diminishes the rhyme scheme of your poem and poetry itself.
I offer you a suggestion for your consideration. It is just that a suggestion!
Suggestion: Q2v2. add "within" after "pain", Q2v4. Amend the verse "a new life seems to begin"
I would prefer though an amendment by you own pen.
If you do make a change let me know and I will happily add a star to my review.
Regards,
Ray
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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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In this review I am going out on a limb. The poem's flow is smooth on the tongue. Its message of the struggle is clear as a bell. Best of all it is full rhyme almost. That is the my "limb" Quatrain 2 verse 4, "again" does not rhyme with "pain" of verse 2. At best it may be called poetic justice. Nevertheless for me it diminishes the rhyme scheme of your poem and poetry itself.
I offer you a suggestion for your consideration. It is just that a suggestion!
Suggestion: Q2v2. add "within" after "pain", Q2v4. Amend the verse "a new life seems to begin"
I would prefer though an amendment by you own pen.
If you do make a change let me know and I will happily add a star to my review.
Regards,
Ray
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thank you
Comment from Charade
I really feel the inner torment just from the first stanza - great job getting readers past the exterior.
I love the idea that medication doesn't heal, it promotes health, but up until I read this, I never thought about it that way - thought provoking!
Not letting the brain control what?
Great job!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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I really feel the inner torment just from the first stanza - great job getting readers past the exterior.
I love the idea that medication doesn't heal, it promotes health, but up until I read this, I never thought about it that way - thought provoking!
Not letting the brain control what?
Great job!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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my brain is over analytical have to keep it in check
Comment from daeneam
No wonder this piece of poetry is recognized. It's one of the best! I love the inspiration the author tells. Living the life God wants us to live. We can only find true happiness and serenity when we are one with the Lord! May God continue blessing you so you can always be a blessing to us, your readers!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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No wonder this piece of poetry is recognized. It's one of the best! I love the inspiration the author tells. Living the life God wants us to live. We can only find true happiness and serenity when we are one with the Lord! May God continue blessing you so you can always be a blessing to us, your readers!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thank you
Comment from Gabrieltheswifter
Truly inspiring, The photo was very nice, in fact I want photos like that as a backdrop to my poems! XD Anyways, I love the poem itself and its message.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Truly inspiring, The photo was very nice, in fact I want photos like that as a backdrop to my poems! XD Anyways, I love the poem itself and its message.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thank you
