Free Verse Collection 2
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27 total reviews
Comment from amanda98653
Love can be so beautiful, and yet so painful. Like the "tide", it's uncontrollable, and unpredictable. A lovely free-verse.
God bless
AJ
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Love can be so beautiful, and yet so painful. Like the "tide", it's uncontrollable, and unpredictable. A lovely free-verse.
God bless
AJ
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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so pleased you liked this. very kind. thank you. mike
Comment from pipersfancy
The truth you've captured here pulls at me in strange ways... I feel, disillusioned? relieved? vindicated? saddened? All the above, but not quite. Trying to figure out my last relationship long after it disappeared in the rear-view mirror.
Fantastic thought stream you've pulled together. Evocative language paints a foreign but familiar landscape -
Good luck in the contest!
PF
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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The truth you've captured here pulls at me in strange ways... I feel, disillusioned? relieved? vindicated? saddened? All the above, but not quite. Trying to figure out my last relationship long after it disappeared in the rear-view mirror.
Fantastic thought stream you've pulled together. Evocative language paints a foreign but familiar landscape -
Good luck in the contest!
PF
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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oh dear. forgot this was even in a contest. just so organized and together is he. delighted that this speaks to you and evokes feelings. wonderful. encouraging review of a poem that is very much my style if I write without considering style. thank you very much. mike
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer delivers a message that taps into the mind of the reader. The words allow the reader to digest the words properly. The photo compliments the piece well as this piece hold my attention from start to finish.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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The writer delivers a message that taps into the mind of the reader. The words allow the reader to digest the words properly. The photo compliments the piece well as this piece hold my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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an excellent and well appreciated review. thank you so much. mike
Comment from ravenblack
Get you totally with this one. A masterful work of free verse. Looking up at the moon in a frozen vacuum trying to warm it is fruitless and we move like the tides not quite knowing why, light-headed as if in space but really just squeezing with a desperate cling until we squeeze all the juice out of each other, moon dust in a coffee can warehoused with all the other failed loves. Why? Blame it on the moon. If I had a six, this would get it.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Get you totally with this one. A masterful work of free verse. Looking up at the moon in a frozen vacuum trying to warm it is fruitless and we move like the tides not quite knowing why, light-headed as if in space but really just squeezing with a desperate cling until we squeeze all the juice out of each other, moon dust in a coffee can warehoused with all the other failed loves. Why? Blame it on the moon. If I had a six, this would get it.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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so very delighted and humbled with this review. wonderful to know that my meaning is clear and more so that it is enjoyed. couldn't be more encouraged. thank you! mike
Comment from Cookie333
I seriously enjoyed the fresh spirit of this piece. I really enjoy the freedom if the free verse and now I am thirsty for more of your work. You created so many images and have caused this reader to pause- well done my friend I shall remember your word play
Thank you
K
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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I seriously enjoyed the fresh spirit of this piece. I really enjoy the freedom if the free verse and now I am thirsty for more of your work. You created so many images and have caused this reader to pause- well done my friend I shall remember your word play
Thank you
K
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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so excited to receive this wonderful review and kind words. delighted that you enjoyed it and honored by your high rating. thank you so much. mike
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Well written, interesting free verse - pessimistic but clever. I particularly like 'the moon is a liquid floating in a lake, dishevelled by the breeze' good use of metaphor. I also like 'support mistaken for an embrace'. You bring in the notion that the moon and romance are always linked together but you are scathing about this. You have written a good free verse. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Well written, interesting free verse - pessimistic but clever. I particularly like 'the moon is a liquid floating in a lake, dishevelled by the breeze' good use of metaphor. I also like 'support mistaken for an embrace'. You bring in the notion that the moon and romance are always linked together but you are scathing about this. You have written a good free verse. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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these are very encouraging words in a wonderful review. thank you so much, appreciated. mike
Comment from swandrh
I like this poem about the water and earthly surrounding but I also believe its way too long and doesn't quite flow right.
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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I like this poem about the water and earthly surrounding but I also believe its way too long and doesn't quite flow right.
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Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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thank you for reading my poem. it is about my broken heart and me being sad because my relationship went bad. I am saying it is like these things that I am describing. hope you like the next one. mike :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Whoa, my friend. Let's ramble on a bit, shall we?
I suppose this speaks of retaining you individuality, staying the you you were before you met her. Hell, that rhymed, and I didn't even plan it. Two-fer-one special, there...
ZZ Top, those of the long beard and custom hot rod fame wrote a song once that I believe everyone who's in love should readily adhere to...
"Just hold on loosely
and don't let go.
If you cling too tightly
You're gonna' lose control..."
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Whoa, my friend. Let's ramble on a bit, shall we?
I suppose this speaks of retaining you individuality, staying the you you were before you met her. Hell, that rhymed, and I didn't even plan it. Two-fer-one special, there...
ZZ Top, those of the long beard and custom hot rod fame wrote a song once that I believe everyone who's in love should readily adhere to...
"Just hold on loosely
and don't let go.
If you cling too tightly
You're gonna' lose control..."
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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I think I may ramble just a bit occasionally when these chicks that I have fallen in love with for some reason are not reciprocating and then I am you know all like what in the world is going on and.... hold on loosely? okay. maybe I'll give that a go. mike
Comment from kiwijenny
Awwwww this isn't how it's supposed to be .......two people desiccated in a coffee can....to me marriage is warmer kinder more respectful than that ....oh and it's funny....we laugh...I love your wordplay and imagery
But I hate for you the piles of dust
God bless
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Awwwww this isn't how it's supposed to be .......two people desiccated in a coffee can....to me marriage is warmer kinder more respectful than that ....oh and it's funny....we laugh...I love your wordplay and imagery
But I hate for you the piles of dust
God bless
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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how sweet. I got over it and made a comeback! can't keep a poet down. thank you for the great review. mike
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So glad
Comment from joneau2
Once again you've managed to write a superb off the wall tale. It amazes me how you get from point A to B, and in between. Yep, it sure must be the tide, especially when the moon is full.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Once again you've managed to write a superb off the wall tale. It amazes me how you get from point A to B, and in between. Yep, it sure must be the tide, especially when the moon is full.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thank you. you are too kind. I think it is always full for me. haha. mike
