A Tribe of Marks
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Comment from Auto-Manic
Howdy, out cruising looking for other stuff to read.
Sounds pretty medieval don't know if it fit the parameters of the 575, but, really don't care had a good read, and I'm not a poet, so there ya go...I liked it.
AM
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Howdy, out cruising looking for other stuff to read.
Sounds pretty medieval don't know if it fit the parameters of the 575, but, really don't care had a good read, and I'm not a poet, so there ya go...I liked it.
AM
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Winslow
Dear GBText,
I'm not exactly sure what you are saying in your poem. Is it that you have to walk in your own boots to see the beauty that is here?
Regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Dear GBText,
I'm not exactly sure what you are saying in your poem. Is it that you have to walk in your own boots to see the beauty that is here?
Regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 12-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Winslow, contact an expert literary critic or a reviewer to make a literary appreciation of a piece of literary work. Nature distributes her own beauty to people according to individual interests and concerns.
Dear GBtext,
Are you saying you have to be a literary critic to critique your work? I guess you must consider yourself a literary writer and us ordinary people aren't capable of reviewing/critiquing your work.
Winslow
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Find current posts and works by me Gbtext -real name "Gbenga Alade - on Facebook.
Comment from w.j.debi
Hi GBTEXT. This is an interesting poem with a thought provoking concept. I especially like the closing lines.
Because the ways of our doings come from the Land
So that all may see our own lawns?
For you find so you earn your due
So you put on your boots to till the Land, along its own paths.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Hi GBTEXT. This is an interesting poem with a thought provoking concept. I especially like the closing lines.
Because the ways of our doings come from the Land
So that all may see our own lawns?
For you find so you earn your due
So you put on your boots to till the Land, along its own paths.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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w.j debi,your review is one of a kind.Thank you so much.
Comment from 9999pool
Life is what we make of it - we have to work for the things we do and the reasons we do what we do may not be clear to others but that does not mean we have to explain our every action and effort.
We know that in life, we must continue to thrive just to thrive. One man's poison is another man's meat - so do not judge others unless maybe ourselves only.
Let everyone work towards their beliefs and not destroy the dreams of others when we are not in the picture of understanding others.
Good write and well penned.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
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Life is what we make of it - we have to work for the things we do and the reasons we do what we do may not be clear to others but that does not mean we have to explain our every action and effort.
We know that in life, we must continue to thrive just to thrive. One man's poison is another man's meat - so do not judge others unless maybe ourselves only.
Let everyone work towards their beliefs and not destroy the dreams of others when we are not in the picture of understanding others.
Good write and well penned.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
Comment from Rondeno
The competition which you entered required a poem of three lines, with five syllables in the first line, seven in the second, and five in the third.
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The competition which you entered required a poem of three lines, with five syllables in the first line, seven in the second, and five in the third.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, gbtext, an excellent read of the communication back and forth from the boy to his love. but this is not the correct format for the 5 7 5 poem. did you enter it in the wrong contest? if so you can contact fanstory and they will put it in the correct contest.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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this is very well written, gbtext, an excellent read of the communication back and forth from the boy to his love. but this is not the correct format for the 5 7 5 poem. did you enter it in the wrong contest? if so you can contact fanstory and they will put it in the correct contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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sweetwoodjax,thank you for the corrective step you have suggested. Your comments are exceptional.
Comment from mumsyone
Oops! Your poem is not a 5-7-5. The 5-7-5 calls for 3 lines only, of 5, 7, and 5 syllables. I have to admit that the site's guidelines for this contest need some revision.
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Oops! Your poem is not a 5-7-5. The 5-7-5 calls for 3 lines only, of 5, 7, and 5 syllables. I have to admit that the site's guidelines for this contest need some revision.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
Comment from adewpearl
GB, you have misunderstood the rules for the 5/7/5 format/contest
This is supposed to be a three line poem where the first line has five syllables, the second line has seven syllables and the third line has five syllables.
You've written a thoughtful poem with good use of personification, but it is not a 5/7/5 poem
Brooke
GB, you have misunderstood the rules of the 5/7/5 format and contest
Your poem should be only three lines long and the lines should have syllable count of five/seven/five
I like your poem outside of the form
good personification of Beauty
and a thoughtful message :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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GB, you have misunderstood the rules for the 5/7/5 format/contest
This is supposed to be a three line poem where the first line has five syllables, the second line has seven syllables and the third line has five syllables.
You've written a thoughtful poem with good use of personification, but it is not a 5/7/5 poem
Brooke
GB, you have misunderstood the rules of the 5/7/5 format and contest
Your poem should be only three lines long and the lines should have syllable count of five/seven/five
I like your poem outside of the form
good personification of Beauty
and a thoughtful message :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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cyber fraud disturbing further writing now
Comment from Treischel
An intriguing exchange of dialog in this free verse poem that clearly is tied to the land and markets. It seems to do with fair Pricing. The boots, the path, the earthways, all lead me in that direction.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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An intriguing exchange of dialog in this free verse poem that clearly is tied to the land and markets. It seems to do with fair Pricing. The boots, the path, the earthways, all lead me in that direction.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Fair pricing.Fair dealing.Fairness,civility and conscience, all point in one direction.Thank you,Treischel .
Comment from SteveY
Another excellent little poem written by this talented poet. Excellent use of rhyming pattern and also has a good rhythm and flow to it as well.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Another excellent little poem written by this talented poet. Excellent use of rhyming pattern and also has a good rhythm and flow to it as well.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you,Steve Y.Your comments are quite encouraging.Let me add two more poems... Stay fit!
Alade G
