Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Palais de Poop"A collection of my poems
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Comment from rhonny
Very good writing about an on the nose subject, but necessary for food to grow. Your well chosen words flow effortlessly and your lines are good.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Very good writing about an on the nose subject, but necessary for food to grow. Your well chosen words flow effortlessly and your lines are good.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
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:O)
Comment from onkughosh19
A humorous poem very well penned. Very interesting read. "they never take time off, parental or dental" Well said.A very funny line.THe last four lines "Chillis, tomatoes and......on your vegetable patch"are a good conclusion.THe rhyme scheme has been well maintained.
An excellent poem overall.Surely recommended
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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A humorous poem very well penned. Very interesting read. "they never take time off, parental or dental" Well said.A very funny line.THe last four lines "Chillis, tomatoes and......on your vegetable patch"are a good conclusion.THe rhyme scheme has been well maintained.
An excellent poem overall.Surely recommended
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Sueellen11
Well friend I think you are on a winner with this one, loved it I don't think I would like to tour cluckingham place, great entry into the contest, good luck, so enjoy it , blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Well friend I think you are on a winner with this one, loved it I don't think I would like to tour cluckingham place, great entry into the contest, good luck, so enjoy it , blessings sueellen
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thanks, Sue-Ellen,
What a notorious name you are sporting. BTW welcome to FanStory - hope you enjoy it here.
Yes, I managed to romp to a win with this piece of silliness.
Steve
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How awesome, congratulation, I knew it was a winner right from the start, I am so happy for you, after reading so many contest poem I thought I would give it a go, so I entered 3 see how I go, again fantastic win, blessings sueellen
Comment from joneau2
Ha, ha, ha ... this poem of yours gave me quite a chuckle. Aside one objectionable word, you worded your work very well. It's obvious, you're a very accomplished author, and that's why I don't see the need for you to spoil (literally) your work by using the word beginning in "s." Crap or poop would have been better, of course only in my opinion. The "s" word just doesn't fit.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Ha, ha, ha ... this poem of yours gave me quite a chuckle. Aside one objectionable word, you worded your work very well. It's obvious, you're a very accomplished author, and that's why I don't see the need for you to spoil (literally) your work by using the word beginning in "s." Crap or poop would have been better, of course only in my opinion. The "s" word just doesn't fit.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from bob cullen
You certainly laid an egg with this one, and a golden egg at that.
This is a most entertaining piece with great rhyme and rhythm. It rolls superbly off the tongue and is very clever. I will immediately go to the contest and cast my vote. Your entry would be a worthy winner
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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You certainly laid an egg with this one, and a golden egg at that.
This is a most entertaining piece with great rhyme and rhythm. It rolls superbly off the tongue and is very clever. I will immediately go to the contest and cast my vote. Your entry would be a worthy winner
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thanks, Bob.
Yes, you voted for the winner!
Steve
Comment from dragonpoet
This humorous poem fits well with the contest. The flow and rhyme is good. It tells that there is usually good with the bad. Although you nose can barely take it, your garden thrives on it. My favorite stanza the third. I like all the alliteration and the simile of the coal miner's lung.
Good luck and keep writing
dragopoet
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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This humorous poem fits well with the contest. The flow and rhyme is good. It tells that there is usually good with the bad. Although you nose can barely take it, your garden thrives on it. My favorite stanza the third. I like all the alliteration and the simile of the coal miner's lung.
Good luck and keep writing
dragopoet
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
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You're welcome.
Joan
