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A collection of my poems

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Comment from S A Bullen
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That is excellent..... Laughed and laughed. You are such a good poet. Your sense of timing is so precise (I love that) and the wee poem... So cute and clever. Sheryn :-) I'm still having a chuckle.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
    Thanks, Sheryn

    Thankfully, although the chooks are real, the dirty job is not - we have a new large coop and a deep litter system to make cleaninbg a breeze.... thank goodness!

    Steve
reply by S A Bullen on 27-Aug-2013
    Sonya, the chook next door, escapes from time to time in my backyard - I love it. A little bit of rural in suburbia. They wander the yard with no coop. Nothing to clean up. Yay
Comment from Joan E.
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Congratulations on your well-deserved win. I admired your rhymed couplets in the quatrains and your lighthearted names, especially "Cluckingham Palace". Your ode to chicken manure and your alliteration of "c's" was quite inspired. I enjoyed entering to this contest, but reading your poem made it really fun! Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
    Thanks, Joan. This one was right up my alley!

    Steve
Comment from Jane Johnson
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Guess I can give this to you now! I was also in the contest, but won't vote if I enter. Last time I did that, my one vote cost me to lose the contest, so I made an agreement with myself to never ever ever vote if I enter. BUT, if I had voted, this is the one I would have voted for over my own. Very cute and well done. Thanks for entering and congrats!

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
    Thanks, Jane.

    I know what you mean about voting. I believe I have voted myself out of the winning position more than once, but I do like to vote anyway, just so I can get a sneal peek at how the voting is going.

    Thanks for the kind words.

    Steve
Comment from lorijean
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Absolutely love this poem I adore chickens, they are such characters, this just bounced off the page, take a peek ay my "Rooster Pimp" I think you might enjoy....

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
    Thank you!

    Steve
Comment from adewpearl
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solid use of rhyming couplets
Fantastic flow when read aloud due to good meter and good enjambment
fantastic internal rhyme in parental or dental
I'm laughing my head off over the focus of your poem LOL
great alliteration in shoveling shit in the Dungeon of Dung
great descriptive detail
Wonderful humor that has me still laughing :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
    Thanks, brooke.
    I appreciate the kind words and the six stars.
Comment from Liz Dunbee
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Your poem is marvellous. Your rhymes are great and the poem flows through to an excellent ending. I enjoyed reading this. Great humour and original ideas. Well done!

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
    Thank you!
Comment from Jackarrie
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I loved it, it is humorous, and silly, and very enjoyable,

So here I am wading through muck to my knees
While stooped at an angle of ninety degrees.
My nose is assaulted by pungent aroma -
I'm cramped, cracked and crazy and close to a coma.

Well done and good luck in the competition. Mary

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
    Thanks, Mary - glad you enjoyed.

    The silly thing is: although we do have chooks and their coop is called Cluckingham Palace, it is a large, airy room and we are trialling a new deep litter system which means it hardly smells at all and only needs cleaning out once a year.
reply by Jackarrie on 20-Aug-2013
    I am glad to hear that, now I wont feel sorry for you ha ha Mary
Comment from pipersfancy
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Well, for something "not funny, but funny", this sure gave me a chuckle this evening! Really delightful read - and remembering back on all the times my dad would order a load of sheep manure for the lawn... it brought back all kinds of fragrant memories, too!

PF

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
    Thank you!
Comment from michaelcahill
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well done. this will be hard to beat. some good entries. but this stands out. amusing yes but, very well written which is the ultimate point.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
    Thanks, Michael.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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LOL! This is marvelous. Love this part:

The Gulag of guano, the Palais de Poop.
I'll be shovelling shit in the Dungeon of Dung

I am sorry to report I used up my sixes early this week, but I did just take a moment to cast a vote for this one, which is waaaayyyyy ahead in the contest... a sure win!

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
    Phyllis, thanks for the kind review and the virtual six.
    Yes, it looks like I can start counting chickens....