Pale Sisters
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Comment from lancellot
This chapter explains a lot the premise to the reader. I think if the reader is already hooked on the tale, then this chapter is an aid. The chapter is well written. Good job.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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This chapter explains a lot the premise to the reader. I think if the reader is already hooked on the tale, then this chapter is an aid. The chapter is well written. Good job.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi Bill,
This chapter is very well-written and ties together the direction of your book. I like the idea of creating a perfectly genetic child. This is interesting concept and in some ways reminds me of the book Brave New World. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Well done.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Hi Bill,
This chapter is very well-written and ties together the direction of your book. I like the idea of creating a perfectly genetic child. This is interesting concept and in some ways reminds me of the book Brave New World. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Well done.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you, Rosalyne, for your encouragement. Bill
Comment from Sararb
Oh wow this is some scary stuff. This takes a really good imagination of a talent writer to come up with this kind of material. You keep the writer in suspense wondering what the next move will be. Sararb
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Oh wow this is some scary stuff. This takes a really good imagination of a talent writer to come up with this kind of material. You keep the writer in suspense wondering what the next move will be. Sararb
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you for keeping up with this story line. I appreciate your positive comments. Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
So, Diana was in on the conspiracy the whole time she was with Sophia Pale? In addition for Diana's cooperation, the group fabricated a false background for her, and promptly released her from prison. Raleigh Sabre set her up as a secretary in an engineering firm, too. Diana is pregnant with one of the groups spawn from wherever, outer space...hell--somewhere that's not pleasant, I'd imagine. This baby is going to be of a new race to help facilitate the coming of the Irsdon.
I am wondering if these---people, and I use that term lightly, are some ancient race from space, one that dates back to the great pyramids of Egypt. Many do speculate that there's no way the Egyptians, with their primitive knowledge of geometric building, could have constructed those pyramids without help from some otherworldly source.
I must say, I'm very intrigued, Bill.
Great writing!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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So, Diana was in on the conspiracy the whole time she was with Sophia Pale? In addition for Diana's cooperation, the group fabricated a false background for her, and promptly released her from prison. Raleigh Sabre set her up as a secretary in an engineering firm, too. Diana is pregnant with one of the groups spawn from wherever, outer space...hell--somewhere that's not pleasant, I'd imagine. This baby is going to be of a new race to help facilitate the coming of the Irsdon.
I am wondering if these---people, and I use that term lightly, are some ancient race from space, one that dates back to the great pyramids of Egypt. Many do speculate that there's no way the Egyptians, with their primitive knowledge of geometric building, could have constructed those pyramids without help from some otherworldly source.
I must say, I'm very intrigued, Bill.
Great writing!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you, Dean, I certainly appreciate your reviews. Bill
Comment from Eigle Rull
Wow! This is a very intense piece of work. I enjoyed it very much. The storyline was good, and the dialog was great. I found no errors at all. It held my interest. It was excellent.
Always with respect,
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Wow! This is a very intense piece of work. I enjoyed it very much. The storyline was good, and the dialog was great. I found no errors at all. It held my interest. It was excellent.
Always with respect,
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you for taking a look at it. Bill
