Pale Sisters
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25 total reviews
Comment from emptypage
Well, hell. This was so interesting I have to go back and check up on what is happening.
Mysterious.
Nicely presented. Short,to the point. Expressive. Wish I knew some backstory.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Well, hell. This was so interesting I have to go back and check up on what is happening.
Mysterious.
Nicely presented. Short,to the point. Expressive. Wish I knew some backstory.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Sophia Pale has been widowed (her husband was murdered while she was raped; a few months later having a baby), kidnapped (a year later by the same men who'd killed her husband and raped her), raped again (while witnessing another murder) arrested for murder ( having been framed by the real perpetrators (in what is appearing to be an organized effort) imprisoned (losing her daughter and giving birth to another in prison, which was taken away) witness to murder and raped again in prison (by the same people), and has met two women (one, Diana, who was a friend, but was at the latest murder and rape as a killer, and another, Linda, a strange new person who speaks to her without talking. Now, she's been found dead in her cell, Diana has been pardoned, and Linda is in a coma.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good chapter. I haven't seen the other chapters. I will look for them in your portfolio. This looks like a story I would be interested in.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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A very good chapter. I haven't seen the other chapters. I will look for them in your portfolio. This looks like a story I would be interested in.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Hope it keeps you interested.
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Sophia Pale has been widowed, raped, kidnapped, raped, arrested for murder, imprisoned, meets a woman whom she witnesses murdering someone, raped in prison, and meets another woman who seems to speak to her without talking.
Comment from Rasmine
The large font is really easy on the eyes--I said that last time. LOL! Weird that one is dead and the other sick. I wonder where you are going with this. I like your ideas so far. :)
Keep on writing :)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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The large font is really easy on the eyes--I said that last time. LOL! Weird that one is dead and the other sick. I wonder where you are going with this. I like your ideas so far. :)
Keep on writing :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Thanks, Rasmine, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'll have to go back and read the beginning, this is quite enthralling. Something awful has happened in that cell, and it looks like McCoy is the murderer, but I think perhaps she's not. I must go and read the other chapters now. Well written chapter. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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I'll have to go back and read the beginning, this is quite enthralling. Something awful has happened in that cell, and it looks like McCoy is the murderer, but I think perhaps she's not. I must go and read the other chapters now. Well written chapter. :) Sandra
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Sandra, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Mustang Patty
oh, wow. I didn't see that coming. But, wait - is this the end? Could it be a case of switched identities? The artwork added to the piece, and your setting of the scene was chilling. Thank you for sharing, but I hope this isn't the last part of this story.
~patty~
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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oh, wow. I didn't see that coming. But, wait - is this the end? Could it be a case of switched identities? The artwork added to the piece, and your setting of the scene was chilling. Thank you for sharing, but I hope this isn't the last part of this story.
~patty~
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thanks, Patty, for keeping in there. This is a plot twist.
Comment from frogbook
Another fast moving chapter and leaving room for much more adventure along the way. Keep writing. Bet there's lots of readers waiting.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Another fast moving chapter and leaving room for much more adventure along the way. Keep writing. Bet there's lots of readers waiting.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you, FB, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
The male guard looked to the female guard and raised his eyebrows to put the question.
"Yeah," she said, "I know their names. This one is McCoy and this one is Pale."
"Main, this is 51, break," he went on. "The names are McCoy and Pale. Pale is the one who's dead."
Your humour never fails to make me laugh, so funny and well written, I always delight in reading your fantastic work well done kindest regards, Meia x
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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The male guard looked to the female guard and raised his eyebrows to put the question.
"Yeah," she said, "I know their names. This one is McCoy and this one is Pale."
"Main, this is 51, break," he went on. "The names are McCoy and Pale. Pale is the one who's dead."
Your humour never fails to make me laugh, so funny and well written, I always delight in reading your fantastic work well done kindest regards, Meia x
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Meia, for the encouragement and upbeat review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
Wait, what? How the heck and when the heck did this happen? Did I miss something? You are going to elaborate right? I have been reading all along or at least I thought I had. I do not recall an attack on Pale that could have caused her death. I hope I didn't fall asleep while reading.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Wait, what? How the heck and when the heck did this happen? Did I miss something? You are going to elaborate right? I have been reading all along or at least I thought I had. I do not recall an attack on Pale that could have caused her death. I hope I didn't fall asleep while reading.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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You didn't miss anything. It's part of the thickening plot. Bill
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Thank God. You really faked me out there.
Comment from apky
This is well-paced and has a sense of urgency to it. You do this very well with few words, which in itself if pure gold.
I enjoyed this and you left it on a cliff-hanger that makes me want to come back for more. Well done.
~Apky
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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This is well-paced and has a sense of urgency to it. You do this very well with few words, which in itself if pure gold.
I enjoyed this and you left it on a cliff-hanger that makes me want to come back for more. Well done.
~Apky
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Apky, for staying with it. Bill
Comment from mbroyles2
The Discovery of 2 bodies, one of which appears dead, always makes for a dramatic scene.
Being that the dead woman is Pale will make for an interesting read to the next chapter.
Great stuff!
Michael
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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The Discovery of 2 bodies, one of which appears dead, always makes for a dramatic scene.
Being that the dead woman is Pale will make for an interesting read to the next chapter.
Great stuff!
Michael
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thanks, Michael, following along. Bill
