I'll Fetch a Pail of Stars for You
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6201 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
Another great photo.
This gem has passion and so much love in evey single line.
Reads well and makes sense.
It will enchant poets and readers alike.
The technique and craft here is superb.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Another great photo.
This gem has passion and so much love in evey single line.
Reads well and makes sense.
It will enchant poets and readers alike.
The technique and craft here is superb.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much, Maddie :-) Brooke
Comment from muezza56
I really enjoyed reading this really well written poem, with some really sweet imagery and a nicely chosen accompanying pic
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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I really enjoyed reading this really well written poem, with some really sweet imagery and a nicely chosen accompanying pic
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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muezza, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MelReyn
This could easily be any sort of love. Between two grown lover, between parent and child or ;) between grandparent and grandchild. The sentiment is touching and beautiful.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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This could easily be any sort of love. Between two grown lover, between parent and child or ;) between grandparent and grandchild. The sentiment is touching and beautiful.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Mel, thank you so much -yes, I intended it to be read as any sort of love. Some think when I post a picture of Sawyer it has to be ABOUT him, instead of inspired BY him :-) Brooke
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Giving the bestest presents is part of the fun of loving someone. And children's love is perfect. So is your sweet poem, Brooke. You've captured the open-hearted generosity of childhood. :) nancy
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Giving the bestest presents is part of the fun of loving someone. And children's love is perfect. So is your sweet poem, Brooke. You've captured the open-hearted generosity of childhood. :) nancy
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Nancy, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is such an interesting poem. Beautifully written and the reader can picture someone in their life they would say this too. Very enjoyable!
Wonderful job Ad!
:)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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This is such an interesting poem. Beautifully written and the reader can picture someone in their life they would say this too. Very enjoyable!
Wonderful job Ad!
:)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you, Aurora, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
A Nanna's love shouts out loud in every line. If only we could all find such skills as you proclaim. Lovely poem.
Reg
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Dear Brooke,
A Nanna's love shouts out loud in every line. If only we could all find such skills as you proclaim. Lovely poem.
Reg
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Reg, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barleygirl
This is a very excellent poem & unfortunately, I just used up my last 6-stars" & it's only Wednesday. But there have been so many superb pieces on the website this week! *smile* I'm not "into" counting rhythms, but this combination really does add a great beat to your words. I'm typically not wild about extreme professions of love, but in this case, it's playful & clever enough (especially knowing it's written for a child) to be forgiven for the display of unabashed slobbering. Great job! I love the imagery united by a theme of nature.
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This is a very excellent poem & unfortunately, I just used up my last 6-stars" & it's only Wednesday. But there have been so many superb pieces on the website this week! *smile* I'm not "into" counting rhythms, but this combination really does add a great beat to your words. I'm typically not wild about extreme professions of love, but in this case, it's playful & clever enough (especially knowing it's written for a child) to be forgiven for the display of unabashed slobbering. Great job! I love the imagery united by a theme of nature.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
Comment from lancellot
That was good. It reads of a simple love that requires only most basic of things, a little smile to show appreciation. I like this form also, it speaks to the talent it take to maintain it. Good work
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That was good. It reads of a simple love that requires only most basic of things, a little smile to show appreciation. I like this form also, it speaks to the talent it take to maintain it. Good work
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
Comment from Dibul
I'll give a hundred smiles to get these things done for me! :) Fetch a pail of stars, make the sunset last, hasten into spring, capture the sun's rays... great imagination here. I like the way you repeat the last line of every stanza in the first of the next one. Is there a name to this form? Sawyer looks so cute trying to conquer that rock with his little feet and hands! :)
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I'll give a hundred smiles to get these things done for me! :) Fetch a pail of stars, make the sunset last, hasten into spring, capture the sun's rays... great imagination here. I like the way you repeat the last line of every stanza in the first of the next one. Is there a name to this form? Sawyer looks so cute trying to conquer that rock with his little feet and hands! :)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
Comment from writerwish
Such a absolutely wonderful poem of uncondtional love of a grandma. We would sure do ANYTHING for that beautiful smile. You say this so well. I got to save this one.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Such a absolutely wonderful poem of uncondtional love of a grandma. We would sure do ANYTHING for that beautiful smile. You say this so well. I got to save this one.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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writerwish, thank you so much :-) Brooke
