senryu (squirrels scurry)
senryu22 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Debbie,
Squirrels....Oh crap and I was having a really lovely summer with no squirrels. When I get home my back yard will be a disaster from them munching acorns from my oaks.
Messy rodents. Nicely penned and gave me a laugh then a grown ... Nicely penned within the guidelines of a senryu.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Debbie,
Squirrels....Oh crap and I was having a really lovely summer with no squirrels. When I get home my back yard will be a disaster from them munching acorns from my oaks.
Messy rodents. Nicely penned and gave me a laugh then a grown ... Nicely penned within the guidelines of a senryu.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thanks, Maureen. They like to nest in my roof--naughty creatures. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
So very true...they're kind of like children...I wonder what goes on in their minds....I'm sure it would be quite interesting if I could know. Love the little furry creatures. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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So very true...they're kind of like children...I wonder what goes on in their minds....I'm sure it would be quite interesting if I could know. Love the little furry creatures. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thanks, Evelyn. Have a blessed day~Debbie
Comment from Gungalo
squirrels scurry
stopping only to
stare back
So true girl. They are the busiest little buggers and never without food. Gotta admire their willingness to store away.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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squirrels scurry
stopping only to
stare back
So true girl. They are the busiest little buggers and never without food. Gotta admire their willingness to store away.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Don't you wonder what they think of us as we stare at them? Thanks, Debbie
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Nah, I know. They think we are crazy for not doing the same thing. LOL
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie,
there must be a few squirrels around at the moment over your way, I has a few writers complaining about their blatant disrespect for the sanity of the landlord... They look kinda cute to me, but I'm a bit of a tree hugging animal lover... Loved all your S words in this senryu... Nice imagery and well constructed.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Hi Debbie,
there must be a few squirrels around at the moment over your way, I has a few writers complaining about their blatant disrespect for the sanity of the landlord... They look kinda cute to me, but I'm a bit of a tree hugging animal lover... Loved all your S words in this senryu... Nice imagery and well constructed.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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James,
They are cute and so interesting to watch. I wonder what they think when they watch us back??? Best wishes, my friend~Debbie xx
Comment from me_tudor
This is a cute poem and a cute picture to go with it. It is true that they don't stop for much except to stare at you if you get to close. Great job!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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This is a cute poem and a cute picture to go with it. It is true that they don't stop for much except to stare at you if you get to close. Great job!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much~Debbie
Comment from donaldww
That's a good observation of squirrels you've created. I see them every day as they dart up and down trees, looking for nuts and whatever else they eat. They also can run across overhead wires at a very fast pace, and jump from branch to branch.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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That's a good observation of squirrels you've created. I see them every day as they dart up and down trees, looking for nuts and whatever else they eat. They also can run across overhead wires at a very fast pace, and jump from branch to branch.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Yes, they are fun to watch. I wonder if they enjoy watching us, too. Thanks, Donald~Debbie
Comment from Winslow
They do, don't they. I started my hunting career by chasing squirrels. They are not only fun to watch but good to eat. (LOL)
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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They do, don't they. I started my hunting career by chasing squirrels. They are not only fun to watch but good to eat. (LOL)
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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I can't say I have ever eaten a squirrel, I think I prefer watching them. Thank you so much for your review~Debbie
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You should try them. They are one of the best wild game meats. (LOL) My dad's favorite dish was squirrel in milk gravy over mash potatoes. We have become too urbanized in this country and people are losing touch with nature. Remember we get milk from the grocery store and our beef from there too. (LOL)
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment from wiljacro
HI! You seem to have hit the nail on the head with this one, as your description of the squirrel's behaviour is exactly what they do. They scurry away from us but can't help stopping for a second to take a backward look! Well observed! wiljacro.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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HI! You seem to have hit the nail on the head with this one, as your description of the squirrel's behaviour is exactly what they do. They scurry away from us but can't help stopping for a second to take a backward look! Well observed! wiljacro.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much for the kind words and stars!!! Debbie
Comment from Wendy Garcia
You pegged the squirrel's character exactly! The way you structured the poem looked like it would be haiku. I was disappointed it wasn't.
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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You pegged the squirrel's character exactly! The way you structured the poem looked like it would be haiku. I was disappointed it wasn't.
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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This isn't a haiku because it uses personification. It also has no cutter as a haiku would. I would appreciate you looking at it again keeping these in mind. Haiku and senryu are structured much the same but do have these unique and subtle differences~Debbie
Comment from Adri7enne
Lots of "s' sounds, and good alliterations. Forms a cute picture in my imagination. They can be bold little creatures, in spite of the nervous energy. I enjoyed the scene. Well done, Debbie.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Lots of "s' sounds, and good alliterations. Forms a cute picture in my imagination. They can be bold little creatures, in spite of the nervous energy. I enjoyed the scene. Well done, Debbie.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much~Debbie
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Thank you so very much~Debbie
