The Dream World...
What we should strive for in our other life.10 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
Even though not all of your lines are iambic it reads like the English sonnet. Your rhyming pattern is solid, the flow is smooth, you have carefully chosen expressive words and the theme is superb. I've nary a six to me name. well done, chey
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Hi Mike,
Even though not all of your lines are iambic it reads like the English sonnet. Your rhyming pattern is solid, the flow is smooth, you have carefully chosen expressive words and the theme is superb. I've nary a six to me name. well done, chey
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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I have a Facebook friend from England put up a sonnet to say nighty night written by one, "Willie Shakespeare." I spent about an hour writing it, while conversing with another facebook friend. Usually these get me in trouble here as I used the form of an English Sonnet, but didn't worry about minding my Iambs.
I really appreciate this review and thank you for it and the flattering compliments. Haven't been on much but still got poetry oozing out of me. Doing more locally as well.
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming in English sonnet format
the meter is not iambic, but when read aloud it flows well anyway
I like your strong verb choices in your imperative statements, like savor, embark...
Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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solid rhyming in English sonnet format
the meter is not iambic, but when read aloud it flows well anyway
I like your strong verb choices in your imperative statements, like savor, embark...
Brooke
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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I have a Facebook friend from England put up a sonnet to say nighty night written by one, "Willie Shakespeare." I spent about an hour writing it, while conversing with another facebook friend. Usually these get me in trouble here as I used the form of an English Sonnet, but didn't worry about minding my Iambs.
I thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
Sound advice. I am reading this just as dawn sheds early light. Sometimes my dreams are not limited to those while my head is on the pillow. Even in chaos at times my mind seeks refuge.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Sound advice. I am reading this just as dawn sheds early light. Sometimes my dreams are not limited to those while my head is on the pillow. Even in chaos at times my mind seeks refuge.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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A Facebook friend put up a sonnet from, "Willie Shakespeare," about going to bed, so I wanted something to great her in the morning and felt with the work involved, it was worth posting here. I thank you for this review!
Comment from rhonny
A nice poem about dreams and dreaming. Painting a picture for us of the atmosphere of dream timed. Lines are fairly well flowing but could be tightened up a bit.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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A nice poem about dreams and dreaming. Painting a picture for us of the atmosphere of dream timed. Lines are fairly well flowing but could be tightened up a bit.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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I thank you for this review. Mike
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:O) that's ok Mike.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Another dream world prescribed for ushering or striving for other positive stand of living approach there, well ordered and placed in a sonnet mood having rhythmic thematic couplet concordance. 01/809
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Another dream world prescribed for ushering or striving for other positive stand of living approach there, well ordered and placed in a sonnet mood having rhythmic thematic couplet concordance. 01/809
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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I am very honored by this review, the compliments and the wonderful rating. Mike
Comment from Matthew M.
Some times it is just so dang hard to get to sleep. I would love to just let my mind drift into this dream world, but every time I seem to get comfortable there's another thing goofing up my life. Though tonight I am going to try my hardest to escape to that world.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Some times it is just so dang hard to get to sleep. I would love to just let my mind drift into this dream world, but every time I seem to get comfortable there's another thing goofing up my life. Though tonight I am going to try my hardest to escape to that world.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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I work a split shift and live off a series of naps during the week, as well have a dog and a cat that sleep all the time, except when I am home to sleep. I enjoyed this review, Mike.
Comment from colow_201185
A nice depiction of the signifance of dreams. There are three things that I'm curious about. on the 3rd line are you saying "blessed"? and the 7th line do mean "seem"? Also is this a picture that you drew yourself? because it's quite interesting. This is still good work. Thanks for the share.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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A nice depiction of the signifance of dreams. There are three things that I'm curious about. on the 3rd line are you saying "blessed"? and the 7th line do mean "seem"? Also is this a picture that you drew yourself? because it's quite interesting. This is still good work. Thanks for the share.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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No, both blest and seme are in the unabridged dictionary. With blest, I have usually get downgraded for tailoring the word to fit the rhyme, despite it is merely a more archaic usage. Seme, is more in relation to an expression to a literary idea, but also has a symbolic usage as well. I thank you for taking the time to review my work, Mike,
Comment from PhysioRuss
Flowed well, well rhymed, interesting content.
I really liked the dreamy almost ethereal way the poem stayed within the form whilst having wisps of thought always threatening to drift away.
Excellent piece.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Flowed well, well rhymed, interesting content.
I really liked the dreamy almost ethereal way the poem stayed within the form whilst having wisps of thought always threatening to drift away.
Excellent piece.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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I thank you for the compliments and this review, Mike
Comment from Kingsland
Ah... The dream world arrives in poetic designs. I liked the way this poem reads so very smoothly. Dreams are always a good subject for poetic thoughts. This was a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read and responded to... John
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Ah... The dream world arrives in poetic designs. I liked the way this poem reads so very smoothly. Dreams are always a good subject for poetic thoughts. This was a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read and responded to... John
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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I have a Facebook poetic friend and we both lost a legendary friend and beat poet, and she put up a poem about sleep, which turned out to be written by, "Willie Shakespeare." I didn't intend to do a strict sonnet, but use elements of the form to get across my ideas.
I enjoyed this review and the compliments, Mike.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer stays consistent with the Sonnet rhyme scheme. The piece rhymes well. The piece flows well as the writer does a good job of not forcing the rhymes. I see nothing that I would change in this piece. Good job.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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The writer stays consistent with the Sonnet rhyme scheme. The piece rhymes well. The piece flows well as the writer does a good job of not forcing the rhymes. I see nothing that I would change in this piece. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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I appreciate the review and the compliments and thanks you for both. Mike
