Moan
A Moan-Oh-Tetra...39 total reviews
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, P
Monoryhme usually seems forced and boring to me, but on the contrary here.
Some subtle naughty 'moan' lines, and particularly raunchy 2nd last line which add to the fun and great entertainment of this perfectly metered write.
I would 'sixer' you, as its worth it, but as its no longer promoted, that wouldn't give it extra exposure, so I'll save my sixers for your future exceptional posts.
Cheers, Ted
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Hi, P
Monoryhme usually seems forced and boring to me, but on the contrary here.
Some subtle naughty 'moan' lines, and particularly raunchy 2nd last line which add to the fun and great entertainment of this perfectly metered write.
I would 'sixer' you, as its worth it, but as its no longer promoted, that wouldn't give it extra exposure, so I'll save my sixers for your future exceptional posts.
Cheers, Ted
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Well hello my little furry growler...haha
Cute, naughty review and I thank you muchly for your thoughtfully placed comments. I find the mono rhyme a little boring if not done right but I wanted the whole hog on the moan-oh-rhymes so did the combo monotetra thing too. So glad you could handle my moanfest.
Cheers and thanks for dropping by
Hugs P
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Comment from Frankeddy
Excellent poem, arouses curiosity and creates excitement for the reader.
Your gift of rhyming and humor stand out so well in this verse.
We found it very arousing.
Keep up the great work.
Frankeddy
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Excellent poem, arouses curiosity and creates excitement for the reader.
Your gift of rhyming and humor stand out so well in this verse.
We found it very arousing.
Keep up the great work.
Frankeddy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LOL Thanks Ed. Glad you can appreciate my sense of humour...and a good moan of course.
A sixer ALWAYS welcomed. Thank you very much.
Cheers P
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Comment from djsaxon
Why am I wasting yet another six pack on established excellence? Because I can. Evocative, provocative and wonderful. Lubs ya - Sax
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Why am I wasting yet another six pack on established excellence? Because I can. Evocative, provocative and wonderful. Lubs ya - Sax
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Why? Becaus ya lubs me moaning! LMAO
Thanks for the sixer my cheese and cracker man. Hope you are well...
Hugs Adelaide
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Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a very sensual poem. The author makes that point very clear to the reader all the way through this poem. I like the ending and it adds a bit of humor to the whole piece. Well written.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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This is a very sensual poem. The author makes that point very clear to the reader all the way through this poem. I like the ending and it adds a bit of humor to the whole piece. Well written.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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LOL I was hoping for a combo of erotic and humour so it seems I've managed it. Also hoping to make a point.
I think I got there LMAO
Thanks for stopping by and I welcome your comments and review.
Cheers P
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Great stuff.
Comment from steevie
I think you should sit down with your hubby and have a frank discussion with him. He needs to know that there has to be way more moaning in your relationship with him and far less D.I.Y. projects going on. LMAO
An entertaining write. Pee, Pee
So get crackin' and chat with your hubby ... have wine while you chat, it'll help :o)
stevo
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hugs too
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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I think you should sit down with your hubby and have a frank discussion with him. He needs to know that there has to be way more moaning in your relationship with him and far less D.I.Y. projects going on. LMAO
An entertaining write. Pee, Pee
So get crackin' and chat with your hubby ... have wine while you chat, it'll help :o)
stevo
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hugs too
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LOL Yes I agree...although I sometimes find the DIY method MOST effective. *smirk*
So anyways, thanks for a corker review. Hugs Pee xx
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If you keep that up, you're going to put hubby out of the only chore he does ... LOL
Perhaps you can enlighten him on his skills LMAO
Have fun
stay safe
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have
more
fun
stevo
saying, Hey ya, sweetie ...
Comment from Zue65
You are funny, but this poem is not for little children I am sure. The lines are titillating with sexy words and you delivered the message intended for your readers to receive. God bless.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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You are funny, but this poem is not for little children I am sure. The lines are titillating with sexy words and you delivered the message intended for your readers to receive. God bless.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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No definitely NOT for the kids I'm afraid. Much appreciate you stopping by.
Cheers P
Comment from Joan E.
I'm amazed you could carry off this sensuality in mono-verse rhyme. I liked your variations on the repeating line and your playful, surprise, shall we say--ending! LOL -Joan
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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I'm amazed you could carry off this sensuality in mono-verse rhyme. I liked your variations on the repeating line and your playful, surprise, shall we say--ending! LOL -Joan
Comment Written 06-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LOL Thanks so much Joan. Glad you enjoyed the moan-oh-rhymes
Cheers P
PS Always the surprise package...LMAO
Also a little fed up in this one to be quite honest! LOL
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Moan away--I hope this too shall pass! Hugs and happy weekend- Joan
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Cheesh! As one who's been celibate for YEARS, this poem makes me want to go out and take somebody down! LOL Seriously, this erotic poem is very skillfully-written and crystal clear in theme!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Cheesh! As one who's been celibate for YEARS, this poem makes me want to go out and take somebody down! LOL Seriously, this erotic poem is very skillfully-written and crystal clear in theme!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Haha...well get out there amongst it then. You just need a full diaphram of air and those erotic moans can just go ohhhhhhnnnnn forever! LMAO
Thanks for stopping by Janice.
Cheers P
Comment from Jackarrie
I knew what I was reading but thought I had a bad mind, but it turned out I hadn't it was the poet who was being playful, with words as well. and she was really moaning about it.
Well written I eventually enjoyed it.
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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I knew what I was reading but thought I had a bad mind, but it turned out I hadn't it was the poet who was being playful, with words as well. and she was really moaning about it.
Well written I eventually enjoyed it.
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 06-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks for stopping by and yes this poet is very playful at times. LOL
Glad you enjoyed. Cheers P
Comment from the blue pixel
OMG! I sure recognize the form of this one but the content is super clever and some of your rhymes are hilarious - "phallic clone" "cologne", "note in your trombone" etc. Brilliant and so graphical. I had to read and review it before I definitely go to bed and I'm glad I did. You too have lost nothing of your naughty wit and skill. Great stuff. xx Pix
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2013
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OMG! I sure recognize the form of this one but the content is super clever and some of your rhymes are hilarious - "phallic clone" "cologne", "note in your trombone" etc. Brilliant and so graphical. I had to read and review it before I definitely go to bed and I'm glad I did. You too have lost nothing of your naughty wit and skill. Great stuff. xx Pix
Comment Written 06-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2013
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Hey sweetie, thank you but I just wanted you to read and enjoy. Go rest. I DO very much appreciate the review.
Nice length too...teehee...talk soon mate. Nighters!
Closet xoxo
