noble steed
3/5/3 poem52 total reviews
Comment from purrfect tale
I'm an animal lover, so I enjoyed the sentiment of your poem. The last line sounded like it could be a plea to the horse or an acknowledgement of what the horse has already done. I like that it's left to the reader to decide which.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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I'm an animal lover, so I enjoyed the sentiment of your poem. The last line sounded like it could be a plea to the horse or an acknowledgement of what the horse has already done. I like that it's left to the reader to decide which.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much! :-)
Comment from elchupakabra
This hits home for a few reasons. There's a friend of mine I used to party with back home in Soo, Ontario that we all used to call 'the Noble Steed'. Also, my mom's a big horse lover and she would love this piece as well! Thanks so much for sharing, great little work here! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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This hits home for a few reasons. There's a friend of mine I used to party with back home in Soo, Ontario that we all used to call 'the Noble Steed'. Also, my mom's a big horse lover and she would love this piece as well! Thanks so much for sharing, great little work here! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thanks! :-)
Comment from teafor2
Author--Your haiku is now non-traditional (3-5-3). You've
done your tweaking, and it was I who misunderstood the
writing prompt. Your title, picture and sparse words re-
late your intentions quite well. I have upgraded my rat-
ing Good luck in the contest. teafor2
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Author--Your haiku is now non-traditional (3-5-3). You've
done your tweaking, and it was I who misunderstood the
writing prompt. Your title, picture and sparse words re-
late your intentions quite well. I have upgraded my rat-
ing Good luck in the contest. teafor2
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Ah, thank you for catching that error! I had corrected the wording and forgot to check the syllable count. It is 3-5-3 now.
Comment from Val Crisson
I wouldn't worry about anything being correct, as far as haiku goes. What I really liked about this little five seven five entry is the longing (or what I feel as longing) in the last line. Horses provide us with the magic of riding, and this is how this line left me.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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I wouldn't worry about anything being correct, as far as haiku goes. What I really liked about this little five seven five entry is the longing (or what I feel as longing) in the last line. Horses provide us with the magic of riding, and this is how this line left me.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much. :-)
Comment from Zue65
Another perfect 3-5-3 poem carrying a vital message on faith, yes when a noble steed walks through life and it carries you as it travels, life becomes smooth. We need a buddy to get us through, and God is the greatest buddy we can have. God bless.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Another perfect 3-5-3 poem carrying a vital message on faith, yes when a noble steed walks through life and it carries you as it travels, life becomes smooth. We need a buddy to get us through, and God is the greatest buddy we can have. God bless.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much. :-)
Comment from Cookie333
Not sure, was it a 3-5-3- you could easily correct if that is the case: canters through 'my' life. I love it just as it is but then I love anything animals, I wish you well in the contest, I shall look for the booth,
k
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Not sure, was it a 3-5-3- you could easily correct if that is the case: canters through 'my' life. I love it just as it is but then I love anything animals, I wish you well in the contest, I shall look for the booth,
k
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much. :-) I corrected the syllable count.
Comment from RYME4U
This is just fine. You've done a great job with this haiku. I like how you describe the horse and your journey through life with him. Well done
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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This is just fine. You've done a great job with this haiku. I like how you describe the horse and your journey through life with him. Well done
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much. :-)
Comment from Bayberry
I used to have horses many moons ago so naturally was drawn to your poem because of the title. It's a super contest entry and I enjoyed reading it very much. Best wishes. :>
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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I used to have horses many moons ago so naturally was drawn to your poem because of the title. It's a super contest entry and I enjoyed reading it very much. Best wishes. :>
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much. :-)
Comment from Martin Chan
The poem "Noble Steed" is 3-5-3 short form 3 line poetry written about a steed
galloping through life, that carry me, a nice theme with nice choice of words. It is written as a haiku poem prompt entry but it is not a haiku which should have 5-7-5, or a total of 17 syllables.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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The poem "Noble Steed" is 3-5-3 short form 3 line poetry written about a steed
galloping through life, that carry me, a nice theme with nice choice of words. It is written as a haiku poem prompt entry but it is not a haiku which should have 5-7-5, or a total of 17 syllables.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Actually that is I'm correct. The haiku instructor for this site posted a message on this contest listing stating that haiku does not have 5/7/5 but 3/5/3.
So I am following his advice. Thank you for your feedback.
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Yes, there are different forms of haiku one can write, but in a contest entry, we have to write according to the writing prompt. Some prompt says " Haiku in (17 or less") but this one says 5-7-5 in each line or 17 syllables total in the prompt.I like your poem.
Thanks.
Comment from God's Writer
It is rare that I find a Haiku that is a true Haiku. Most are just American adaptations. You only missed a perfect Haiku by using a word ending with ing. Other than that you use no connecting words. Great job
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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It is rare that I find a Haiku that is a true Haiku. Most are just American adaptations. You only missed a perfect Haiku by using a word ending with ing. Other than that you use no connecting words. Great job
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you. I will correct that error. :-)
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Great!!!!! Then you will have a true Haiku in its purest form. I can tell by your writing that it will not be hard for you to do. Try a Haikai poem. They are great in honing writing skills. If you are interested in the rules send me a message and I will be happy to give them to you with an example.
