All Dressed In White
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Comment from Kidlike101
Bad dog!!!
Or is it good dog? Nice well written story from a very interesting point of view.
Gotta feel sorry for "Angel" though. best of luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Bad dog!!!
Or is it good dog? Nice well written story from a very interesting point of view.
Gotta feel sorry for "Angel" though. best of luck with the contest!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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LOL Thank you so much for the great review.
Jan
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is superb, clever, original, and has a very good chance to win, I think. You do need to fix something, tho. You pasted formatted text in the "basic" posting window. YOu have to use the "advanced" window to paste formatted text. This is why you have all those ugly diamonds scattered around. YOu can fix it by going into EDIT and selecting "advanced" under the posting window, then paste a fresh copy in again.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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This is superb, clever, original, and has a very good chance to win, I think. You do need to fix something, tho. You pasted formatted text in the "basic" posting window. YOu have to use the "advanced" window to paste formatted text. This is why you have all those ugly diamonds scattered around. YOu can fix it by going into EDIT and selecting "advanced" under the posting window, then paste a fresh copy in again.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much, Phyllis! I think I have the editing issues fixed. I deeply appreciate your help and of course the fabulous six stars!
:-)
Jan
Comment from humpwhistle
Good story, Janilou. Certainly an interesting
perspective on the prompt. I think I first suspected 'dog'
when Ed touseled her hair.
Now there is a bitch with some attitude.
I'm sure someone has already tld you about the formatting problem, right? All those little boxes?
Best of luck with the Committee.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Good story, Janilou. Certainly an interesting
perspective on the prompt. I think I first suspected 'dog'
when Ed touseled her hair.
Now there is a bitch with some attitude.
I'm sure someone has already tld you about the formatting problem, right? All those little boxes?
Best of luck with the Committee.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thanks, Lee! Yes, someone did mention the little boxes. I swear they weren't there when I went to bed at 2am after finishing it up! I think I have them all corrected now, along with some other nits reviewers have mentioned and even more I found by myself. Someone needs to give that dog a few lessons on how to write. Hee, hee! Or maybe, I should learn to write earlier in the day! LOL
Many thanks!
Jan
Comment from Jackarrie
an interesting story and funny too, the groom did not want to be married, that was a twist in the normal story of the groom left devastated.
Ed, who appears to have regained some of his composure, squats down next to me and gives me a hug. He's relieved. I can sense it. It's all I can do not to wiggle right into his arms. I settle for wagging my tail.
Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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an interesting story and funny too, the groom did not want to be married, that was a twist in the normal story of the groom left devastated.
Ed, who appears to have regained some of his composure, squats down next to me and gives me a hug. He's relieved. I can sense it. It's all I can do not to wiggle right into his arms. I settle for wagging my tail.
Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much. :-)
Jan
Comment from amarherig14
I found the story very entertaining. The dog and the bride did not like each other .The bride was missing because the dog buried her partially in the backyard after he spiked her drink . What a smart dog! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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I found the story very entertaining. The dog and the bride did not like each other .The bride was missing because the dog buried her partially in the backyard after he spiked her drink . What a smart dog! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much. :-)
Jan
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You are welcome,Janilou.warm regards,Margie.
Comment from cvcopac
Pretty good writing, I enjoyed it. I feel sort of sorry for old Ed though, but I guess he's well protected. My only problem was with the little boxes that appear at the beginning and end of words and sentences, randomly, throughout. Best of luck in the contest. Kenny
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Pretty good writing, I enjoyed it. I feel sort of sorry for old Ed though, but I guess he's well protected. My only problem was with the little boxes that appear at the beginning and end of words and sentences, randomly, throughout. Best of luck in the contest. Kenny
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much, Kenny. :-)
Jan
Comment from Raver
Brilliant, well written and witty. I liked the way you wrote it from the first person (the dog) point of view. It was clever the way no one finds out that the person narrating is actually the dog until the very end. What a crafty dog.
Enjoyable read.
Well done
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Brilliant, well written and witty. I liked the way you wrote it from the first person (the dog) point of view. It was clever the way no one finds out that the person narrating is actually the dog until the very end. What a crafty dog.
Enjoyable read.
Well done
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you, Raver! I deeply appreciate the six stars and your very kind words.
Jan
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Your welcome.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Now that is one strange twist - the narrator is a dog? You caught my attention from the very start and held it throughout. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Now that is one strange twist - the narrator is a dog? You caught my attention from the very start and held it throughout. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much! :-)
Jan
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My pleasure.
Comment from Sankey
Just one spelling error...."Geez, Ed, breath" was an 'e' left off the 'breathe'.
Very good gutsy story.
Reminds me of the joke about the 80 year old marrying an 18 year old all the friends said why are you marrying an 18 yr old?" He sighed 'Well if she dies she dies!!"
Good story.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Just one spelling error...."Geez, Ed, breath" was an 'e' left off the 'breathe'.
Very good gutsy story.
Reminds me of the joke about the 80 year old marrying an 18 year old all the friends said why are you marrying an 18 yr old?" He sighed 'Well if she dies she dies!!"
Good story.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you so very much. I corrected that error. I wrote this at 1am in the morning and I should know better! :-)
Jan
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Ahh a young person?? I used to burn the candle at both ends not now over 60 hehe.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Danilou, loved this contest entry. This doggie is so innocent and leaves me thinking - who was the biggest devil, the bodyguard or Angel. Your pace was fast and your story interesting. Well done. Best wishes. luv jada
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Hi Danilou, loved this contest entry. This doggie is so innocent and leaves me thinking - who was the biggest devil, the bodyguard or Angel. Your pace was fast and your story interesting. Well done. Best wishes. luv jada
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much. :-)
Jan
