Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 65 "Waiting"Small and Specialty Poems
10 total reviews
Comment from Bojenn
This is a wonderful entry. Hat's off to those of you who attempts this type of poetry.
Your is easy to follow.
Good work,
Bojenn
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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This is a wonderful entry. Hat's off to those of you who attempts this type of poetry.
Your is easy to follow.
Good work,
Bojenn
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thank you Bojenn.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired the onomatopoeia and the swinging sensation created by your words and the repeated motion of the palindrome. Best wishes to us both in the contest--wouldn't it be delightful if we tied! -Joan
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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I admired the onomatopoeia and the swinging sensation created by your words and the repeated motion of the palindrome. Best wishes to us both in the contest--wouldn't it be delightful if we tied! -Joan
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Thanks Jaon. Thank would be something.
Comment from sunnilicious
My parents use to have a grandfather clock. It only worked some of the time. But I use to love to look at that brass pendulum. You brought back a nice memory. And this poem came out quite nicely. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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My parents use to have a grandfather clock. It only worked some of the time. But I use to love to look at that brass pendulum. You brought back a nice memory. And this poem came out quite nicely. Excellent work.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much sunnilicious
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
Your poem captures both the relentlessness and monotony of time. This, I predict, will be a very strong entry into the contest. Best wishes and good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Your poem captures both the relentlessness and monotony of time. This, I predict, will be a very strong entry into the contest. Best wishes and good luck!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you Cry the Vile Rebel. That would be awesome.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was an interesting Palindrome which is also great shape poetry. I absolutely love that shape. You picked a good subject and the visuals are outstanding! I can almost hear the "tic toc" of the clock. You fulfilled the contest requirements fine, and this would make a strong contender.
The picture is stunning, and compliments the poem well.
Good luck in the contest with this winning entry.
Love, Y.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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This was an interesting Palindrome which is also great shape poetry. I absolutely love that shape. You picked a good subject and the visuals are outstanding! I can almost hear the "tic toc" of the clock. You fulfilled the contest requirements fine, and this would make a strong contender.
The picture is stunning, and compliments the poem well.
Good luck in the contest with this winning entry.
Love, Y.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much yeltel . Very encouraging comments.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Awesome, my friend, simply outstanding!
It's so captivating how the poem encapsulates time and the meticulous, undeterred swinging of a pendulum. Grandfather clocks are an especially good example. Many associate the word, "pendulum" with that infamous torture device used during the dark ages. I suppose they, too, deliver their own precise stoppage of time...
Fantastic work, Mr. T!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Awesome, my friend, simply outstanding!
It's so captivating how the poem encapsulates time and the meticulous, undeterred swinging of a pendulum. Grandfather clocks are an especially good example. Many associate the word, "pendulum" with that infamous torture device used during the dark ages. I suppose they, too, deliver their own precise stoppage of time...
Fantastic work, Mr. T!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thanks Dean. Yes, I thought a pendulum would be right up your alley,
Congratulations on you award.
Comment from Capricorn30
A well-penned commentary expressing the slow movement of seconds as life is measured by languid moments of the ticking clocks' rhythm.
Indeed, time does not always pass by quickly.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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A well-penned commentary expressing the slow movement of seconds as life is measured by languid moments of the ticking clocks' rhythm.
Indeed, time does not always pass by quickly.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thanks . Appreciate your comments
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent palindrome. It meets the requirements of the form. It has flow and structural symmetry which is visually pleasing. As always you are the master of poetic technique. It was pleasing.
Preston
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent palindrome. It meets the requirements of the form. It has flow and structural symmetry which is visually pleasing. As always you are the master of poetic technique. It was pleasing.
Preston
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you Preston. This was a very difficult write. The style is very limiting. I appreciate your input.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Treischel,
The palindrome poem is nicely done, and it tells its story well. The imagery is outstanding as time becomes the focal point.
Time can be our enemy, or it can be our friend. As we exist in our society of schedules and appointed times, it is a major part of our lives. I haven't decided if the invention of the clock was a blessing or a cursing. Time seems always to bring with it stress.
I enjoyed the read. of color scheme, format, and graphics complete the work.
Curtis
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Treischel,
The palindrome poem is nicely done, and it tells its story well. The imagery is outstanding as time becomes the focal point.
Time can be our enemy, or it can be our friend. As we exist in our society of schedules and appointed times, it is a major part of our lives. I haven't decided if the invention of the clock was a blessing or a cursing. Time seems always to bring with it stress.
I enjoyed the read. of color scheme, format, and graphics complete the work.
Curtis
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you Curtis. Your observations on time create a good question.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem makes perfect use of repetition to indicate how we feel when we're waiting . . . waiting--regardless of what we're expecting.
Makes me think to Poe's "The Pit and the Pendulum"!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Your well-written poem makes perfect use of repetition to indicate how we feel when we're waiting . . . waiting--regardless of what we're expecting.
Makes me think to Poe's "The Pit and the Pendulum"!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you Janice. I purposely left out what waiting for is. Yes, I did think of Poe too.
