Visible Flight of Invisible Might!
An invisible might drives one to a visible flight.78 total reviews
Comment from chasennov
'Visible Flight Of Invisible Might.' An excellent poem you have created here which I enjoyed reading. I also thought your formulation was quite good.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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'Visible Flight Of Invisible Might.' An excellent poem you have created here which I enjoyed reading. I also thought your formulation was quite good.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Hi Chasennov,
Thank you very much for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
BEAUTIFUL poem! Very well written and enjoyable to read. I like the strong messages of faith and guidance. A well penned submission for the faith contest.
GREAT job!
:)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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BEAUTIFUL poem! Very well written and enjoyable to read. I like the strong messages of faith and guidance. A well penned submission for the faith contest.
GREAT job!
:)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
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Hi
Thanks a lot for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
Comment from emjaihammond
You make a lot of very good points in this piece. I think the last two quatrains are especially strong in content and style. I won't attempt to recopy the whole thing but the words "Have faith in God to be wise, brave and bold,
The craved success is yours as unalloyed gold!" These words hold a kind of strength and hope. I liked.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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You make a lot of very good points in this piece. I think the last two quatrains are especially strong in content and style. I won't attempt to recopy the whole thing but the words "Have faith in God to be wise, brave and bold,
The craved success is yours as unalloyed gold!" These words hold a kind of strength and hope. I liked.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
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Hi
Thanks a lot for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there RP
This is a superbly written and crafted testimony to your love and faith in the Lord. It is well thought out. it is a superb Faith Poetry Contest entry
Bear
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Hey there RP
This is a superbly written and crafted testimony to your love and faith in the Lord. It is well thought out. it is a superb Faith Poetry Contest entry
Bear
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
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Hi G.B.Smith,
Thanks a lot for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
Comment from Dragus
A truly great piece. I love the use of a birds invisible might carrying it higher being a symbol for belief in God and his invisible might which is always there for us if we strive for it.
well written.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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A truly great piece. I love the use of a birds invisible might carrying it higher being a symbol for belief in God and his invisible might which is always there for us if we strive for it.
well written.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
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Hi
Thank you very much for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Success comes to those who seek and try,
It shunts them all who flee, retreat or cry;
That is very true. And it's true whether you believe in God or not. We have to help ourselves before we can expect support.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Success comes to those who seek and try,
It shunts them all who flee, retreat or cry;
That is very true. And it's true whether you believe in God or not. We have to help ourselves before we can expect support.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
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Hi
Thank you very much for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
Comment from DanielEkine
The Creator loves us extremely.
He's the God of Love, Justice, Power and Wisdom
It shows in all of his creation.
Best area for me.
"In the Lord's light resides His invisible might,
It guides our insight and keeps it bright;
Choose a right goal in light of your soul
And use inner sight to do an upright role."
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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The Creator loves us extremely.
He's the God of Love, Justice, Power and Wisdom
It shows in all of his creation.
Best area for me.
"In the Lord's light resides His invisible might,
It guides our insight and keeps it bright;
Choose a right goal in light of your soul
And use inner sight to do an upright role."
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Hi
Thank you very much for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, rpsaxena, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the way we should fight to find our way with God's guidance. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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this is very well written, rpsaxena, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the way we should fight to find our way with God's guidance. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
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Hi,
Thank you very much for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
Comment from poesyapprentice
While the sentiments in this piece were quite lovely, I gave it a four for lack of consistent meter and syllable count. I believe that rhyming quatrains should have that to ensure a pleasant flow. The presentation is pleasant and I'm glad to see that you did, indeed, divide your lines into spaced stanzas. Blessings!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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While the sentiments in this piece were quite lovely, I gave it a four for lack of consistent meter and syllable count. I believe that rhyming quatrains should have that to ensure a pleasant flow. The presentation is pleasant and I'm glad to see that you did, indeed, divide your lines into spaced stanzas. Blessings!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
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Thanks a lot for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
Comment from amahra
Great poem. Just one thing below:
The second line throws off the rhythm:
Success comes to those who seek and try,
It shunts them all who flee, retreat or cry
You might try:
Success come to those who seek and try,
It can shunt them all who flee, or cry
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Great poem. Just one thing below:
The second line throws off the rhythm:
Success comes to those who seek and try,
It shunts them all who flee, retreat or cry
You might try:
Success come to those who seek and try,
It can shunt them all who flee, or cry
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thanks a lot for your so nice, thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
