Comment from ann marie mazz

Excellent

the format is true to form
the theme is lovely
words and message are very positive

thank you for sharing
good luck with the contest
ann marie

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2013

Comment from Tunderlala

Excellent

This poem is deeply thought out and written with strong faith.
All lines are connected nicely and the rhyming is interestingly constructed; It is like a frame of a picture.
Nicely done.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013

Thank you! :)

reply by Tunderlala on 19-Jul-2013

You are welcome!:)

Comment from rhonny

Average

You gave us a poem that speaks loud and clear what Jesus did for us all. You kept to the form, but I think in trying to make it lyrical, you made it a bit plain. I think free verse would have been a better choice for you.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013

Thank you.

What's the free verse?

reply by rhonny on 14-Jul-2013

Hi Jessica. Free verse is where you don't try to have words that rhyme at the end of each line. There should be a certain rhythm flowing through the poem instead. :O)

reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013

Thank you.
In all honesty, I have a hard time NOT rhyming... But I would love to try! Any tips? :)

Comment from Black_Oxygen

Excellent

Well Done ~ Jessica

Jesus, King of all
He saved us from a sure fall.
He reigns above all.

With very few words, this poetry speaks a beautiful
message. No photo is necessary; your words are ample.
Thank You for your creation.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013

Thank you! :)