A Perfection's Worth
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Comment from Jade Lawson
This poem is really good and wish I had a six but mine are already gone. Indeed our dreams make part of who we are and our inner aspirations, we ought to fight for these, follow them, however, life won't cease to twirl, and our dreams are not accomplished because we either find other priorities in our lives or because negativity surrounding us lead us to don't believe enough in ourselves and we change direction. Often later there's... what if.... I liked the way you finish this poem...It happens here in written rhyme ~
A heartbeat needing purpose dies...indeed rhyming kills the raw emotion many times, and that is what happens when our dreams are left aside instead of flying high.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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This poem is really good and wish I had a six but mine are already gone. Indeed our dreams make part of who we are and our inner aspirations, we ought to fight for these, follow them, however, life won't cease to twirl, and our dreams are not accomplished because we either find other priorities in our lives or because negativity surrounding us lead us to don't believe enough in ourselves and we change direction. Often later there's... what if.... I liked the way you finish this poem...It happens here in written rhyme ~
A heartbeat needing purpose dies...indeed rhyming kills the raw emotion many times, and that is what happens when our dreams are left aside instead of flying high.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Wow, you're really insightful. Great great interpretation. Again, we have like minds. I agree with you on everything. Ya know, sometimes I just think too much though, ask too many questions, seek too many reasons. I wish I could just relax, appreciate the moment. Ugh. Its hard. How about you? You seem like a deep thinker.
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Well so many things happened already in my life with no sense, at some point, I stopped asking questions. Yes, you should relax, appreciate the good moments life gives you, eradicate what doesn't matter. If someone tries to hurt you, before you allow that to hurt you, think first what that person means to you, if nothing, forget about her comments. I don't know you, but you seem a happy person, that loves and is loved back, always appreciate that and never take anything for granted, that's my advise. You know, me, I don't recommend myself to anyone, I'm too obsessed with my writing and I also have other not so good features, lol. Enjoy your day :)
Comment from Jean Lutz
Gripping poetry -- delivered in excellent form. The selected artwork and color scheme frame the somber tone perfectly. Speaking of perfection I really like this photo of you and your love that you are using in your About GregoryCody.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Gripping poetry -- delivered in excellent form. The selected artwork and color scheme frame the somber tone perfectly. Speaking of perfection I really like this photo of you and your love that you are using in your About GregoryCody.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Ahh thank you for the compliment. I really appreciate that. I appreciate your review too! So kind and inspiring. Thank you Jean.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Another brilliant write. Your meter underwent a total metamorphosis, young man, and I am glad if I was able to contribute a bit. I remember the work we did on the "sparrows" rondeau (which did very well in the contest).
This quatrain is simply brilliant. Philosophical innuendos could rival Socrates, your curiosity for life comes out well. And you are a constant seeker.
Favorite lines: (though there many):
In seeking heights unknown to climb
The soul is set unbound and flies
It happens here in written rhyme ~
A heartbeat needing purpose dies
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Another brilliant write. Your meter underwent a total metamorphosis, young man, and I am glad if I was able to contribute a bit. I remember the work we did on the "sparrows" rondeau (which did very well in the contest).
This quatrain is simply brilliant. Philosophical innuendos could rival Socrates, your curiosity for life comes out well. And you are a constant seeker.
Favorite lines: (though there many):
In seeking heights unknown to climb
The soul is set unbound and flies
It happens here in written rhyme ~
A heartbeat needing purpose dies
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Wow, what can I say Yelena, I'm EXTREMELY proud that you feel this way. OF COURSE you have contributed. I'm being serious, I think of your advice, EVERY time I write a poem. I am so honored by this review. By YOU. That means so very much to me. It truly does. Socrates. Wow is all I can say. Yes though, every word reflects my own thoughts. Often I hate thinking so much though. It takes away from my joy of living in the moment if that makes sense Yelena. I wish I could relax sometimes. Again, thank you.
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You are turning into a very serious poet, Gregory. And I love your meter!
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I'm so very grateful to hear you say that. As I said,coming from you that means a lot. I brought you up to Visionary1234. I told Sharyn, between you and her I've learned an IMMENSE amount in a short amount of time. I'm a much stronger writer. You ABSOLUTELY play a huge role in that. So grateful. I respect Your opinion more than you know. I use Every word of your advice, every time.
Comment from 9999pool
There is no need to ask too many questions about life. The answers even if we get them could be just near truths to suit the times and our minds.
Nothing is really real anymore. How real is love if it is just a feeling and emotion that changes constantly with our whims?
Is our dream more real than reality? If our dream world is our real world without disguise and this physical world is the virtual one, whatever we feel and see now is so unreal and surreal isn't it? We live in many worlds within this shell of a body and mind. Reality, metaphor and imagery all play up our minds.
So, think less, ask less and then life oepns up to us naturally every day.
Great write and well expressed. Good luck to the contest.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
P.S. Your tribute to Fanstorians had been penned in "A tribute in a word, maybe three - 3" had been posted. Smiles.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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There is no need to ask too many questions about life. The answers even if we get them could be just near truths to suit the times and our minds.
Nothing is really real anymore. How real is love if it is just a feeling and emotion that changes constantly with our whims?
Is our dream more real than reality? If our dream world is our real world without disguise and this physical world is the virtual one, whatever we feel and see now is so unreal and surreal isn't it? We live in many worlds within this shell of a body and mind. Reality, metaphor and imagery all play up our minds.
So, think less, ask less and then life oepns up to us naturally every day.
Great write and well expressed. Good luck to the contest.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
P.S. Your tribute to Fanstorians had been penned in "A tribute in a word, maybe three - 3" had been posted. Smiles.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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What a Fantastic review! You got it exactly right dean had it spot on too. I LOVE your thoughts on this. You're so right. Ask less I need to stop asking, thinking so much. I need to just sit back and appreciate the moment. I'm workin on it Ritchie. Thank you so very much for reviewing this.
OH I'm so excited to read! You're just the best, thank you!!!
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Hi Greg,
You have such enthusiasm that you will get a lot of friends. Be more of a listener and then you will realize all your questions and thinking are no different from theirs.
With this realization, it is better to be a good listener than a good questioner, smiles.
Yes, Dean knows this only too well as he likes to question the authenticity of the surreal, dark and mysterious world.
Have a great day and your review comments is so uplifting. Have less doubts and more openness with your thoughts - can help ease any apprehensions you may have.
Fear is born out of imagination. So the less imagination of fear and questions the better.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
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Wow. Wow. I absolutely understand. I agree. That makes perfect sense. I will have to "train" my brain but I am on it. I am trying very much to get there. You're a sweet soul. Thank you, its a honor to call you friend.
Comment from Dean Kuch
..."The death of dreams is sleeping life..." So true, Gregory.
As we grasp at straws to come to grips for reasons for existing, we often reflect back upon the dreams and goals we aspired to in our youth. Sometimes, for me, anyway, it's heartbreaking and disheartening to realize that so many have fallen by the wayside. Some were forgone because of obligations and responsibilities. Others were cast aside and simply trodden over, as another, new life experience replaced it.
But, those dreams never truly die, do they? They hibernate in a sort of cryogenic hyper-sleep, waiting for that heart that once held them in such warm regard to thaw them and revive them once again. When we chose to do that, and realize each one, one by one, we feel complete. We feel whole...
Beautiful poem, Gregory. Very, very deep, my friend!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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..."The death of dreams is sleeping life..." So true, Gregory.
As we grasp at straws to come to grips for reasons for existing, we often reflect back upon the dreams and goals we aspired to in our youth. Sometimes, for me, anyway, it's heartbreaking and disheartening to realize that so many have fallen by the wayside. Some were forgone because of obligations and responsibilities. Others were cast aside and simply trodden over, as another, new life experience replaced it.
But, those dreams never truly die, do they? They hibernate in a sort of cryogenic hyper-sleep, waiting for that heart that once held them in such warm regard to thaw them and revive them once again. When we chose to do that, and realize each one, one by one, we feel complete. We feel whole...
Beautiful poem, Gregory. Very, very deep, my friend!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Wow Dean thank you so much! I'm honored, truly. I gotta tell ya, you have just b.own my mind. I am so impressed by your amount of insight! I never, I really never thought anyone would get the exact meaning behind this. You really did get it spot on. Every line. That gives me an immense amount of confidence. I've told people that they've got it right, some have, but Not like this. You got it exact. Just what I meant when I wrote it. So happy with you right now ;)
I'm glad you read it, really glad. Thank you so much for the 6 stars! FANTASTIC REVIEW. Thank you.
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When I read something Gregory, I don't just 'READ' it, if that makes any sense. I try to feel as you felt when writing it, see things through your eyes, if only for a moment. Feeling...that's the key. If a writer puts no heart, no feeling in their work, I can detect that. Well, my friend, this has TONS of feeling and genuine meaning behind it!
I am pleased that you liked my review, you deserved nothing less...
Comment from NicciFaye
Beautiful poem and GREAT message...the author's notes summed it right up and you couldn't be any more correct....wonderful stanza and excellent poem
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Beautiful poem and GREAT message...the author's notes summed it right up and you couldn't be any more correct....wonderful stanza and excellent poem
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thank you Nicci. I'm so glad you liked it!
I decided to do something more challenging as well in the contest. End rhyming isn't really my style, especially perfect rhyming. So I did iambic tetrameter.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
GregoryCody,
If we could shut off our minds and just go with the flow ... with the moment ... I agree with your Author Notes ... we would be much more free. Alas, easier said than done ... yes?
A deep write ... very insightful, as well as introspective I would imagine. Intelligently written. Like the message you are expressing.
Great job!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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GregoryCody,
If we could shut off our minds and just go with the flow ... with the moment ... I agree with your Author Notes ... we would be much more free. Alas, easier said than done ... yes?
A deep write ... very insightful, as well as introspective I would imagine. Intelligently written. Like the message you are expressing.
Great job!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Oh thank you so much. It Was very introspective. I decided to do something more challenging as well in the contest. End rhyming isn't really my style, especially perfect rhyming. So I did iambic tetrameter. I'm really, really glad You liked it. That means a lot. AND you got it perfectly!
Comment from DBastian
I feel the angst in your words, Gregory! Lot of beat. Lots of exclamations! I guess your first and last lines sum it up well ... dreams dying if we are asleep with life and the heart in sync with a purpose.
I certainly feel the energy that exudes from your words!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I feel the angst in your words, Gregory! Lot of beat. Lots of exclamations! I guess your first and last lines sum it up well ... dreams dying if we are asleep with life and the heart in sync with a purpose.
I certainly feel the energy that exudes from your words!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you! That was my intent. I'm really glad that came across to you. Its very important to me. You seem to "get" the poem perfectly. Thank you for reading in depth, and finding the meaning! Thank you
Comment from Selina Stambi
In seeking heights unknown to climb
The soul is set unbound and flies
It happens here in written rhyme ~
A heartbeat needing purpose dies .. SO true!
A life without purpose or a goal is worthless.... the number of suicides and overdoses amongst millionaires and stars bears amply testimony to this fact.
Love the introductory line.
Great lay out - fab colour scheme. Well done, Greg. :)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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In seeking heights unknown to climb
The soul is set unbound and flies
It happens here in written rhyme ~
A heartbeat needing purpose dies .. SO true!
A life without purpose or a goal is worthless.... the number of suicides and overdoses amongst millionaires and stars bears amply testimony to this fact.
Love the introductory line.
Great lay out - fab colour scheme. Well done, Greg. :)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Aww thank you so much. You're so kind. This review is great. I'm so so glad you liked the color! I was deliberating on that! For an hour! ;) you've given me confidence in that and honestly in the words as well. Truly thank you.
Comment from Titan Black
"The death of dreams, is sleeping life". This line
is on fire!!! And the rest of the poem just burns
down the house. As your poetic alliteration is so
on point, that I had to rewind three times. Amazingly
done. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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"The death of dreams, is sleeping life". This line
is on fire!!! And the rest of the poem just burns
down the house. As your poetic alliteration is so
on point, that I had to rewind three times. Amazingly
done. Keep writing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks man. I really appreciate it. We speak the same way about poetry, literally, in our reviews. No one else understands me when I tell them their lines are on fire, on point. Really. Haha. I'm honored that you actually went back to reread. That's a Huge compliment.
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You dealin with a few true villains
Whose stand inside of the booth truth spillin
And spit true feelings, until our tooth fillings come flying up out of our mouths
Now rewind it
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Thanks for catching the alliteration. I actually wrote two poems with this same message. The second one is different. I'm testing out a new hybrid style. Its rapid fire assonance and alliteration. General poetry free style/free verse infused with hip hop in a way. Ill have to get your take on it. I'd love your take actually.
Truly man, thank you again. Love your work obviously. And its nice to have a like mind on here. You keep writing too!
