Viper Squad
The Shock Trooper saga continues.6 total reviews
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
A very good story that is well thought out and interesting. Enjoyed the [re,ise of the Uppers, Grubs and Unbelievers. Only thing that severely marred this piece is the numerous SPAGs that is in the piece. Please go back and check. I found at least six. Some sentences were incompleted. Words were placed where not needed. This really killed your rating.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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A very good story that is well thought out and interesting. Enjoyed the [re,ise of the Uppers, Grubs and Unbelievers. Only thing that severely marred this piece is the numerous SPAGs that is in the piece. Please go back and check. I found at least six. Some sentences were incompleted. Words were placed where not needed. This really killed your rating.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Sam Mendonca
I foun your story very interesting , showing
such strong characters
What a terrible way to loose your fellow warriors.
Very interesting.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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I foun your story very interesting , showing
such strong characters
What a terrible way to loose your fellow warriors.
Very interesting.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the reading and for the review. Much appreciated.
Comment from DanielEkine
Impeccable description of Lieutenant Villa. It depicted strength and valiance of the character. I would like to read more about him
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Impeccable description of Lieutenant Villa. It depicted strength and valiance of the character. I would like to read more about him
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you for reading and taking the time to write a review. I will be continuing with this story and hope to post some more chapters soon.
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excellent
Comment from Hareem.S
This is a wonderful story and penned down in a very vivid manner. The details are well written and it kept me engaged till the end.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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This is a wonderful story and penned down in a very vivid manner. The details are well written and it kept me engaged till the end.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind words and review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Cindy Warren
I had a feeling those grubs were going to be more trouble than your hero thought. They may even win in the end. Will you continue with this story? I'd be curious to see if the soldier ever starts thinking for himself.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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I had a feeling those grubs were going to be more trouble than your hero thought. They may even win in the end. Will you continue with this story? I'd be curious to see if the soldier ever starts thinking for himself.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the review. I'm planning to continue with this because the first part was so successful. This story is very long and I appreciate your patience with it. Thanks.
Comment from lindalcreel
Wow!! This was exciting from beginning to end. The writing kept a quick pace, but not too fast that I got lost. This was well crafted and extremely entertaining. Powerful! Thanks for sharing. I hope you do well in the contest. This was a fantastic read.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Wow!! This was exciting from beginning to end. The writing kept a quick pace, but not too fast that I got lost. This was well crafted and extremely entertaining. Powerful! Thanks for sharing. I hope you do well in the contest. This was a fantastic read.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words. I was worried about the length of this one and am glad that you stuck it out.
Thank you very much.
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Oh it was well worth the read. Thanks again for sharing.
