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Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "ZitheryZoo"A book of stories and poems for kids of all ages.
86 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
This is a very heartfelt poem. and I'm sure many readers can relate. I have worked with special children and they were my hearts delight. not once would they say a mean word or start a fight in their world there is nothing but peace and love.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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This is a very heartfelt poem. and I'm sure many readers can relate. I have worked with special children and they were my hearts delight. not once would they say a mean word or start a fight in their world there is nothing but peace and love.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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MissCookie, thank you so much for your comments and review. Yes, they are very fun to be with.
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Your very welcome, have a blessed Sunday.
Comment from Titanx9
This is a remarkably beautiful poem that talks about a special child who spreads joy to everyone she meets. Special children are like that. They have an innocence they never lose, and while that can be dangerous in today's world, it is still endearing. I enjoyed reading about Lily!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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This is a remarkably beautiful poem that talks about a special child who spreads joy to everyone she meets. Special children are like that. They have an innocence they never lose, and while that can be dangerous in today's world, it is still endearing. I enjoyed reading about Lily!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Titanx9, thank you for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated. Happy that you loved Lily.
Comment from Tessa Kay
I can picture Lily on the swing and running around. You made her come alive in your poem.
And I liked the thought towards the end, that she made it against the odds. It makes her even more special.
The lines didn't always flow perfectly for me, but it didn't matter. Nice work.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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I can picture Lily on the swing and running around. You made her come alive in your poem.
And I liked the thought towards the end, that she made it against the odds. It makes her even more special.
The lines didn't always flow perfectly for me, but it didn't matter. Nice work.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Tessa, thank you for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from kiwijenny
Beautiful just beautiful.........special children truly are special ......happy and sweet.....innocent and loving........
Well done .................
God bless
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Beautiful just beautiful.........special children truly are special ......happy and sweet.....innocent and loving........
Well done .................
God bless
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Kiwijenny, thank you for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from djsaxon
As a young man I was priveleged to work with special kids. It was the most rewarding experience of my life. I learned far more from them than I was able to impart. Thank you for this joyous and heartwarming reminder. God bless - DJ :)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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As a young man I was priveleged to work with special kids. It was the most rewarding experience of my life. I learned far more from them than I was able to impart. Thank you for this joyous and heartwarming reminder. God bless - DJ :)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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DJ, it is wonderful to be around them. Thank you for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello and huge smiles to you gramalot8
I cried and also filled with joy reading your very catchy poem of your special Lily and her wonderful attitude
Gert
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Hello and huge smiles to you gramalot8
I cried and also filled with joy reading your very catchy poem of your special Lily and her wonderful attitude
Gert
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Gert, thank you so much for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
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You are welcome
You are welcome gramalot8
gert
Comment from Benny Beeharry
This writing deserves all the praise one can give it.
A very good writing, flowing along one line and one name to the end
Through her. All the children go the blessing. Not a single word is out of place, least o all an idea, all joined to make an absolutely cute little poem.
Well done..
Benny Beeharry.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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This writing deserves all the praise one can give it.
A very good writing, flowing along one line and one name to the end
Through her. All the children go the blessing. Not a single word is out of place, least o all an idea, all joined to make an absolutely cute little poem.
Well done..
Benny Beeharry.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Benny, for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha from Hawaii gramalot8,
What a delightful poem, wish I had a "6" to give. Thank you for sharing Lily and the fun. Have a blessed day.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Aloha from Hawaii gramalot8,
What a delightful poem, wish I had a "6" to give. Thank you for sharing Lily and the fun. Have a blessed day.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Aloha to you, Ginger. Thank you so much for all your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated. Jerri
Comment from Zakgram
I think your poem was beautifully written. I like the way your character is developed, and the humorous yet gentle, loving tone you used. I'm also impressed by your accuracy---very few errors.
There's not much I can say as criticism. I agree with the suggested rewording of the second line, changing "and" to "to."
Thank you for a well-written poem. It's one I would post for my family and friends to read.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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I think your poem was beautifully written. I like the way your character is developed, and the humorous yet gentle, loving tone you used. I'm also impressed by your accuracy---very few errors.
There's not much I can say as criticism. I agree with the suggested rewording of the second line, changing "and" to "to."
Thank you for a well-written poem. It's one I would post for my family and friends to read.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Zakgram, thank you for all of your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from MarjorieAnne
This cheerful and uplifting story in rhymed stanzas with humorous touches including original names for " special friends" will appeal to children of all ages and to adults humble enough to be children at heart.
Suggestions for improvement: more uniform line lengths (they now vary from 6-12 syllables); no period after "chances to meet"; replace quote mark before "cause" and "bout" with apostrophe; no mark needed before "though".
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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This cheerful and uplifting story in rhymed stanzas with humorous touches including original names for " special friends" will appeal to children of all ages and to adults humble enough to be children at heart.
Suggestions for improvement: more uniform line lengths (they now vary from 6-12 syllables); no period after "chances to meet"; replace quote mark before "cause" and "bout" with apostrophe; no mark needed before "though".
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you, MarjorieAnne, for all the comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
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You're welcome
