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Comment from forestport12
Absolutely loved this and would want to follow along. Been out of touch for a few days. But this story gets me excited. I love romantic historical fiction and the word play, dialogue was all strong and stirring the soul. Way to go. Vivid imagery. Spot on as far as how the man would have been intense with his romance, as if it could be the last night on earth, etc... Stn
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Absolutely loved this and would want to follow along. Been out of touch for a few days. But this story gets me excited. I love romantic historical fiction and the word play, dialogue was all strong and stirring the soul. Way to go. Vivid imagery. Spot on as far as how the man would have been intense with his romance, as if it could be the last night on earth, etc... Stn
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much, my friend, for this fine review. I"m really glad you liked this chapter. I am honored for the extra star.
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Glad to see you are in top form with writing. Stan
Comment from nancy_e_davis
My first read of your book. I liked this chapter very much. I had not seen it before. I do love WWII movies about the home folks not the battles and this sort of ties in except it is the earlier war. I think it was well done and I enjoyed it very much. Your Author notes helped, Nancy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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My first read of your book. I liked this chapter very much. I had not seen it before. I do love WWII movies about the home folks not the battles and this sort of ties in except it is the earlier war. I think it was well done and I enjoyed it very much. Your Author notes helped, Nancy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you Nancy for taking time to read me. I look forward to more reviews from you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from SoldierPoet
I haven't read any of the rest of the book but I am definitely intrigued now. As a combat veteran myself, I can relate the emotional good bye to loved ones. I look forward to reading the rest of this story.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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I haven't read any of the rest of the book but I am definitely intrigued now. As a combat veteran myself, I can relate the emotional good bye to loved ones. I look forward to reading the rest of this story.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you SoldierPoet. Coming from you, this review is so precious to me. I value your comments.
Comment from Selina Stambi
A very moving chapter, amahra. The lovemaking is touching and tastefully done.
Love the reaction to the newfangled vehicle!
What a dramatic moment - being waved goodbye to war ...
Spags:
what are you doing? (question mark)
gazing at her, puzzled ... not puzzlingly.
nude muscular frame ... suggest: .... his muscular, naked body
she sat up straight ... not straight up
about six o'clock ... suggest - drop am - it is understood that it's morning
a Chessy cat ... suggest: a Cheshire cat
riding me around ... driving me around?
continued admiring ... suggest: continued to admire
climbed into the vehicle (not onto the seat)
appeared frighten(ed)
gettin' (apostrophe)
well wishes ... good wishes is more correct
Mom ... suggest: mother and siblings
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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A very moving chapter, amahra. The lovemaking is touching and tastefully done.
Love the reaction to the newfangled vehicle!
What a dramatic moment - being waved goodbye to war ...
Spags:
what are you doing? (question mark)
gazing at her, puzzled ... not puzzlingly.
nude muscular frame ... suggest: .... his muscular, naked body
she sat up straight ... not straight up
about six o'clock ... suggest - drop am - it is understood that it's morning
a Chessy cat ... suggest: a Cheshire cat
riding me around ... driving me around?
continued admiring ... suggest: continued to admire
climbed into the vehicle (not onto the seat)
appeared frighten(ed)
gettin' (apostrophe)
well wishes ... good wishes is more correct
Mom ... suggest: mother and siblings
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much, my friend. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and present such excellent suggestions and corrections. I really value your opinion.
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Very nice chapter. I can tell you connect with your characters, and that is what makes a writer soar. Once you can live and breathe all of your characters, writing is the easy part. I always enjoy another fellow writer that takes the time to walk a mile in their characters shoes...It is a talent m'lady.Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Very nice chapter. I can tell you connect with your characters, and that is what makes a writer soar. Once you can live and breathe all of your characters, writing is the easy part. I always enjoy another fellow writer that takes the time to walk a mile in their characters shoes...It is a talent m'lady.Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Christof. I do, in deed, embody my characters. It is so nice to have a fellow writers, such as yourself, to review and comment on my work. I intend to read you as well.
Comment from Dawn Munro
It's not possible to comment on some things about a story, just dropping in on a chapter like this, but I will say the descriptions are vivid, the characters very real and the dialogue sounds quite natural. A couple of edits I noticed:
1)"...about six o'clock (a.m.)"<< no need for both 'o'clock' & a.m. - one or the other
2)Eva appeared frighten(ed)
Very nice conclusion as well - the white-gloved hand of Pete being the thing that made your protagonist weep.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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It's not possible to comment on some things about a story, just dropping in on a chapter like this, but I will say the descriptions are vivid, the characters very real and the dialogue sounds quite natural. A couple of edits I noticed:
1)"...about six o'clock (a.m.)"<< no need for both 'o'clock' & a.m. - one or the other
2)Eva appeared frighten(ed)
Very nice conclusion as well - the white-gloved hand of Pete being the thing that made your protagonist weep.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Dawn I will make those corrections, my dear.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from pattipac
Your well penned story of Nathan's last night before leaving with the other draftees the next morning, paints a vivid picture with words. Your story is peppered with emotion, and the threat of what is to come. Want to read more.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Your well penned story of Nathan's last night before leaving with the other draftees the next morning, paints a vivid picture with words. Your story is peppered with emotion, and the threat of what is to come. Want to read more.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much pattipac for this fine review and for reading and enjoying my chapter. I hope you enjoy them all.
Comment from Shirley B
Oh amahra, another great chapter. I loved she cut her hair for him to take with with him. That was so sweet. I am sure it will work it itself into chapters to come. The lovemaking scences were nice also without too much detail. Great job. I am looking forward to reading more, Shirley
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Oh amahra, another great chapter. I loved she cut her hair for him to take with with him. That was so sweet. I am sure it will work it itself into chapters to come. The lovemaking scences were nice also without too much detail. Great job. I am looking forward to reading more, Shirley
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Oh, Shirley, you do me such an honor, my dear. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm really touched that you are keeping up and enjoying my story.
Comment from JB Lynn
I enjoyed the tender moment of Eva slipping a lock of her hair into the soldier's uniform. I thought you handled the love-making scenes well and enjoyed that you included describing other senses besides sights.
I really like your character, Pete. Just hearing him talk makes me smile, and I think it's because you give him such a distinctive voice in your story.
I am not caught up with your story, but I did get pulled into this glimpse of a chapter and you had me caring about your characters, which makes me think you know them well enough to keep them consistent throughout the longer work.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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I enjoyed the tender moment of Eva slipping a lock of her hair into the soldier's uniform. I thought you handled the love-making scenes well and enjoyed that you included describing other senses besides sights.
I really like your character, Pete. Just hearing him talk makes me smile, and I think it's because you give him such a distinctive voice in your story.
I am not caught up with your story, but I did get pulled into this glimpse of a chapter and you had me caring about your characters, which makes me think you know them well enough to keep them consistent throughout the longer work.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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What a magnificent review. Thank you so much JB; I really appreciate the time you took to read.
Comment from mizzkris20
This is a well together chapter. I haven't read any previous chapters but this one is pretty good. You use great dialogue and makes the reader fall in love with your characters
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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This is a well together chapter. I haven't read any previous chapters but this one is pretty good. You use great dialogue and makes the reader fall in love with your characters
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your review.Thank you for reviw
