Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "A Kazuzu Moon"Murder Mystery
49 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
well from the picture reading down you have penned a lovely piece of writting very interesting and enjoyable read drawn like a picture
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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well from the picture reading down you have penned a lovely piece of writting very interesting and enjoyable read drawn like a picture
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, DH. I appreciate the generous review. :0)
Comment from J. Dark
Firstly, I love the name Dresden Stredwick, III. There is something about the name that already alienates the character and causes a combination of dread and awe. I like it!
I enjoy the way you bring colour into your description and your dialogue is very real. The underlining of the word "together" on the blackboard was a very clever way of conveying Dresden's intentions and ending the alienation felt by the reader.
The scene in the department conference centre portrayed the local forces natural distrust of the FBI brilliantly.
As you know, I love the supernatural edge to this story and I am excited to see where it is going.
Another highly entertaining chapter, Bev, which is exceptionally well written.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :0)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Firstly, I love the name Dresden Stredwick, III. There is something about the name that already alienates the character and causes a combination of dread and awe. I like it!
I enjoy the way you bring colour into your description and your dialogue is very real. The underlining of the word "together" on the blackboard was a very clever way of conveying Dresden's intentions and ending the alienation felt by the reader.
The scene in the department conference centre portrayed the local forces natural distrust of the FBI brilliantly.
As you know, I love the supernatural edge to this story and I am excited to see where it is going.
Another highly entertaining chapter, Bev, which is exceptionally well written.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :0)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Julie, thank you so much for this very generous and encouraging review. I love the way you pick up the nuances of my story. Your reviews are always so helpful and supportive. I really appreciate you!
Love, Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
WOW, AN AWESOME CRIME STORY! I like how you formatted this story for ease of reading and the dialogue of the characters keeps you reading...almost like a CSI...
BRAVO!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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WOW, AN AWESOME CRIME STORY! I like how you formatted this story for ease of reading and the dialogue of the characters keeps you reading...almost like a CSI...
BRAVO!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, Christopher. I'm honored by your gracious and very generous review. I appreciate you taking time to read. :0) Bev
Comment from TOMORAL
Very interesting, well written story. This is the first I have read of this book, so I don't know the whole story, but this part reads like an excellent suspenseful detective novel, the kind my mother read all the time. Very good writing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Very interesting, well written story. This is the first I have read of this book, so I don't know the whole story, but this part reads like an excellent suspenseful detective novel, the kind my mother read all the time. Very good writing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Hi, Tomoral. I really appreciate this wonderfully encouraging review. Thank you for taking time to read my chapter and offer your kind insights. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from PrincessinPurple
Red for what happened in the pervious chapter I would consider a different color. It hurts my eyes trying to read it.
This chapter is good. It does make me want to read the story from the beginning to see what I have missed. There are no correction needed.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Red for what happened in the pervious chapter I would consider a different color. It hurts my eyes trying to read it.
This chapter is good. It does make me want to read the story from the beginning to see what I have missed. There are no correction needed.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks for you your review and suggestions, PrincessinPurple. I appreciate your taking time to read. Red seems to be the preferred site color for chapter re-cap, but I'll see if something looks better next time I post. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from NicciFaye
Well...since I know have you on my fan list to receive notifications I can stay current with all the updates to the story...crime mysteries...another great read to add to my collection...this was well developed chapter...I've read bits and pieces before but now you have my attention...soooooo Skeets is the leak....?? this new FBI profiler sounds like a beast...looking forward to the next chapter..
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Well...since I know have you on my fan list to receive notifications I can stay current with all the updates to the story...crime mysteries...another great read to add to my collection...this was well developed chapter...I've read bits and pieces before but now you have my attention...soooooo Skeets is the leak....?? this new FBI profiler sounds like a beast...looking forward to the next chapter..
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Hi, Nicci. Thanks so much for the generous review. I really appreciate your encouragement and support. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well written chapter, Bev. You do so well at integrating cultures in this. Interesting and enjoyable. Thanks for sharing~Deb
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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A very well written chapter, Bev. You do so well at integrating cultures in this. Interesting and enjoyable. Thanks for sharing~Deb
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Hi, Debbie. So nice to hear from you. Thanks much for the encouraging and generous review. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a treat to find a chapter from
you in my box, Bev - moving the story
along --
like a rock star?(")
become a nightmare," Russ said. - might you consider - Russ remarked (as you've used said 3 times in a row)
involvement in this case?(")
Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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What a treat to find a chapter from
you in my box, Bev - moving the story
along --
like a rock star?(")
become a nightmare," Russ said. - might you consider - Russ remarked (as you've used said 3 times in a row)
involvement in this case?(")
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Margaret, thanks so much for your generous review. I appreciate your suggested corrections, as well. Hope the sun is shining in your part of the world!
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from kiwijenny
This is a good read.....This was a setting up chapter...introductory it seemed. It's hard for me because this is my first read.......coming in at chapter 41 is a bit difficult to review...... But it has a good gritty feel
Good work
God bless
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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This is a good read.....This was a setting up chapter...introductory it seemed. It's hard for me because this is my first read.......coming in at chapter 41 is a bit difficult to review...... But it has a good gritty feel
Good work
God bless
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks, Kiwijenny. I am, indeed, introducing a new element into the murder investigation, so thanks for noting that. I really appreciate your generous review! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the profiler comes in and says they aren't there to take over, but to help.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the profiler comes in and says they aren't there to take over, but to help.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, sweetwoodjax.
