Comment from dportwood

Excellent

Pili Pubul,

Hot and sensual yet no sigh of coarseness or graphics. Good way to write a romance poem. Well done. No need to change anything.

Duane

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010

Thank you so very much !

Comment from Aletheia

Excellent

Your poem is so romantic, expressing so much love. Each verse is equally beautiful, so it's hard to pick my favorite. The flow is perfect and I love your flower metaphor in the third stanza. It's truly a piece of poetic art worthy of six stars but unfortunately I'm all out. :) B

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010

Thank you so very much, love your stars, you mean it.

reply by Aletheia on 07-Aug-2010

Yes I do, and you're welcome. :)

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

Whomever is on the other end ot this poem is a very fortunate person. It's very romantic without being sappy. I really like it.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010

Thank you so much Fred, I have a great imagination LOL.

Comment from Helvi2

Excellent

Hi Pili,
I think that's one of the most beautiful poems you ever wrote
( of course that's probably till I read the next one).

My favorite verse :

Without you
I become
a lonely flower
longing for fresh water
to caress my petals.

Beautifully and emotionally wonderful,

Helvi

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2005

Comment from amaranthblue

Excellent

You have such a way with perfectly expressed romantic and emotional poetry... I really wish I could do that... You capture each feeling with so much grace and beauty... This one has me in tears right now because my husband is out of town working in New Mexico for the whole week and your words expressed everything I am feeling right now... So very beautifully...

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2005

Comment from his_fmac

Excellent

The love you describe must be world tilting to inspire such a well written poem. Starting out i thought i was in for an extremely sad poem. I'm so glad it turned around to be joyous. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2005

Comment from XNTrick

Excellent

PiliPubul,

This is a beautiful read, if a little lacking in fresh imagery. Your clever turns of phrase saved the day and probably made this into a more enjoyable read than the ideas really deserved. Obviously a passionate write, though. Well done.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2005

Comment from Lisloh

Excellent

As a poem, this is excellent. The style enhances the read and the impact. Very cleverly structured. Awesome work!

As a sentiment, this is incredible. I "know" that feeling. It makes all of the "with you" so much more precious. Thank you for this.

The only thing I would change is:
End the poem at >> bring awaited peace <<
Why?
The last two stanzas take away from "Without You". They are the beginning of another write.
Think about it...........
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2005

Comment from EmileJP

Excellent

This is a fantastic display of emotions aimed to strike the heart with their beauty and purity. The author grasps the reader with the seductive allure of her words and bewitches us with the desirability she enslaves us with. Without you, these words would not have been spoken and we all would be a little less enriched, denied the exposure and experience of such tender and comforting thoughts.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2005

Comment from BellasTales

Excellent

Hi Pili

This poem was so lovely. Written beautifully with such heart and
emotion. I really liked this piece. A most enjoyable read.

Excellent

Bellastale :)

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2005