Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "fingery lickits"A collection of my poems
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Comment from MAMONIA
This is utterly fantastic. It is quite long but
also hysterical. I cannot imagine how clever you
are to write in this fashion.
I really got a chuckle from it.
Great entry.
Lots of luck.
Marie
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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This is utterly fantastic. It is quite long but
also hysterical. I cannot imagine how clever you
are to write in this fashion.
I really got a chuckle from it.
Great entry.
Lots of luck.
Marie
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Marie, thank you so much for the warm review and the six stars.
Comment from Sidmarks
Excellent poem, I really enjoyed the choice of language and I had a smile on my face as I was rolling those perfectly sweet morsels of fingery lickit off my tongue!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Excellent poem, I really enjoyed the choice of language and I had a smile on my face as I was rolling those perfectly sweet morsels of fingery lickit off my tongue!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from Solitude Poet
Hey there!
Depinidely I wond ast u de langwidge fod soor! LOL!
My its a bit longy long yet funny nonsense!
All the best in the contest!
Hobe u vin dis condesd! :)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Hey there!
Depinidely I wond ast u de langwidge fod soor! LOL!
My its a bit longy long yet funny nonsense!
All the best in the contest!
Hobe u vin dis condesd! :)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much
Comment from june prescott
Yimminey-crickets! Absolutely remarkably written poem that made me laugh the whole way through. I loved the language used and the rhyme scheme is wonderful. There are so many great decriptive lines, hard to pick out just one or two. Every line was a gem. Loved it! Cheers, ~JP
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Yimminey-crickets! Absolutely remarkably written poem that made me laugh the whole way through. I loved the language used and the rhyme scheme is wonderful. There are so many great decriptive lines, hard to pick out just one or two. Every line was a gem. Loved it! Cheers, ~JP
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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June, thank you so much for the warm review and the galaxy of stars.
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My pleasure. You deserved every one! ~JP
Comment from Eigle Rull
Because of the language, I quit reading after four lines. I was going to move on to my next read. However, I gave it a second chance, and I'm glad I did. This piece is excellent in every way. I found no mistakes (even if I couldn't have). It was a real cute story written in verse. It took me a bit longer to read than normally because of the language. And it was humorous. I really enjoyed reading this cute poem. I think it was excellent.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Because of the language, I quit reading after four lines. I was going to move on to my next read. However, I gave it a second chance, and I'm glad I did. This piece is excellent in every way. I found no mistakes (even if I couldn't have). It was a real cute story written in verse. It took me a bit longer to read than normally because of the language. And it was humorous. I really enjoyed reading this cute poem. I think it was excellent.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thanks for persisting - glad you found it worth your while.
Comment from SteveY
Now this one ought to win! Seriously! Just outstanding. Excellent use of rhyme and perfect rhythm used throughout. Funny and creative and very imaginative!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Now this one ought to win! Seriously! Just outstanding. Excellent use of rhyme and perfect rhythm used throughout. Funny and creative and very imaginative!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the warm review.
Comment from adewpearl
strong use of rhyming couplets
love the dialect :-)
vivid descriptive detail
that has me hungry :-)
good alliteration in phrases like huskies in harness
you tell a fun story that kept me laughing, and despite the liberties with language, the story is easy to follow :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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strong use of rhyming couplets
love the dialect :-)
vivid descriptive detail
that has me hungry :-)
good alliteration in phrases like huskies in harness
you tell a fun story that kept me laughing, and despite the liberties with language, the story is easy to follow :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thanks, brooke.
You are right - I had to raid the fridge after this one.Alas, mammy
Comment from Dean Kuch
Not only was this told in near perfect Cajun dialect, but it was so well metered and so well rhymed. A grand display of poetic prowess. Did I happen to mention how funny 'dis wuz? because it is hilarious!
I think I would have enjoyed one of these 'fingerly lickits.' They sure sound mightiee tastiee, thas 'a shore!
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Not only was this told in near perfect Cajun dialect, but it was so well metered and so well rhymed. A grand display of poetic prowess. Did I happen to mention how funny 'dis wuz? because it is hilarious!
I think I would have enjoyed one of these 'fingerly lickits.' They sure sound mightiee tastiee, thas 'a shore!
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Alas mammy tuk der secret of fingery lickits to her rather gruesome grave.
Thanks for the review and for telling me what dialect that was I was channeling.
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:)
Comment from Stephen Wolff
I enjoyed the poem but I found "dis language" distracting and irritating. To me it sounds like the narrator has a heavy cold! From you note it seems the accent or patois is not real but has been created maybe to give it a folky feel. It doesn't ring true. Without it I think you have a really excellent humorous poem.
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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I enjoyed the poem but I found "dis language" distracting and irritating. To me it sounds like the narrator has a heavy cold! From you note it seems the accent or patois is not real but has been created maybe to give it a folky feel. It doesn't ring true. Without it I think you have a really excellent humorous poem.
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you.
