Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Early Frost"A collection of poems on these themes
28 total reviews
Comment from Steve Pantazis
Really sad but true-to-the-heart rondeau. Everytime I see a tragedy on the news of this caliber, my heart goes out to the parents. No one should bury their child. You captured the sadness perfectly, with a very applicable title.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Really sad but true-to-the-heart rondeau. Everytime I see a tragedy on the news of this caliber, my heart goes out to the parents. No one should bury their child. You captured the sadness perfectly, with a very applicable title.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from NicciFaye
Beautifully created...I enjoy how the stanza's compliment each other...you provide the metaphor and then the relation to the theme behind it...well done...well penned.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Beautifully created...I enjoy how the stanza's compliment each other...you provide the metaphor and then the relation to the theme behind it...well done...well penned.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Thanks, nicci
Steve
Comment from RodG
I am very impressed with the craftsmanship of this rondeau-- a format that gives me fits when I try to write one.
I like how stanza 1 focuses literally on how plants are affected by early frost and introduces the metaphor of young lives. The photo compliments this part of your poem perfectly.
The last two stanzas paint a poignant scene too often played out all across the country. The young victims and their loved ones. The refrain at the end of both stanzas hits home powerfully. very well done!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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I am very impressed with the craftsmanship of this rondeau-- a format that gives me fits when I try to write one.
I like how stanza 1 focuses literally on how plants are affected by early frost and introduces the metaphor of young lives. The photo compliments this part of your poem perfectly.
The last two stanzas paint a poignant scene too often played out all across the country. The young victims and their loved ones. The refrain at the end of both stanzas hits home powerfully. very well done!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Rod, thanks a lot for the great review and the six stars.
Yes, too many of these tragedies are avoidable+
Steve
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a lovely rondeau but a sad one. I like your use of an early frost - good use of metaphor. You leave me wondering and I looked for author notes, but none. A tragedy is obvious and I find myself wondering who Poppi was. A lovely though sad read. I love the picture of the echinacea frosted. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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This is a lovely rondeau but a sad one. I like your use of an early frost - good use of metaphor. You leave me wondering and I looked for author notes, but none. A tragedy is obvious and I find myself wondering who Poppi was. A lovely though sad read. I love the picture of the echinacea frosted. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Thanks, Dorothy
Poppi is the daughter of friends, tragically killed earlier this year.
Comment from Selina Stambi
A gorgeous poem, about an un-gorgeous topic, Steve.
The rondeau is such a picturesque form .... courtly, evocative.
I love the stark, bald line ... an early frost.
Being an avid gardener, I know what such an untimely frost can do to tender blooms.
Sorry about the loss in your life - was Poppi someone significant?
Beautifully done, my friend. :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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A gorgeous poem, about an un-gorgeous topic, Steve.
The rondeau is such a picturesque form .... courtly, evocative.
I love the stark, bald line ... an early frost.
Being an avid gardener, I know what such an untimely frost can do to tender blooms.
Sorry about the loss in your life - was Poppi someone significant?
Beautifully done, my friend. :)
Sonali
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Sonli, thanks for the great review.
Poppi is the daughter of friends, tragically killed earlier this year.
Steve
Comment from vapros
Congratulations on a hard-hitting verse about the fruits of a car crash, and its impact on families of the young victims. You have written it well, and I am certain it will touch many readers.
v
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Congratulations on a hard-hitting verse about the fruits of a car crash, and its impact on families of the young victims. You have written it well, and I am certain it will touch many readers.
v
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is a sad poem, that makes me sit here and ponder about life and death, and how one little mishap can change for so many people. Thanks.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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This is a sad poem, that makes me sit here and ponder about life and death, and how one little mishap can change for so many people. Thanks.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from cvcopac
It'd be remiss to pass up this one. Excellent form and content for the rondeau. Only hope this does not relate to a personal tragedy. Kenny
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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It'd be remiss to pass up this one. Excellent form and content for the rondeau. Only hope this does not relate to a personal tragedy. Kenny
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Thanks, Kenny, for the review and all the stars.
Poppi is the daughter of friends, tragically killed earlier this year.
Steve
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I had a feeling
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Oh wow, I wish I had a six for this piece. Now this piece is written by a person that is truly a poet, poet's see things in unique ways that make the impact of a truth when someone reads their piece. This would be an awesome poem to send to MADD (Mother's Against Drunk Driving). Great job. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Oh wow, I wish I had a six for this piece. Now this piece is written by a person that is truly a poet, poet's see things in unique ways that make the impact of a truth when someone reads their piece. This would be an awesome poem to send to MADD (Mother's Against Drunk Driving). Great job. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Evelyn, thanks so much for the very kind words and the virtual six.
Steve
Comment from The Death
It is a beautifully penned rondeau but with sad content.
It certainly is a tragedy when it happens to the families and is very common thing that happens all over the world.
You have carved out the pain so well.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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It is a beautifully penned rondeau but with sad content.
It certainly is a tragedy when it happens to the families and is very common thing that happens all over the world.
You have carved out the pain so well.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Anupam, thank you for your kind words.
Steve
