Comment from zeldasmith

Good

Okay...I would change the title to ...A Mission of Mercy.....perhaps.... Next, you've dropped several periods...and since this is a story and not in the poem category, you might want to fix. Also the paragraph ....I wonder if....the word k.nowing...remove the period.
Now I'm trying to figure, was this a dream? Or had you left your body and looking down? Because the last line through me...otherwise I liked the story though sad as it was.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013

Thanks for the review.

Norm

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

You are alive, because you have a life to live. To the fullest!!!!! This story is well written, flows easily and is filled with pictorial, though anguished, imagery. Well done. Good night, Carolyn

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013

Thanks again. You are Sweet Carolyn.

Norm

Comment from bossladyone

Excellent

I like this story. It is well written. The fact that you were looking at yourself then wondering why you are alive. What a profound story. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013

Thanks for the fine review. I normally don't write prose.

Norm