I Choose Rainbows
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Comment from Cheryl .E.
A well thought out piece for self-meditation. The structure and diction of this poem is good.My favorite stanza is:
Or will I forever fall prey
To the lust of a flesh warn thin
As my hope of glory
Fades to rot
In an ignoble silence
Of indignation
The last of my being
Swallowed by vermin
And desecrated to hell
The concluding part is what it is: it says everything. i enjoyed this piece from the first line to the last of it so thanks much for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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A well thought out piece for self-meditation. The structure and diction of this poem is good.My favorite stanza is:
Or will I forever fall prey
To the lust of a flesh warn thin
As my hope of glory
Fades to rot
In an ignoble silence
Of indignation
The last of my being
Swallowed by vermin
And desecrated to hell
The concluding part is what it is: it says everything. i enjoyed this piece from the first line to the last of it so thanks much for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the nice review.
Norm
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this si very well written, sholess jo, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about death forsaking the body like depression takes away joy from living. great imagery provided here. i only spotted one error--flesh worn thin instead of warn thin.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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this si very well written, sholess jo, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about death forsaking the body like depression takes away joy from living. great imagery provided here. i only spotted one error--flesh worn thin instead of warn thin.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Thanks again. I will make the change.
Norm
