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Love Among the Thorns

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Comment from NicciFaye
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.....I hope Nate doesn't decide to go to war...that would really put a damper into the unknowing relationships and profession he's built..that would be a great turn of events..I like the description you gave for the bar scene with the old man Thornton...well written and visual..excellent imagination of character and character development Amahra! Look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    Thank you for reading and for your review. I'm glad you are keeping up.
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
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I can see trouble coming very quickly over the horizon in the form of Duchess Margaret. Anothr fine chapter to join the others, my friend. Can't wait for the next one.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
    Thank you.
Comment from barkingdog
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OMG, I guess this is where the story takes a turn and Nate volunteers to go to war as an animal vet. What an awful blow to Elizabeth.

Marvelous contrast shown between the carefree moments at the community picnic and then the hostile talk of killing Heinies in a war.

I liked the old civil war hero who spoke up at the bar, showing that war leaves its mark and is not to be taken lightly.

Wonderful realistic dialogue, amahra. It brings your characters to life.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
    Thank you so much. You're the first to notice the contrast between the carefree time that will soon be interrupted by war. I was hoping someone would notice.
reply by barkingdog on 02-Jul-2013
    You're welcome. I'm really aware of contrasts since that is that is what I'm currently doing in my novel. It makes for a clear picture in your chapter. The fun loving laughter turned into growls of anger and revenge.
Comment from robina1978
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I felt sorry for the woman and husband that could never have their own children. Just like us it made her so sad. It is never nice if a war starts. I also did not know they might want vets to go too.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
    In WWI, the war was fought with horses not tanks like in WWII. So veterinarians were greatly needed to keep the horses well for battle and other transportation support. Thanks for reviewing.
reply by robina1978 on 02-Jul-2013
    I did think afterwards it must be for the horses:)
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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I can sense the change in pace when the prospectof war raises its ugly head. Who will go and who will reluctantly or willingly stay behind?
You capture the dialogue and fears which revolved around this type of event very well.
Anothe rinteresting post.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
    Thank you for going back a little and reading before going on to the next chapter. It's going to take me a while for the sixth. I've never dealt with war writing before. Trying hard to pull it off.
reply by Shirley E Kennedy on 02-Jul-2013
    You are doing fine so far.Don't under-estimate your creative mind and research is so much easier today. I look forward to reading it.
Comment from alexgeorge
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Elisabeth's scolding of the children made me laugh--I can sympathise. It's always a struggle, deciding where to draw the line when a hostile attacks your country. War is terrible, but when the enemy is relentless, what do you do?

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
    Thank for reading and review.
reply by alexgeorge on 02-Jul-2013
    welcome
Comment from JM daSilva
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Yeah, war is something people never want, but humanity is always at war with another part of humanity somewhere around the world. And I believe a nation has to defend itself, so they have no choice. Good writing.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
    Thank you for your review.
reply by JM daSilva on 02-Jul-2013
    Welcome.
Comment from Garry Souders
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Professionally written, well done. Captivating from the first word, realistic, makes me think of my family discussing VietNam just before I got drafted. And the WWII vets showing off war wounds to us young men who did and didn't want to go to war. You have done a wonderful job here, keep it up, it wouldn't surprise me to see this one on the bookstore shelf.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
    Thank you so much Garry. It really means a lot to me that you think so highly of my writing.
Comment from marijmd
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Good chapter. I really felt the angst of the period. The idea of a world war and what that meant to Americans at the time. And all the young men so eager to start something they had no idea how horrific it would be.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
    Thank you marijmd. I really appreciate your review.
Comment from Max Edon
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I haven't read the previous chapters, but I enjoyed reading this. The characters were interesting and believable. You had a lot of nice dialogue in this.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
    Thank you.
reply by Max Edon on 01-Jul-2013
    You are welcome