Comment from smiles_with_sunshine

Excellent

To dream
I must wake up,
allowing the imagination
to be free and fly,
soaring into deep
warm currents
of affinity.

>>>P>i>l>i>>P>u>b>u>l>>>

Lovely words, but also some very wise words. I was especially struck by the truth found in "To dream I must wake up".....I will meditate upon this for some time to come. Again, Pili, thank you for sharing the beauty and wisdom of your soul through your poetry. Take care and "BE" blessed.
:)s* smiles

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2005

Comment from AuroraSky

Excellent

Beyond the ocean is such a call to creative inspiration! My mind is filling with imagery different from your wonderful poem. And then you add another ingredient to me- magnetic...I wonder where this will end up.

Thanks Pili

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2005

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

Very romantic indeed, Pili. You really know how to compose one of this type of poem. I'm really in awe of your ability to write so beautifully. Great job.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2005

Comment from Black Wren

Excellent

The image of someone waking and loving the life around them.
I love the descriptions and the emotions you invoke with them.
Well done!

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2005

Comment from a heart of emerald

Good

I like the imagery that you used throughout the poem. It was captivating without being too confusing. Your use of vocabulary is evident and the poetic language works well. There are one or two places that catch slightly and tug on the flow, but they are nothing major and fixing those is completely an author's decision and job. Keep up the beautiful work!

 Comment Written 31-May-2005

Comment from sengwriter

Excellent

Putting your pen into the ink of your soul, have written a realistic saga on the paper of your romantic heart. Lines of thoughts so analytical yet not loosing any tint of the real love makes your effort so touchy for the heart with realization. Really appreciate your poems of late written on romance, becoming more and more lively with the passage of time. Please keep it up my friend. Gautam

 Comment Written 31-May-2005

Comment from Anti-Theist

Good

Another nice piece - you seem to be a very fluent poet. I really enjoyed this one. The end of the second stanza read a bit odd to me. I can't help but think that it should be reaches me rather than reach me - if it said "the fragrance of your reasoning and love" then I think reach would would sound great as it would be plural rather than singular. I also thought the last stanza seemed to run on a bit. Maybe it could be broken up into two instead. Just a thought. A nice read.


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 Comment Written 31-May-2005

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

oooh i liked this
very very nice!

"Mesmerized
by our dreams
refusing to see
unattainability,
enduring pain
embracing pleasure
Intoxicated,
my heart responds"


thanx for sharing :-)

 Comment Written 31-May-2005

Comment from Diny

Excellent

Beyond the immense ocean

Sharing similarities

Magnetic transference,

Mesmerized

then...
Intoxicated,
my heart responds
to your compelling call.

you start each stanza with words that speak to me... like/ as if/ we were two people made from the same mold...seperated by distance and fate...

Interesting...
I truly love your writing, and
I always smile when I see its your picture and your little dog too!

Write on
Diny

 Comment Written 31-May-2005

Comment from ladykay

Excellent

Hi Pili...

The call from beyond the ocean...and wrinkled mountains...you have used a good choice of words here...and some fine lines in it too...

I liked these lines which brings the connection and reason for it...

"Sharing similarities
and enriched
by the differences,
over golden streams
of pure light."

Another good one, Pili...

ladykay

 Comment Written 31-May-2005