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Rondeau Redouble - Work Ethics Vs Starvation40 total reviews
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Phillippa,
Great rhyme, superb metre and excellent enjambment to produce an enchanting, fun poem. However, as a self appointed purist and pompous guardian of the language as she is spoke, I must say this:
My closetpoetjester friend
You know I'll back you to the end
But, then no matter how you plead
You really have to fix that "fleed"
I know you'll plead your rights poetic
Although the word is quite synthetic
But, then I guess the Bard himself
Was prone to pull one off the shelf.
So, just this once, I'll let it go
But now I'm watching you know.
Best regards
Reg
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Dear Phillippa,
Great rhyme, superb metre and excellent enjambment to produce an enchanting, fun poem. However, as a self appointed purist and pompous guardian of the language as she is spoke, I must say this:
My closetpoetjester friend
You know I'll back you to the end
But, then no matter how you plead
You really have to fix that "fleed"
I know you'll plead your rights poetic
Although the word is quite synthetic
But, then I guess the Bard himself
Was prone to pull one off the shelf.
So, just this once, I'll let it go
But now I'm watching you know.
Best regards
Reg
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LMAO Great review Reg, thanks so much and I had NO idea "fleed" was not a word. I based it on "freed" I guess.
Then again, I'm not against giving the Oxford or Webster a run for its money now and again.
Thanks for the sixer, much appreciated.
Cheers P
x
PS Loved your superb rhyming review, you da bomb baby! X
Comment from strandregs
Great joy to read and thimponthighs as I feel
My poetic bottle throtteld as well.
Loved the rhyme and rhythm .
Good luck with the bosses.Z.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Great joy to read and thimponthighs as I feel
My poetic bottle throtteld as well.
Loved the rhyme and rhythm .
Good luck with the bosses.Z.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LOL Thanks Z...much appreciate you stopping by with a sixer.
Comment from Hitcher
Ha ha, 'tis a cruel world for sure, for sure, but it seems to be the norm in these modern times, both parents have to work to support their family, because everything is just too damned expensive and that is a shame for many mothers who miss out on their little ones growth, day care, day care, bloody day care, they are everywhere, your not working in one are you, ha ha. Loved it !
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Ha ha, 'tis a cruel world for sure, for sure, but it seems to be the norm in these modern times, both parents have to work to support their family, because everything is just too damned expensive and that is a shame for many mothers who miss out on their little ones growth, day care, day care, bloody day care, they are everywhere, your not working in one are you, ha ha. Loved it !
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LOL Ah yes, its a cruel world but I work for myself so get to play by MY rules...got flexibility with the kids etc so should work out well. Many thanks for stopping by and sixering me up today.
Cheers P
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
since you have written my words for me, how could i rate this anything less than a six? You have my email cos i am well and truly off. love ya xxx
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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since you have written my words for me, how could i rate this anything less than a six? You have my email cos i am well and truly off. love ya xxx
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Oh dear, many thanks for the sixer my friend and sorry this has not worked out for you.
I did see evidence of a lovely message a friend of yours left an x-stalker of mine. LMAO
Hugs P
xxx
Take care and yes I have your email and you have mine. Keep writing my friend.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
You will be just fine. It is a blessing to be able to stay home with the kids, but, in the end they and you will be just fine. Take it from someone who was employed. :-) I am retired from the job market and now get to do those things that are not interrupted by someone else's time clock. And, believe it or not, you will still find time to write. Good luck, your poem is great. Carolyn
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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You will be just fine. It is a blessing to be able to stay home with the kids, but, in the end they and you will be just fine. Take it from someone who was employed. :-) I am retired from the job market and now get to do those things that are not interrupted by someone else's time clock. And, believe it or not, you will still find time to write. Good luck, your poem is great. Carolyn
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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It is a blessing yes and I am working from home so will have the flexibility and hopefully be able to juggle things okay.
Many thanks for stopping by.
Cheers P
Comment from Connie C
Oh, goodness, I hope the little ones aren't really hungry. It's a shame someone with your talent has to work part-time when you could be writing poetry all day and entertaining your FS friends. You do a nifty little job here, Sweetie, with your always-brilliant rhyme and spot-on meter, in letting us know why you won't be around as much as you and we would like. I already gave away my last sixer, and it's only Sunday, or you know, my dear, you'd be getting one from me for this very fine poem of yours. I especially love that last stanza of yours about proceeding to the job horizon.
Lots of hugs to one of my very favorites.
Connie xoxoxo
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Oh, goodness, I hope the little ones aren't really hungry. It's a shame someone with your talent has to work part-time when you could be writing poetry all day and entertaining your FS friends. You do a nifty little job here, Sweetie, with your always-brilliant rhyme and spot-on meter, in letting us know why you won't be around as much as you and we would like. I already gave away my last sixer, and it's only Sunday, or you know, my dear, you'd be getting one from me for this very fine poem of yours. I especially love that last stanza of yours about proceeding to the job horizon.
Lots of hugs to one of my very favorites.
Connie xoxoxo
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LOL No the little ones aren't hungry...well, one is but she is a bottomless pit. hahaha
Loved your review, thank you my friend. I love to hear from you and unfortunately this poem means even less time here for me, but I have the fire in my belly again for work and honest mate, we are that strapped for cash there is NO option but to make a bit extra. The good thing is I am working from home so I have the flexibility I need...Hopefully I won't be too run off my feet. I have a massive job on at the moment which will take me all of next week. Wish me luck. I'll try and stop in if I can.
Hugs Phillippa xoxoxo
Hi to Bill (no moans today hahahaha all clean out this end hahaha)
Comment from reconciled
I think about retiring every...Sunday or so....what it would be like to dress funny and play canasta for kicks....some people got it made....I feel ya girl...I feel ya....Alright,...do like me and write at poetry hour...lunch...-wink-....when I tell people that in Texas...they usually let me sit by myself...-wink-...you got a figure these things out...hmm hmmm....nothing comes easy sweetie....love you Michael
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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I think about retiring every...Sunday or so....what it would be like to dress funny and play canasta for kicks....some people got it made....I feel ya girl...I feel ya....Alright,...do like me and write at poetry hour...lunch...-wink-....when I tell people that in Texas...they usually let me sit by myself...-wink-...you got a figure these things out...hmm hmmm....nothing comes easy sweetie....love you Michael
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Nope, nothing comes easy. But I have done the dress up funny and rolled plenty at Canasta...to be honest, writing poetry has been more fun.
Thanks for feelin' me...ahem..YOU SAID IT.
Cheers and thanks for stopping by
Hugs P
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lol...yes...i'm sure ...canasta wouldn't be my card game... you're going to be fine...you're too sharp not to find what you're looking for...don't try too hard...brush your teeth and your hair...and let em know you own a gold mine...a cyclone of opportunity for this companies growth...so let's treat each other with respect...shall we...? Alright...you need any help with the resume' ...I' feel ya...-wink-...lol...
Comment from Spitfire
How appropriate is this for today's economy! Unfortunately, jobs, even part-time, are hard to come by. Nice lines for a rondeau as the repeated thoughts are heard around the country. Love the image of a ship waiting for the winds to pick up. Aren't we all, at least in America these days.
Excellent flow and rhyme as always, P.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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How appropriate is this for today's economy! Unfortunately, jobs, even part-time, are hard to come by. Nice lines for a rondeau as the repeated thoughts are heard around the country. Love the image of a ship waiting for the winds to pick up. Aren't we all, at least in America these days.
Excellent flow and rhyme as always, P.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Geez are your ears burning...? I just reviewed your pavement squigglings. Thanks for stopping by Shariffic. You da bomb.
BTW the "wailing winds" were the background voices chanting "Get a f**king Job!" LMAO
Hugs P
xo
Comment from ravenblack
You are going to do fine. If you approach your business with half the wit you employ in your poetry, the money will come rolling in faster than a cyber ponzi scheme. Good luck. I'm knocking on those doors too.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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You are going to do fine. If you approach your business with half the wit you employ in your poetry, the money will come rolling in faster than a cyber ponzi scheme. Good luck. I'm knocking on those doors too.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Hey, find your own doors pal...these ones are MINE! LMAO
LOVED your review.
Thanks for the encouragement, but I barely need any.
I often tell my hub I crack myself up and I was born for comedy...then of course my bubble gets Pricked. LOL
Hey, there is a lot to be said for spouses and their functionality in keeping you with feet on the ground and a level head. I find Joan Rivers hilarious and fascinating, on a platform so damn high yet at the same time so self depreciating I couldn't begin to compete with that.
Plus I am also NOT quite that ugly. Still, no one except the hub sees me Sunday morning.
Now, go find some doors of your own buddy...
cybeehuggs
P
xxx
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You mean you are a door to door bible salesman too?
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Oh you don't wanna read MY bible honey.
The ones I'm sellin' would corrupt you in a heartbeat.
LMAO
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Ahhh, the famed Tiajuana bible.
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Naughty boy...NO
They must be the ones you're flogging off.
Hahaha
Personally its cheaper to buy porn on the net.
Some of it is even free...ahem, well I've heard that.
LMAO
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So have I... often
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*smirk*
Ssssssssssssssssssh.
XXX
Comment from Tonulak
To paraphrase Fredrich Engles, "Work is the curse of the drinking class." this explains a lot:) I enjoyed your poem, it was very smartly done. Best of luck in your paperstackin' endeavors--Ted:)
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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To paraphrase Fredrich Engles, "Work is the curse of the drinking class." this explains a lot:) I enjoyed your poem, it was very smartly done. Best of luck in your paperstackin' endeavors--Ted:)
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Awww thank you Theodore. I very much appreciate your splendiforous review.
Paper stackin' as we speak! Grrrrrrr LOL Haha
Hugs P
x
BTW I'm on my eigth wine at work...is that bad?
Hey! I'm self employed remember...& not presently behind the wheel of a car. Haha
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Hey....when i work I drink Jim Beame:) All work and no play....Words to live by:)
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Makes P a dull girl...right?
:P
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You also do not drive...am I correct? LOL One of the few benefits of poor eyesight my friend.
