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Rondeau Redouble - Work Ethics Vs Starvation40 total reviews
Comment from Sally Carter
Fantastic, Clopo. Very, very well done. I think I wrote one of these ages ago, but I've got lazy and rather forgotten about such challenging forms. Perhaps reading this will prod me off my backside.
For a complicated form you really made it sound natural, never as if the form overtook the content.
An excellent phrase to have as your concluding line. There's a rueful resignation about it. Poor you. I only work 15 hours a week now - and can't want for it to be NO hours a week. The thought of having to work again at a proper job would fill me with horror.
I still read your lines with missing articles and roll my eyes, lol, (to job horizon I'll proceed), but this is so good I'll let you off.
Lovely to read your work again, especially with such an accomplished poem as this. Hope you survive!
Best wishes
Sal xx
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Fantastic, Clopo. Very, very well done. I think I wrote one of these ages ago, but I've got lazy and rather forgotten about such challenging forms. Perhaps reading this will prod me off my backside.
For a complicated form you really made it sound natural, never as if the form overtook the content.
An excellent phrase to have as your concluding line. There's a rueful resignation about it. Poor you. I only work 15 hours a week now - and can't want for it to be NO hours a week. The thought of having to work again at a proper job would fill me with horror.
I still read your lines with missing articles and roll my eyes, lol, (to job horizon I'll proceed), but this is so good I'll let you off.
Lovely to read your work again, especially with such an accomplished poem as this. Hope you survive!
Best wishes
Sal xx
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks Sal...my time here dwindles now to even less as I saddle up and sail off into the employment horizon. I'm glad you are taking it easy. Many thanks for the sixer and stopping by.
I must try and get over for a dig in your port for a bit. I just know I would have missed a few beauties.
Hugs Clopo
xo
Comment from djsaxon
My precious Strawbs. I have been off the air for soooo long (ticker issues - sorted). Logged on today to find this from you, and one other. What a great way to rejoin the 'flock'. Impeccable EVERYTHING in this offering. Love every word. Sax. xxx
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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My precious Strawbs. I have been off the air for soooo long (ticker issues - sorted). Logged on today to find this from you, and one other. What a great way to rejoin the 'flock'. Impeccable EVERYTHING in this offering. Love every word. Sax. xxx
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Oooh two in a row. Sorry to hear about your ticker. Glad you are feeling up to writing again. I must stop by your port but my time here is dwindling yet again and I barely have time to post, let alone review. With that said, they go hand in hand to a degree.
Glad you like my EVERYTHING. Haha
Hugs Strawbs
x
PS thanks again for top marks...you're biased
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is really very good and I enjoyed it very much - you did a great 'JOB'. All well written - I particularly liked your fifth stanza. The last one is very good. I read your author notes and found them very amusing. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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This is really very good and I enjoyed it very much - you did a great 'JOB'. All well written - I particularly liked your fifth stanza. The last one is very good. I read your author notes and found them very amusing. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much Dorothy
Cheers P
Comment from tbacha58
Hi, I enjoyed so much the way you wrote about needing a job. I think you were preparing your thoughts to take you where you are obliged to work to feed the family. I really enjoyed your honesty. Good luck. Terry
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Hi, I enjoyed so much the way you wrote about needing a job. I think you were preparing your thoughts to take you where you are obliged to work to feed the family. I really enjoyed your honesty. Good luck. Terry
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much. I appreciate you stopping by.
Cheers P
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a very good poem. The author is writing about a day that most readers can relate to and dread with foreboding. The day that we have to go back to work. I long for the day that I don't have to face this EVIL MENACE.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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This is a very good poem. The author is writing about a day that most readers can relate to and dread with foreboding. The day that we have to go back to work. I long for the day that I don't have to face this EVIL MENACE.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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LOL Thank you for your thoughtful analysis. If I could make a living writing I'd toss everything else in a heartbeat.
I appreciate your review Tomes.
Cheers P
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Yes, me too. Take care.
Comment from steevie
Well I guess if you have to work again, then you have to work, but nobody can force you to work really hard though ... LOL
Its not so bad once you have the first few drinks before starting work each day ... I recommend Bourbon and corn flakes make a nice breaky LOL
Cool poem, Pee, Pee
smiles
hugs
etc
steve
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Well I guess if you have to work again, then you have to work, but nobody can force you to work really hard though ... LOL
Its not so bad once you have the first few drinks before starting work each day ... I recommend Bourbon and corn flakes make a nice breaky LOL
Cool poem, Pee, Pee
smiles
hugs
etc
steve
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LOL That's right my friend...I am my own boss so you think I'm gonna be riding my own arse? Hmmm...not sure that came out right...Ahhh you know what I mean.
A few drinks you say...*hic* I say a few morrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrre...
Hugs
Peest As
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you crack me up! You are a breath of fresh air with your comical replies and silliness which make me smile
keep smiling
never surrender, Pee
smiles
steve
Comment from the blue pixel
The good old RR Clo. I will have to re-acquaint myseylf with it. Your usual style and wit can't be disguised by the RR's form and like me, you so often write biographically. I can't write any other way and I think that most often, bios hit the mark because they are real and heartfelt. Again your rhymes are magic, 'avoid', 'annoyed', buoyed' and 'ahoyed' and all the 'eed' rhymes too. I will refer to your form when it comes time for me to try my hand at one of these because next to the Rondeau, I love them. The trick with the RR as with other repeat line poetry is to make them read seamlessly and you have achieved that in spades. Every line just rolls off the tongue. Very well done Clo but there's no surprise there. xxx Pix
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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The good old RR Clo. I will have to re-acquaint myseylf with it. Your usual style and wit can't be disguised by the RR's form and like me, you so often write biographically. I can't write any other way and I think that most often, bios hit the mark because they are real and heartfelt. Again your rhymes are magic, 'avoid', 'annoyed', buoyed' and 'ahoyed' and all the 'eed' rhymes too. I will refer to your form when it comes time for me to try my hand at one of these because next to the Rondeau, I love them. The trick with the RR as with other repeat line poetry is to make them read seamlessly and you have achieved that in spades. Every line just rolls off the tongue. Very well done Clo but there's no surprise there. xxx Pix
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Hey Pixel, thanks very much mate. I love the RR as opposed to the R...LOL I find the line lengths irregular but have written a couple now. Anyhow, no trick here...you have this form mastered...you just need a great line bearing repeating.
I'm sure you can think of one that rolls off the tongue...speaking of rolling off the tongue, I better go catch up on some posts of yours.
Hugs Clo
xoxo
Comment from kiwijenny
I feel your pain my friend . Went back to work on Monday...this has been a wonderful summer...went to New Zealand ...had a wedding for our youngest daughter....it now seems flat....employed....but glad of the money!
Oh my dream would be to write and be paid for that...sigh
I loved your poem and the picture....sigh
God bless
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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I feel your pain my friend . Went back to work on Monday...this has been a wonderful summer...went to New Zealand ...had a wedding for our youngest daughter....it now seems flat....employed....but glad of the money!
Oh my dream would be to write and be paid for that...sigh
I loved your poem and the picture....sigh
God bless
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Ahh, someone else that feels exactly the same. One two three *sighhhhhhh*
Thanks for the sympathy, now GET back to work! LOL
Cheers P
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I was a full-time high-school English teacher for 29 years before retiring to keep grandchildren. I have tutored some since then, but the idea of every going back to full-time work sickens me! This peom, like all your others, is very well-written and entertaining.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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I was a full-time high-school English teacher for 29 years before retiring to keep grandchildren. I have tutored some since then, but the idea of every going back to full-time work sickens me! This peom, like all your others, is very well-written and entertaining.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks muchly Janice, I appreciate your review.
Cheers P
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Oh, this a a good poem but I'm sad that you've had to back to work, even part-time. I don't think we've met before since I am new on the site. God job. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Oh, this a a good poem but I'm sad that you've had to back to work, even part-time. I don't think we've met before since I am new on the site. God job. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much and yes we've met before.
Cheers P
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I've met so many people on this site and keep meeting more. I'm sorry I forgot. God loves you and I do too.
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Thats no probs.
I'm a bugger with names. But I remember yours.
Cheers
