The Bite Club
Five shark survivors form a club.16 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Aussie, :)
Good poem from the archives. I was looking for my own, but didn't find anything here.
Wow, this is real, has to be. How about that new movie 'The Meg," I watched the film clip and can't wait to see it.
Hey, take care,
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
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Hello, Aussie, :)
Good poem from the archives. I was looking for my own, but didn't find anything here.
Wow, this is real, has to be. How about that new movie 'The Meg," I watched the film clip and can't wait to see it.
Hey, take care,
Comment Written 27-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
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Good heavens, so long ago I had to go take a look! Thanks for reading friend. I haven't heard of The Meg? What's it about?
Best wishes for reading. XXK.
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'The Meg', is about an ancient megalodon shark discovered. It's a prehistoric shark.
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40 million years, boy are sharks survivors!
Comment from jlsavell
Aussie, you are the best sweet friend, as alway you deliver a great expressive poem with exceptional imagery. Good fortune with the free verse contest. You deserve to be recognized... jimi
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Aussie, you are the best sweet friend, as alway you deliver a great expressive poem with exceptional imagery. Good fortune with the free verse contest. You deserve to be recognized... jimi
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Hi Jiminy Cricket! Thanks so much for your kind words of encouragement. Bless you - love, Kay.
Comment from Alan K Pease
A wonderful cacophony of sounds seen through your words describing sharks and their danger especially at dawn or dusk. My count while scuba diving in Madagascar was 10 sharks and I headed for the beach not approving for their company. Take care Alan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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A wonderful cacophony of sounds seen through your words describing sharks and their danger especially at dawn or dusk. My count while scuba diving in Madagascar was 10 sharks and I headed for the beach not approving for their company. Take care Alan
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Hello Alan, Thank you for reading and glad you liked my poem. If we leave them alone in their environment, they are no threat to us. After all they have survived for 40 million years! Bless you Alan XX
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Aussie ....
What you have written in this short work is interesting and informative and so too are your Notes at the end. I find this of special interest because out in S.Africa, although Shark attacks were very rarely heard of prior to the forties, suddenly there was a spate of them. I shudder when I think of how I used to swim far out to sea, well beyond the breakers and much further than all the other swimmers ... and all on my own! This was in my teen years.
Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Hullo Aussie ....
What you have written in this short work is interesting and informative and so too are your Notes at the end. I find this of special interest because out in S.Africa, although Shark attacks were very rarely heard of prior to the forties, suddenly there was a spate of them. I shudder when I think of how I used to swim far out to sea, well beyond the breakers and much further than all the other swimmers ... and all on my own! This was in my teen years.
Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Hello my friend, Thanks so much for reading; in our youth we are dare devils and don't think much about what lurks below our waters. These five people survived, many do not. Glad you survived your swim beyond the breakers! Love, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
I like the alliteration in your opening line - sometimes when a poet uses that much alliteration in one place she forgets the lines still need to make sense, but you have not forced it that way.
excellent detail of setting creates mood well.
I like the munching/punching internal rhyme
and the way that line relieves the string of alliteration
good appeal to senses beyond just the visual
I think you do a great job of capturing the sense of danger and underwater mystery
I also like the progression from focus on the shark to focus on the humans
:-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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I like the alliteration in your opening line - sometimes when a poet uses that much alliteration in one place she forgets the lines still need to make sense, but you have not forced it that way.
excellent detail of setting creates mood well.
I like the munching/punching internal rhyme
and the way that line relieves the string of alliteration
good appeal to senses beyond just the visual
I think you do a great job of capturing the sense of danger and underwater mystery
I also like the progression from focus on the shark to focus on the humans
:-) Brooke
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Hello Possum, Coming from you - high praise indeed. I have never written this type of poem, it just flowed. Someone asked me to continue to write this way - using the whole alphabet! Now that is a challenge. Bless you my friend.
Comment from krowboom
This had a nice flow to it in spite of all the alliteration. Your well chosen words gave great impact to the message and story. I only didn't like the last line which read awkwardly and seemed out of place in the poem. Otherwise great job.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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This had a nice flow to it in spite of all the alliteration. Your well chosen words gave great impact to the message and story. I only didn't like the last line which read awkwardly and seemed out of place in the poem. Otherwise great job.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Cheers, K.
Comment from kiwijenny
I love the image ..surfboard seals....maybe the shark let go because the surfers didn't taste like seals . I love this poem...I grew up with surfing brothers and yet NZ waters aren't usually warm enough for shark attacks but we'd still hear of them . ,Thanks for this God bless
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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I love the image ..surfboard seals....maybe the shark let go because the surfers didn't taste like seals . I love this poem...I grew up with surfing brothers and yet NZ waters aren't usually warm enough for shark attacks but we'd still hear of them . ,Thanks for this God bless
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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G'day Jenny, Thanks so much for reading and understanding what shark attacks mean to us southerners. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi K,
After I saw the movie "Jaws" I had a problem getting in the ocean again as it was so scary. The multiple use of alliteration is superb, and the lines flow freely down the page. This is a great poem for the contest. It is evocative and different. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Hi K,
After I saw the movie "Jaws" I had a problem getting in the ocean again as it was so scary. The multiple use of alliteration is superb, and the lines flow freely down the page. This is a great poem for the contest. It is evocative and different. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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G'day Chey, Thanks so much for reading - I decided to have a play with words for a change. Glad you liked it. Love, Kay.
Comment from jmdg1954
So... Why surf? I liked how in the first stanza you incorporated each word to begin with the letter "s". Tough to do. Then you masterfully crafted the remaining lines.
Sanguine surf slaps silica sands- great line
John
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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So... Why surf? I liked how in the first stanza you incorporated each word to begin with the letter "s". Tough to do. Then you masterfully crafted the remaining lines.
Sanguine surf slaps silica sands- great line
John
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Hi John, Thanks so much for reading; Aussies are born with saltwater in their veins, we know how to do it - tourists have no idea when or how they should enter the water. Always the risk of attack. Blessings, Kay XXX
Comment from country ranch writer
People all over the world feed the sharks because they think it is a cool thing to do but they forget to sharks travel all over the world like the tide from one place to another and they think it is a fish frenzy with all the splashing and motion in the water. the go by senses and vibrations for they have poor eyesight.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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People all over the world feed the sharks because they think it is a cool thing to do but they forget to sharks travel all over the world like the tide from one place to another and they think it is a fish frenzy with all the splashing and motion in the water. the go by senses and vibrations for they have poor eyesight.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Indeed they do; they move to the sound of splashing and think dinner is waiting. Thanks so much for reading. Cheers, Kay.
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