Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem in contrast to your horrific tale of sexual abuse Pili. I am glad you have someone to help to erase the memories although I know that nothing will ever do that completely.

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from EnjoyPoetry62

Excellent

Good Job.......I liked your poem it flowed very nicely and I liked the form you had the poem in..I like it because of the emotions you showed in it...Keep write.

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from smiles_with_sunshine

Excellent

I want my wounds
to heal,
with the warmth
of your hands.
Help me to forget
my love
the terror of my past
at the hand of a monster
when I was just
a little child.

>>>P>i>l>i>>P>u>b>u>l>>>

I know this pain....I've lived this pain. When I was about three to three and a half years old I molested by an uncle...I pray this poem is not written from your own personal experience. If it is, then my heart reaches out to you. I noticed quite a few poems about child abuse today, but did not read them. In my portfolio I have three poems that speak about it in my own life. One is "Quilted Fields"....ANYWAY...thank you for sharing your heart through this poem, Pili. Take care and "BE" blessed.....Enjoy your time in Scotland!
:)s* smiles

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from Lpspider

Excellent

This is another amazing piece of poetry with deep thoughts and emotions built in. Very strong and powerful. Great description and word choice/usage as well.

little child,
today
my sweet man
those fears
came alive. ---I think the comma after 'little child' should/would be better as a period.

Well done.

Lpspider

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 Comment Written 30-May-2005