Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow

Excellent

Oh such a beautiful piece of your heart. It is so warming to see that you have someone you can rely on to do just that and hold you ever so close and protect you from and help cover those frightening memories that have been reawakened in you. Great job on this one, my friend. Much love, JL

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from lerkun

Excellent

oh pili, life can only get better and better, my arms are reaching from australia carrying warm thoughts from my mind..I hope you feel them...lerk

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from brazen

Good

i liked the flow and emotions presented. this would easily translate into song, though i would hesitate to say a love song. more like a "well wished amount of love" song.

i think this is two of your poems in the last day i've read and liked. i think i'll be back for more as well.

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from JWP

Good

I thought the thoughts in this poem were vivid and real. You used good language and I liked the fact it was written in the first person. However, I didn't appreciate the flow of this piece, I really felt as if you needed more structure to this - I couldn't follow it as free verse because of the full stops.

Enjoyable work though!

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 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from Lisloh

Excellent

OK ~~~ DEEP BREATH ~~~ TEARS ~~~ DEEP BREATH

As a poem, this is excellent indeed. The read is smooth, no bumps. The style enhances the impact and the emotions are clearly brought to surface. Awesome work.

As a moment in time shared, you have done an incredible job conveying the heart-beat of every woman when she just needs to be held. I'm so sorry for the pain you have had to deal with and I pray you find that place of peace.
Take care of you for those who care about you & be safe
Life & Love to you my Friend
Lisloh

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from clhutchinson

Excellent

I can easily see that Candy's mission has stirred painful memories in which you have portrayed well the never ending need for security to keep the past from pulling you back down. Beautiful flow inthese thoughts are are well expressed.

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from AuroraSky

Excellent

Well, I for one am hoping you do have someone like that in your life. A truly caring soul who holds you in a loving way without letting go is what someone as kind as you deserves.

All the best with such a held-back release.

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from ladykay

Excellent

Hi Pili...

Writing about the past is like a great churning over of events... somes the catharsis itself scares us...
I like this poem and some of the lines speak so well about the emotional outfall of the purging...

" ...let my tears flow,
for many years now
my eyes were
always dry."

And to join up with the above lines...

"Today
my sweet man
those fears
came alive."

Very well spoken, Pili.

ladykay

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from searchen

Excellent

Pili Pubul - Hi. You wrote what I have been thinking about off & on since yesterday. How many involved contributing members are stirring thoughts & past memories that will linger to haunt them even more? Your post is revealing, honest, touching to what a lot of us are thinking, are going through now because of the subject matter. I do hope you find calm quickly & sleep well tonight.

Brighter days,
searchen

 Comment Written 30-May-2005

Comment from sengwriter

Excellent

A poem as stated by you if has brought you tears, genuinely I can tell you that this poem would bring showers of tears if your sweet man can't reach you at such a point of crisis of yours. So beautifully you penned the words that it has become highly romantic with a great touch of your great soul. Let you sleep peacefully with his warm bliss and his shelter be as cozy as softest tenderness of all the solace you need at the moment. Gautam

 Comment Written 30-May-2005