What?
A little fun with punctuation.36 total reviews
Comment from chasennov
'What?' A very interesting fun story using punctuation as crime subject. Ingenious, innovative, and exraordinaire if I may say so. Well done, JM.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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'What?' A very interesting fun story using punctuation as crime subject. Ingenious, innovative, and exraordinaire if I may say so. Well done, JM.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thyank you very much for the rating and the kind comments.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was excellent, so witty and clever! Exclamation Markie told me to say that. Period Man urged me to add the last remark, at the behest of Sgt. Writer. "Sgt. Writer?" Shut up, Question Mark! You too, dear Exclamation Markie. Can't you all see that I am busy trying to write a review for the fine author who worked so hard to write this specifically for our entertainment? (Oh my) I give up! Sit down, Markie!
Heh-heh, nicely done...
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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This was excellent, so witty and clever! Exclamation Markie told me to say that. Period Man urged me to add the last remark, at the behest of Sgt. Writer. "Sgt. Writer?" Shut up, Question Mark! You too, dear Exclamation Markie. Can't you all see that I am busy trying to write a review for the fine author who worked so hard to write this specifically for our entertainment? (Oh my) I give up! Sit down, Markie!
Heh-heh, nicely done...
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thanks alot, you had me laughing too!
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Ha Ha Ha LOL Well done, what a hoot! I was really thinking we were going to get ourselves in knots when I was reading through this. It is a good spoof on Dragnet. Giddy
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Ha Ha Ha LOL Well done, what a hoot! I was really thinking we were going to get ourselves in knots when I was reading through this. It is a good spoof on Dragnet. Giddy
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thanks glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from 4hisglory
This is hilarious! I don't know who the characters are, but you have really put life into this punctuation story! OH! I could be the exclamation mark, I like to use it a lot.
Blessings in the contest. LaVonne
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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This is hilarious! I don't know who the characters are, but you have really put life into this punctuation story! OH! I could be the exclamation mark, I like to use it a lot.
Blessings in the contest. LaVonne
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thanks. It was a hoot to write.
Comment from emjaihammond
Congratulations! This is such a cute innovative story with tons of imagination. I thought you were creative in the way it was composed and you gave some personality to your characters. Well written.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Congratulations! This is such a cute innovative story with tons of imagination. I thought you were creative in the way it was composed and you gave some personality to your characters. Well written.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Mark Alan Trimeloni
Like a web of deceit, crime is rampant and flows freely along these streets.
Mild interest, but nothing overwhelming.
My name is Sgt. Joe Writer, I carry a pen. My partners are Period Man, Comma Dude and Exclamation Markie.
I like the Joe Writer character. I carry a pen. Made me laugh.
"Yeah man, period." Period Man slapped the desk he was sitting at.
Like an editor's version of "Mystery Men". Too funny.
Why hadn't I thought of it before? Damn, another Question Mark slipped out.
This does not seem like a battle that can be won. Run! Sgt. Writer! Run!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Like a web of deceit, crime is rampant and flows freely along these streets.
Mild interest, but nothing overwhelming.
My name is Sgt. Joe Writer, I carry a pen. My partners are Period Man, Comma Dude and Exclamation Markie.
I like the Joe Writer character. I carry a pen. Made me laugh.
"Yeah man, period." Period Man slapped the desk he was sitting at.
Like an editor's version of "Mystery Men". Too funny.
Why hadn't I thought of it before? Damn, another Question Mark slipped out.
This does not seem like a battle that can be won. Run! Sgt. Writer! Run!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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thanks
Comment from TheWriteTeach
I liked the idea of using punctuation marks as crime-fighting characters. Your description of their crime-fighting powers was cute. The name you gave your main character, Sgt. Joe Writer, was apropos to the story.
However, the whole premise seems as if it were taken directly from the original television show Dragnet. It was a show about a police detective, Sgt. Joe Friday, and his partners. The TV show was based in Los Angeles and in the same era as your story, 1967. The TV character introduced himself as, "My name is Sgt. Joe Friday, I carry a badge." Your Sgt. Joe introduced himself the exact same way except he carried a pen instead of a badge.
Writers need to be careful when borrowing ideas. This piece is borderline plagiarism, if not actual plagiarism; hence the one-star rating.
TheWriteTeach
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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I liked the idea of using punctuation marks as crime-fighting characters. Your description of their crime-fighting powers was cute. The name you gave your main character, Sgt. Joe Writer, was apropos to the story.
However, the whole premise seems as if it were taken directly from the original television show Dragnet. It was a show about a police detective, Sgt. Joe Friday, and his partners. The TV show was based in Los Angeles and in the same era as your story, 1967. The TV character introduced himself as, "My name is Sgt. Joe Friday, I carry a badge." Your Sgt. Joe introduced himself the exact same way except he carried a pen instead of a badge.
Writers need to be careful when borrowing ideas. This piece is borderline plagiarism, if not actual plagiarism; hence the one-star rating.
TheWriteTeach
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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It was a spoof on Dragnet. Hence I carry a pen- I carry a badge. As far as plagerism goes, fine, that is what a spoof is. Your rating is inapropriate but you have your opinion.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is really very clever and I wonder how you thought of it. I liked 'As we moved closer we could hear the faint murmuring of a word.' - I liked the names 'Comma Dude' etc. All in all a really good read. Good Luck in the contest - I think you have a winner. Regards Dorothy (sorry no 6's left - you deserve one)
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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This is really very clever and I wonder how you thought of it. I liked 'As we moved closer we could hear the faint murmuring of a word.' - I liked the names 'Comma Dude' etc. All in all a really good read. Good Luck in the contest - I think you have a winner. Regards Dorothy (sorry no 6's left - you deserve one)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the kind words. As for how it came about,I just started writing and with words formed a sentence and so on. Actually it started with the voice of Sgt. Joe Friday of Dragnet fame of the 60's. Then it atarted to flow.
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Right - I'm pretty sure you're a bloke - but who knows I could be wrong. Good Luck. D
Comment from Darkhorse555
1967 the year I was born man is never to happy when you offer him a question mark and he does not know the answer what,a beautiful piece
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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1967 the year I was born man is never to happy when you offer him a question mark and he does not know the answer what,a beautiful piece
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thanks, 67 was a good year
Comment from scarhands
Very creative, I had to see where you were going to take this after I skimmed the beginning. You have a clever brain, and I'm always impressed when a writer stretches the limits of conventional storytelling. Thanks for pressing on to the unconventional realm!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Very creative, I had to see where you were going to take this after I skimmed the beginning. You have a clever brain, and I'm always impressed when a writer stretches the limits of conventional storytelling. Thanks for pressing on to the unconventional realm!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thanks and my clever brain thanks you as well
