Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Dawn Munro
YIKES! Bev, this is SO good! I saw nothing out of place or needing any edit, and I found this chapter not only riveting, but chilling - very authentic! You know the situation with the sixes, I'm sure - none available. But it's outstanding!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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YIKES! Bev, this is SO good! I saw nothing out of place or needing any edit, and I found this chapter not only riveting, but chilling - very authentic! You know the situation with the sixes, I'm sure - none available. But it's outstanding!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Dawn, thank you so very much! I appreciate your support and encouragement, hope you know... Love ya, Bev
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Me too you, Bev, and you are always welcome - it's a story I'd pay to read. :)
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That last puts a real smile on my face. I had an interesting review just prior to yours, so I was especially appreciative of your comments and support, my dear friend.
XXX Bev
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Uh oh, coming over...
Comment from in777wr#
Very interesting story. Well written. Interesting how "Tony Buday" could hear the Watcher's voice. It sounds like "Ty Longacre" has his work cut out for him.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Very interesting story. Well written. Interesting how "Tony Buday" could hear the Watcher's voice. It sounds like "Ty Longacre" has his work cut out for him.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thanks for your encouraging review! I really appreciate you taking time to read.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I was completely lost in this chapter - such detailed scenes and the watcher seems real gruesome -- I like the little snatched of Ty positioning his hat and suchlike -- all painting the scene. As always, most enjoyable, Bev
Ty studied the area and, particularly, the tree's surface - I've read this 3 times, Bev, and feel the "and" or extra comma is not really needed -
studied the area, particularly the tree's surface
inherited the ability[,] and, in the view of - lose that comma
his limbs were lead. - leaden
He[,] then[,] approached - why the commas here?
Margaret
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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I was completely lost in this chapter - such detailed scenes and the watcher seems real gruesome -- I like the little snatched of Ty positioning his hat and suchlike -- all painting the scene. As always, most enjoyable, Bev
Ty studied the area and, particularly, the tree's surface - I've read this 3 times, Bev, and feel the "and" or extra comma is not really needed -
studied the area, particularly the tree's surface
inherited the ability[,] and, in the view of - lose that comma
his limbs were lead. - leaden
He[,] then[,] approached - why the commas here?
Margaret
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Hi, Margaret. Thanks so much for your very generous review and suggestions. I will make the changes pronto. I wasn't sure if this chapter was a bit far-out, so I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. I feel much better now! Warmest regards, Bev
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I think this chapter explained a lot -- M
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Thanks so much, Margaret. You caught my intention. :0)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
After I finish with Paige, Cash, and Morgan, I am thinking about writing a story that will have some Native American flare too it, just a little. Anyway, I am researching now, but I may have to rack your brain. I enjoyed reading your post.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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After I finish with Paige, Cash, and Morgan, I am thinking about writing a story that will have some Native American flare too it, just a little. Anyway, I am researching now, but I may have to rack your brain. I enjoyed reading your post.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the great review, barbara. Call on me any time! :0)
Comment from Adri7enne
Aha! We get to meet the evil one. Interesting twist, Bev.
Your tale is taking on an eerie kind of feel. Good stuff. It sets it apart from the old repetitive format. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Aha! We get to meet the evil one. Interesting twist, Bev.
Your tale is taking on an eerie kind of feel. Good stuff. It sets it apart from the old repetitive format. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much, Adrienne. I always enjoy getting your perceptions and insights. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Bev,
The story continues to be interesting and attention grabbing. It held my attention as the suspense builds and the mystery deepens. It's well-written and has a good flow as you walk the reader through the unknown. I enjoyed the read, and I look forward to the next chapter.
Curtis
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Bev,
The story continues to be interesting and attention grabbing. It held my attention as the suspense builds and the mystery deepens. It's well-written and has a good flow as you walk the reader through the unknown. I enjoyed the read, and I look forward to the next chapter.
Curtis
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thank you much, Curtis. I appreciate your generosity and encouragement! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from robina1978
Fabulous artwork indeed to complement this chapter. Ty finds tracks that he has never seen before. It is worrying him. He wonders if Jana might have wiped the traces of the murder. Then somebody is shot who only resembles the serial killer Eddie. Not good enough.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Fabulous artwork indeed to complement this chapter. Ty finds tracks that he has never seen before. It is worrying him. He wonders if Jana might have wiped the traces of the murder. Then somebody is shot who only resembles the serial killer Eddie. Not good enough.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much, Ine. I appreciate your continuing to read my novel! Means a lot to me. Warmest regards, Bev
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I love it, so welcome, Ine
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:0) Thanks!
Comment from chasennov
Along The Jericho Road. 'Kuta Moon, Part 11.' Another excellent chapter of your ongoing saga. I thought your formulation of this story was as good as the others. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Along The Jericho Road. 'Kuta Moon, Part 11.' Another excellent chapter of your ongoing saga. I thought your formulation of this story was as good as the others. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thanks, C. I sure appreciate your encouragement and support. Warmest regards, Bev
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
As always, great. This just gets curiouser and curiouser. I was so afraid that thing was going to kill Ty. I get a little too involved with the characters in stories maybe. Well done friend. Rox
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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As always, great. This just gets curiouser and curiouser. I was so afraid that thing was going to kill Ty. I get a little too involved with the characters in stories maybe. Well done friend. Rox
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much for the great review, Rox. The Thing has bigger fish to fry LOL. Have a great weekend... xxx Bev
Comment from NicciFaye
Now this is what I like...forgive me for missing some chapters. I have to catch up. I enjoyed this very mysterious, creative and suspenseful with creepy.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Now this is what I like...forgive me for missing some chapters. I have to catch up. I enjoyed this very mysterious, creative and suspenseful with creepy.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Hiya, Nicci. The supernatural elements are building to what, I hope, will be quite a spectacular ending. Thanks much for the great review. :0) Bev
