I Choose Rainbows
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "A Pious Man"Thoughts from the dark side
2 total reviews
Comment from SteveY
Wonderful! A very well thought out story and poetry and rhyme and rhythm. I little long for me, but hey, he was old and climbing a mountain. Excellent job.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Wonderful! A very well thought out story and poetry and rhyme and rhythm. I little long for me, but hey, he was old and climbing a mountain. Excellent job.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the review. It is a bit long.
Norm
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This would make an excellent dramatic reading. I think you posted part of it twice. I like the idea of Moses being a symbolic golden rainbow as well. Personally I think I would make the lines longer instead of shorter, but I imagine you are trying to get readers to slow down and ponder, which we all need to do once in a while.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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This would make an excellent dramatic reading. I think you posted part of it twice. I like the idea of Moses being a symbolic golden rainbow as well. Personally I think I would make the lines longer instead of shorter, but I imagine you are trying to get readers to slow down and ponder, which we all need to do once in a while.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the review. It is a long poem and I appreciate your reading and comments.
Norm
