Dancing to an Imperfect Tune
On losing eyesight20 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amada, you did an excellent job writing this heartfelt story about the gift of music and dance your son gave to you with that cd and it touched your soul and made you sing. i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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this is very well written, amada, you did an excellent job writing this heartfelt story about the gift of music and dance your son gave to you with that cd and it touched your soul and made you sing. i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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Thank you for your very thoughtful review.
Comment from 4hisglory
What a wonderful story! Our bodies get older, but we are still very much alive on the inside. Why not enjoy everything we can instead of complaining about what doesn't work.
Just a few minor things:
- besides my eyesight (leave out 'of')
- friendliness (of?) my kitchen
- rest (of?) of my senses
Very well written! Blessings, LaVonne
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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What a wonderful story! Our bodies get older, but we are still very much alive on the inside. Why not enjoy everything we can instead of complaining about what doesn't work.
Just a few minor things:
- besides my eyesight (leave out 'of')
- friendliness (of?) my kitchen
- rest (of?) of my senses
Very well written! Blessings, LaVonne
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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Thank you for commenting to this story. Sorry for the delay, but I truly admire your comments and appreciate your help with the SPAG's. I fixed them!
Comment from Deanita
My dear friend, your story made memcry. I know you've gone through difficult times with your eryesight and then that gift from your son makes you happy, it's certainly a gift.
I hope you recover soon and then you will hear another tune!
U&n afectuoso abrazo.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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My dear friend, your story made memcry. I know you've gone through difficult times with your eryesight and then that gift from your son makes you happy, it's certainly a gift.
I hope you recover soon and then you will hear another tune!
U&n afectuoso abrazo.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for this heartfelt review. Such wonderful encouragements, I'm touched!
Comment from JM daSilva
I think it is great that even though you are having problems with your eyesight, you prefer to see the cup half full, not half empty. You are happy, no matter what, that's great.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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I think it is great that even though you are having problems with your eyesight, you prefer to see the cup half full, not half empty. You are happy, no matter what, that's great.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the inspirational review. Half full gives me inspiration, another blessing.
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Welcome.
Comment from God's Writer
A wonderful and positive lesson for all to learn. I am doctor. I recommend you take Beta Carotene and Ginko Bilboa for the eyes. That will help your eyes. I will also pray for you if ou would like me too.
Shalom,
Rabbi Erick
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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A wonderful and positive lesson for all to learn. I am doctor. I recommend you take Beta Carotene and Ginko Bilboa for the eyes. That will help your eyes. I will also pray for you if ou would like me too.
Shalom,
Rabbi Erick
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Thank you. Thank you.
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You are welcome my friend.
Shalom (God's peace)
Comment from adewpearl
box in my hands, - replace comma with a period
what a thoughtful gift from your son :-)
great section where you feel the music and begin to dance
what a joyful celebration of life :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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box in my hands, - replace comma with a period
what a thoughtful gift from your son :-)
great section where you feel the music and begin to dance
what a joyful celebration of life :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Thank you, dear Brooke!
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
A compassionate message to others that we are all multi-talented, and our senses compliment each other.
Don't they say that the wise woman hears the problem, closes her eyes and then answers the question; often not opening her eyes when she speaks; you have arrived.
We are all somewhat fearful of life, and then even more if we consider how we would cope if one of the senses was diminished or lost; but other functions become acute: find the rose by its bouquet and not a view of it; remember friends by the tone of the voice; music is heard but also seen in the mind.
Do not despair for you have found another path to the enjoyment of life; go to the woods with a friend, hear the stream, identify the bird sounds, smell the bouquet of natures gift of flowers; and listen for the faint chorus of How Great Thou Art, as you realize you are still special.
A powerful message to those who might too easily give up.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Excellent.
A compassionate message to others that we are all multi-talented, and our senses compliment each other.
Don't they say that the wise woman hears the problem, closes her eyes and then answers the question; often not opening her eyes when she speaks; you have arrived.
We are all somewhat fearful of life, and then even more if we consider how we would cope if one of the senses was diminished or lost; but other functions become acute: find the rose by its bouquet and not a view of it; remember friends by the tone of the voice; music is heard but also seen in the mind.
Do not despair for you have found another path to the enjoyment of life; go to the woods with a friend, hear the stream, identify the bird sounds, smell the bouquet of natures gift of flowers; and listen for the faint chorus of How Great Thou Art, as you realize you are still special.
A powerful message to those who might too easily give up.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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What beautiful and comforting words...Yes, slowly but surely I think I am in the acceptance stage. But there are also days of uprising when I want to reverse life, and life, and spring. What a beautiful heart you have. God bless you.
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God is watching over you . . .I know because I asked Him to.
Comment from psingh85
Your words are so empowering. As I was reading this piece I totally felt the character's frustrations, heartache, and resolve at the situation. It was moving to hear her realize that though her eyes were failing her, she still had everything else. I would fix some spelling and grammar mistakes. Great job and good luck!
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Your words are so empowering. As I was reading this piece I totally felt the character's frustrations, heartache, and resolve at the situation. It was moving to hear her realize that though her eyes were failing her, she still had everything else. I would fix some spelling and grammar mistakes. Great job and good luck!
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thank you for reading my work and welcome to fanstory.
Comment from Gungalo
Life is good eh? A wonderful trip through the Four Tops collection girl and even better one through your kitchen to their tunes.
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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Life is good eh? A wonderful trip through the Four Tops collection girl and even better one through your kitchen to their tunes.
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Thank you for your great support dear friend.
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Smile.
Comment from Mrs Jones
I laughed and then I cried old friend. You are such a brave Fancy Nancy. Music is truly the fruit of life.
in the friendliness my kitchen... of my kitchen.So well written.
Bless you
Rose.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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I laughed and then I cried old friend. You are such a brave Fancy Nancy. Music is truly the fruit of life.
in the friendliness my kitchen... of my kitchen.So well written.
Bless you
Rose.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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You know, I hear love in your comments. Thank you.
