The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Cloudy"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
16 total reviews
Comment from lorijean
Stunning artwork, you can see some pictures in the clouds an ever changing scene, such lovely words your wrote, Nature is just the best to write about...
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Stunning artwork, you can see some pictures in the clouds an ever changing scene, such lovely words your wrote, Nature is just the best to write about...
Comment Written 10-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much, I am delighted you liked 'Cloudy'. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Sagnik Das
Ah, Madam, please do forgive me for this rather delayed response ( a follower as I duly am, above all !! ) ... Had been a bit too 'plagued' of late, with all those academic enterprises reigning forth ! LOL .....
Nevertheless, Wonderfully done! Most Admirably have you rendered this sagacious poem - indeed like a connoisseur in every sense....
Fraught in plausible touches of artistic symbolism, I can't help admiring the sheer mastery of articulate diction, you so brilliantly chose to employ in this tender piece - the choicest use of symbolic imagery in just three tiny lines, truly deems commendable appraisal ; For the employment of so few words, you manage to say so much indeed - and herein, I conjecture, thrives your beseeming greatness as a poet - the lofty message in the poem rings out in vociferous clarity. Scarcely have I words enough to commend you ....
In the face of its inevitable limitations, (it being a '5-7-5' poetry sequence), the unbridled flow of poetic expression tends to "glide" on, effortlessly yet - an attribute which in itself seems challenging enough for any writer of poetry to achieve .... Your work thus pleases me all the more ; I adore it ! ...
Hence, to infer precisely, there persists a somewhat latent sense of 'intriguing profoundness' around this enigmatic work of yours, which pleases me the most and deserves my fondest appraisal ...
Well done Madam .... three cheers to you!
Too impeccable you are, I guess, with this specific poetic genre, to even require a modest review ! In the course of my rather brief sojourn here at FS, I have chanced to come across many 5-7-5 s, but yours, for lack of a proper word, stands simply unrivaled ! I would've glorified it with even more stars, had they been available .... Outstanding work ! You are but to win this one for sure ( ay, beloved Lady, mark my words here !!) ;)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Ah, Madam, please do forgive me for this rather delayed response ( a follower as I duly am, above all !! ) ... Had been a bit too 'plagued' of late, with all those academic enterprises reigning forth ! LOL .....
Nevertheless, Wonderfully done! Most Admirably have you rendered this sagacious poem - indeed like a connoisseur in every sense....
Fraught in plausible touches of artistic symbolism, I can't help admiring the sheer mastery of articulate diction, you so brilliantly chose to employ in this tender piece - the choicest use of symbolic imagery in just three tiny lines, truly deems commendable appraisal ; For the employment of so few words, you manage to say so much indeed - and herein, I conjecture, thrives your beseeming greatness as a poet - the lofty message in the poem rings out in vociferous clarity. Scarcely have I words enough to commend you ....
In the face of its inevitable limitations, (it being a '5-7-5' poetry sequence), the unbridled flow of poetic expression tends to "glide" on, effortlessly yet - an attribute which in itself seems challenging enough for any writer of poetry to achieve .... Your work thus pleases me all the more ; I adore it ! ...
Hence, to infer precisely, there persists a somewhat latent sense of 'intriguing profoundness' around this enigmatic work of yours, which pleases me the most and deserves my fondest appraisal ...
Well done Madam .... three cheers to you!
Too impeccable you are, I guess, with this specific poetic genre, to even require a modest review ! In the course of my rather brief sojourn here at FS, I have chanced to come across many 5-7-5 s, but yours, for lack of a proper word, stands simply unrivaled ! I would've glorified it with even more stars, had they been available .... Outstanding work ! You are but to win this one for sure ( ay, beloved Lady, mark my words here !!) ;)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Hi there, Your appraisal of my work and the beauty of your own comments have made me so very happy. I am delighted that you enjoyed the 5-7-5 form and it's content. Thank you for taking the time to respond in such an excellent manner. Best to you always. Carolyn
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Oh, please, don't thank me I beg ; for it was much to my own elated pleasure that I availed the opportunity of coming across such a wonderful poetic piece. Hence,on the contrary, it is rather I who ought to extend my overwhelming thankfulness to you for your kind appreciation of my much erroneous review...! Thank you so much, Carolyn, for this most affable bounty. You are but one of a Kind ! :)
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Oh, and by the way, dear Carolyn, do you, in any case, happen to enjoy opera ? - Have you ever heard of Mario Lanza, or even, Richard Tucker ? - 'tis just for curiosity's sake that I ask .... :)
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I do love Opera, Pavarotti is one of my favorites. And yes I enjoy Mario Lanza, he died so very young. Richard Tucker, I haven't followed him as much, but they were both extremely talented. Have a good night, my new friend. Carolyn
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Well, Carolyn, I'm already engrossed, listening to the great Lanza, my most favorite tenor, reeling enchantingly under the thrilling impact of his majestic voice, as I presently dress for bed .... Good night, dear friend ; sweet dreams to you !
Comment from Spitfire
Very clever with the multiple meanings of cloud. All three lines can stand on their own yet work well together. Good assonance with sky and shine, alliteration with clouds cover. Good contest entry.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Very clever with the multiple meanings of cloud. All three lines can stand on their own yet work well together. Good assonance with sky and shine, alliteration with clouds cover. Good contest entry.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Thanks Shari, I appreciate your great review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Darkhorse555
clouds of tears run down this piece in my better judgement the sunshine seems to make an appearance making way for a lovely piece
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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clouds of tears run down this piece in my better judgement the sunshine seems to make an appearance making way for a lovely piece
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you for such a wonderful review of this one. I am glad you enjoyed it. Carolyn
Comment from Gungalo
Clouds cover the sky
Emotions cloud good judgment
Sunshine dispels cloud
An awesome write that tells just what the sunshine can do. So much sunshine to carry around is a wonderful thing
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Clouds cover the sky
Emotions cloud good judgment
Sunshine dispels cloud
An awesome write that tells just what the sunshine can do. So much sunshine to carry around is a wonderful thing
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Hope you are having a great day.
:-) Carolyn
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I am Carolyn, I am indeed!! Hope you are too.
Comment from MizKat
This is a very nice 5 - 7 - 5 poem for the contest. It should go far. It's a very interesting read that I enjoyed a lot. Kat
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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This is a very nice 5 - 7 - 5 poem for the contest. It should go far. It's a very interesting read that I enjoyed a lot. Kat
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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I am happy you liked the poem. And thanks for the good wishes.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This is an excellent 5/7/5, Carolyn!
The repetition of the word "cloud" in all three lines places emphasis and creates impact. Absolutely perfect photo to accompany your poem ... with the sunshine peaking through ... "sunshine dispels cloud".
This is deserving of six stars. Had I any left to give, there would be one here with your name on it for this write. A very good entry for the contest! Best wishes to you in that regard.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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This is an excellent 5/7/5, Carolyn!
The repetition of the word "cloud" in all three lines places emphasis and creates impact. Absolutely perfect photo to accompany your poem ... with the sunshine peaking through ... "sunshine dispels cloud".
This is deserving of six stars. Had I any left to give, there would be one here with your name on it for this write. A very good entry for the contest! Best wishes to you in that regard.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Wow, Connie what an awesome review. Thank you and for all the encouraging comments. Have a great weekend. :-) Carolyn
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You're welcome, Carolyn. You have a great weekend too! :)
Connie
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes you have done very well using this form this is a strong 5/7/5 contest entry and so true well done my friend regards Jill
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Yes you have done very well using this form this is a strong 5/7/5 contest entry and so true well done my friend regards Jill
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thanks Jill for the wonderful review. Carolyn
Comment from jmdg1954
Carolyn... I like the journey of emotions you take the reader through in so few short words. Sometimes I know, I hastily make decisions through the emotion of the moment, summa good-summa bad.
Good luck in the contest. John
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Carolyn... I like the journey of emotions you take the reader through in so few short words. Sometimes I know, I hastily make decisions through the emotion of the moment, summa good-summa bad.
Good luck in the contest. John
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thanks John, I decided to enter a few (haven't won any, but it is good experience) Hope you have a great summa :-) Carolyn
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
not many of these i rate, but you have worded this thoughtfully with goo d presentation. best of luck for the contest connie
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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not many of these i rate, but you have worded this thoughtfully with goo d presentation. best of luck for the contest connie
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Connie, I am glad you read and reviewed this one. I appreciate your time, Carolyn
