The Animal Doctor
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have not read your previous posts so this is all I can review on. This is well written and the characters are well defined. I found it very enjoyable to read and a good plot.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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I have not read your previous posts so this is all I can review on. This is well written and the characters are well defined. I found it very enjoyable to read and a good plot.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you barbara.
Comment from abbasjoy
A very well written chapter, with a gamut of emotions both in the case of Nate but also Eva, each one having their own motives for being in the relationship.
It's never a good thing to be in a romantic relationship with someone who is in love with another, as it has the tendency to cause one to be devious in trying to hold unto the other person.
I look forward to reading future chapters.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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A very well written chapter, with a gamut of emotions both in the case of Nate but also Eva, each one having their own motives for being in the relationship.
It's never a good thing to be in a romantic relationship with someone who is in love with another, as it has the tendency to cause one to be devious in trying to hold unto the other person.
I look forward to reading future chapters.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for this fine review.
Comment from barkingdog
This was happy and sad at the same time. I felt bad that he lost what he thought he might have--a baby. But was glad that he didn't have to marry Eva.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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This was happy and sad at the same time. I felt bad that he lost what he thought he might have--a baby. But was glad that he didn't have to marry Eva.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for reading.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Somehow, I like ladylike heroines - the boldness of Margaret in the cabin and now Eva's brazenness bother me a bit....
It's just me!
Nicely done, Aunt Harriet! :)
Spags:
his medical skills were impeccable and Dr. Koren ... - (drop so)
She's shit .... I don't think a lady would have used the expression at that time ... or if the expression itself existed ... suggest: Oh, she's lower than low/she's despicable/she's not worth two pennies
Eva said, kissing him on the lips (not said, she kissed him ...)
the latest fashion(s)
if you like (not you'd like)
Will you stop ? (question mark, not exclamation mark)
Nate dropped Eva off at her place instead of allowing her the usual weekend at his. He wanted to be alone. ... suggest you rethink this line. It would be unheard of, at the time, for a young, unmarried woman - engaged or not - to be alone in a man's home for a few hours, never mind a weekend!
"Honey, won't you let me stay with you tonight. I'll be quiet. You won't even know I'm there."
"Eva, you sleep naked and never put a stitch on until after breakfast. And you don't think I'll know you're there?"
... suggest you remove these lines - for the same reason! Sex before marriage ... not at that time period, not with genteel young ladies, anyway. Not with the kind of girl one marries!
nighty - suggest nightgown - more in keeping with the times
Okay, forget about the previous comments/suggestions .. this couple don't seem to have had the moral scruple expected of that time ....
she flashed her green eyes .. suggest: her green eyes flashed
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Somehow, I like ladylike heroines - the boldness of Margaret in the cabin and now Eva's brazenness bother me a bit....
It's just me!
Nicely done, Aunt Harriet! :)
Spags:
his medical skills were impeccable and Dr. Koren ... - (drop so)
She's shit .... I don't think a lady would have used the expression at that time ... or if the expression itself existed ... suggest: Oh, she's lower than low/she's despicable/she's not worth two pennies
Eva said, kissing him on the lips (not said, she kissed him ...)
the latest fashion(s)
if you like (not you'd like)
Will you stop ? (question mark, not exclamation mark)
Nate dropped Eva off at her place instead of allowing her the usual weekend at his. He wanted to be alone. ... suggest you rethink this line. It would be unheard of, at the time, for a young, unmarried woman - engaged or not - to be alone in a man's home for a few hours, never mind a weekend!
"Honey, won't you let me stay with you tonight. I'll be quiet. You won't even know I'm there."
"Eva, you sleep naked and never put a stitch on until after breakfast. And you don't think I'll know you're there?"
... suggest you remove these lines - for the same reason! Sex before marriage ... not at that time period, not with genteel young ladies, anyway. Not with the kind of girl one marries!
nighty - suggest nightgown - more in keeping with the times
Okay, forget about the previous comments/suggestions .. this couple don't seem to have had the moral scruple expected of that time ....
she flashed her green eyes .. suggest: her green eyes flashed
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you dear for reading and for your suggestions.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Lady
This just keeps getting better with each chapter. Your storyline and dialog between the characters is superb. Poor Eva, can't tell the difference between a miscarriage and menopause. The emotions are felt in this superbly crafted chapter, thus the 6th star
Bear
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Hey there Lady
This just keeps getting better with each chapter. Your storyline and dialog between the characters is superb. Poor Eva, can't tell the difference between a miscarriage and menopause. The emotions are felt in this superbly crafted chapter, thus the 6th star
Bear
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Oh, thank you Bear. I really appreciate you keeping up with my story. I really like it when my readers stay with me. And thank you for the six stars.
Comment from Jade Lawson
Good start in this chapter. Indeed Nathan was faced with the upcoming marriage of the one he loved. I liked the way everyone refers to Margaret and the way they bash her, I enjoyed these dialogues. I liked the introduction of Eva and how she is linked to Nathan, still he is clearly in love with Margaret and Eva sadly perceives this. I liked the dialogue between Eva and Nathan about the possible pregnancy. Nathan was a bit cold about his intention to marry her though. However there was no pregnancy. Very good story and progression, I am enjoying.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Good start in this chapter. Indeed Nathan was faced with the upcoming marriage of the one he loved. I liked the way everyone refers to Margaret and the way they bash her, I enjoyed these dialogues. I liked the introduction of Eva and how she is linked to Nathan, still he is clearly in love with Margaret and Eva sadly perceives this. I liked the dialogue between Eva and Nathan about the possible pregnancy. Nathan was a bit cold about his intention to marry her though. However there was no pregnancy. Very good story and progression, I am enjoying.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you my dear for reading and analyzing my story. You are "Right On."
Comment from Titan Black
I like your style of writing. Even though, i 'm not really into
These types of books, where are no twist and turns. And everything
is just perfect. The only thing to worry about is if Nate is going
To marry her. But you are still a good writer.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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I like your style of writing. Even though, i 'm not really into
These types of books, where are no twist and turns. And everything
is just perfect. The only thing to worry about is if Nate is going
To marry her. But you are still a good writer.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you Black for taking the time and reading my story.
Comment from kiwijenny
Why does everyone have sex. In a period piece in society people waited for marriage. That s why Margaret had such a hold on Nate because he was tantalized by her. She was all he wanted but could ever have. I feel your characters. They are vivid real .well done
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Why does everyone have sex. In a period piece in society people waited for marriage. That s why Margaret had such a hold on Nate because he was tantalized by her. She was all he wanted but could ever have. I feel your characters. They are vivid real .well done
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you jenny. Great analysis.
Comment from GregoryCody
I really like the dialogue! I always do. "Oh she's shit". Haha great. You have a strong story here and it always leaves the reader wanting more. A huge goal you have achieved. Well done here.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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I really like the dialogue! I always do. "Oh she's shit". Haha great. You have a strong story here and it always leaves the reader wanting more. A huge goal you have achieved. Well done here.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much Cody.
Comment from NicciFaye
What a turn of events. I enjoyed this chapter this story is progessing along very nicely. This was quite a long chapter but a great read.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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What a turn of events. I enjoyed this chapter this story is progessing along very nicely. This was quite a long chapter but a great read.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for your review.
