The Bulbs Buried within One's Life
A freestyle poem about bulbs and life.10 total reviews
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
Okay Mike, I get it - you are good at this poetry writing lark! :) I know my brother Eph will like your work too, so I am fanning you on behalf of us both (normally, just me!) and i do need to stay on his good side :) best Connie
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
Okay Mike, I get it - you are good at this poetry writing lark! :) I know my brother Eph will like your work too, so I am fanning you on behalf of us both (normally, just me!) and i do need to stay on his good side :) best Connie
Comment Written 05-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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LOL! I like to think of myself as a poetic writing lark, but not with the Jewish Museum. This poem took about a month of thought and suffering before I even had a concept, then two months writing at my special place, the HI Youth hostel where for what ever reason seems conducive of difficult poetry. Also a few doors down from the people that made Poe a winner and started his writing career. Their 5-7-5 took me six hours, compared for another one I wrote for a different museum that took me 30 seconds.
I love this flattering review and the compliments; many thanks! Mike.
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lol, glad you love this flattering review and compliments, 'cos to be honest I'm a total bitch, but doing my best! :D
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Don't care for the bitch aspect, but do appreciate sincere honesty. Mike
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oh you will definitely get that :) and as I said, I am doing my best! lol
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the picture to the bulbs you draw with your words the beginning of life in a wasteland they will blossom in due time lovely piece
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
from the picture to the bulbs you draw with your words the beginning of life in a wasteland they will blossom in due time lovely piece
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
HI Mike,
You have written a fabulous poem and one I enjoyed reading. I love to garden and I too think of bulbs like the essence of life. No matter how long they remain underground they will find their way to the sun. Your rhyming is lyrical, the words are descriptive and lovely, the flow is smooth with a good metaphor that makes this piece a joy to read. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
HI Mike,
You have written a fabulous poem and one I enjoyed reading. I love to garden and I too think of bulbs like the essence of life. No matter how long they remain underground they will find their way to the sun. Your rhyming is lyrical, the words are descriptive and lovely, the flow is smooth with a good metaphor that makes this piece a joy to read. Well done, chey
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I thank you you very much for this review. This is another Hostel poem and to me that place is special as I find the climes to put pieces like this together. I also thank you for the compliments and genereous rating. Mike
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Welcome!
Comment from Jean Lutz
Your words describe just what my soul has been observing. I live near the Louisiana coast, an area often pounded by storms. Both nature and humans take some beatings. I've noticed sometimes after the worst storms nature comes back even stronger. A lesson for humans? And from your own writing, my "take-a-way" is to encourage others so the bulbs will blossom.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
Your words describe just what my soul has been observing. I live near the Louisiana coast, an area often pounded by storms. Both nature and humans take some beatings. I've noticed sometimes after the worst storms nature comes back even stronger. A lesson for humans? And from your own writing, my "take-a-way" is to encourage others so the bulbs will blossom.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Wow! This is so true and one time my father thought we were crazy for going caving in West Virginia because it was totally flooded out. Well, our caving crew doesn't pay attention to the news, and by was there a lesson there! First at their quiet resolved faith after the disaster, but also in the spirit and what a wonder to see a whole town come back.
I really appreciate the honor of the genereous rating as well such a wonderful review where you included your experiences. Thank you, Mike
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This poem has an interesting premise. I think "wintery" is supposed to be spelled "wintry." I wonder if you could shorten the last line to say "Away from sight and mind, life still thrives underground."
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
This poem has an interesting premise. I think "wintery" is supposed to be spelled "wintry." I wonder if you could shorten the last line to say "Away from sight and mind, life still thrives underground."
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I changed the word to wintry, then looked it up and changed it back as both spellings are correct in the unabridged dictionary. I was going to repeat the first line for the last, but I was more comfortable doing the last line as I did. I thank you for this review. Mike
Comment from Titan Black
This poem is nice. You did a good job at describing how
Beautiful Gods creation really is. But most of all, that God does
Exist. For, wthout God, these flowers would not be able to survive
The different elements (seasons). I like. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
This poem is nice. You did a good job at describing how
Beautiful Gods creation really is. But most of all, that God does
Exist. For, wthout God, these flowers would not be able to survive
The different elements (seasons). I like. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
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No problem. I don't mind supporting. And when you
Get a chance, visit my page, and let me know what you think of my poetry. If you like, hit the 'fan' button. Hopefully, this be the start of our networking.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mike, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the life that is burning to break out. i enjoyed reading this one. great picture
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
this is very well written, mike, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the life that is burning to break out. i enjoyed reading this one. great picture
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I thank you for your compliments and this reivew. Mike
Comment from 4tun81
Good alliteration in "sprouting seeking". Good imagery. I like the idea of life springing from the cold bleak wasteland of winter. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
Good alliteration in "sprouting seeking". Good imagery. I like the idea of life springing from the cold bleak wasteland of winter. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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NO, I thank you for reviewing this as well as the compliments and sharing what you like. Mike
Comment from mizzkris20
Your imagery captures the beauty of nature and all its glory. I really liked it. I like rhyming poetry and this one is very impressive. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
Your imagery captures the beauty of nature and all its glory. I really liked it. I like rhyming poetry and this one is very impressive. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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This was on my mind for a month, but is penned in a special place where difficult or problem poems love working themselves out; and it is only a couple doors down from where Poe was given a start for his writing as a contest winner. Mike
Comment from IndianaIrish
I really liked your poem and enjoyed reading it, Mike. I love the imagery of the beauty of nature alive and thriving underground and below what our eyes can see...just waiting for the chance to be seen and show its beauty. Can be like us, too.
Great writing.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
I really liked your poem and enjoyed reading it, Mike. I love the imagery of the beauty of nature alive and thriving underground and below what our eyes can see...just waiting for the chance to be seen and show its beauty. Can be like us, too.
Great writing.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I needed a spring poem for a magazine submission, but it has been either winter or summer here on a daily basis. I think that is why the concept of bulbs came about. The editor loves my ability to relate seasonal imagery to life, but really that is a gift from Miluska. Thank you so much for reviewing this, as well the compliments. I have had an element of my Baltimore's Museums project create a dickens of a dilemia for me and what a wonderful thing to come out of the gate running with another work. Thank you! -Mike