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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "While silence grows."Mostly romance.
28 total reviews
Comment from Sallyo
This is an elegant piece of free verse, and I like the picture you matched it with. There's a fair bit of alliteration there, but it isn't very obvious on first reading; more repeated sounds (s in one verse, p in another) than an obvious ploy. The last line intrigued me.
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This is an elegant piece of free verse, and I like the picture you matched it with. There's a fair bit of alliteration there, but it isn't very obvious on first reading; more repeated sounds (s in one verse, p in another) than an obvious ploy. The last line intrigued me.
Comment Written 28-May-2005
Comment from ladywriter39
A beautiful desciption of a love so great....even in their absence, their aroma can still be smelled.....reminding you of them.....an experience of almost everyone I would guess....Wonderful....Rhonda
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A beautiful desciption of a love so great....even in their absence, their aroma can still be smelled.....reminding you of them.....an experience of almost everyone I would guess....Wonderful....Rhonda
Comment Written 28-May-2005
Comment from L K Pinaire
This was simple but very nice. I enjoyed it and especially liked the ending. The meter was interesting and the imagery was very good.
Good writing,
Larry
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This was simple but very nice. I enjoyed it and especially liked the ending. The meter was interesting and the imagery was very good.
Good writing,
Larry
Comment Written 27-May-2005
Comment from MercurySeven
Well, I think you managed to incorporate all five senses in that one, Pili! It was a pleasure to read and become enwrapped in your musings. Nicely done!
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Well, I think you managed to incorporate all five senses in that one, Pili! It was a pleasure to read and become enwrapped in your musings. Nicely done!
Comment Written 27-May-2005
Comment from EmileJP
This poem shouts of deep personal sorrow that lingers in the heart and taints the soul with guilt. The emotions are released to the words and they spill their power to the page. The last line completes the thoughts expressed like the sun completes the sky both casting a blue hue. I enjoyed the skill and artistry displayed by the author through her charisma to lead the reader to a inner plateau of awareness.
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This poem shouts of deep personal sorrow that lingers in the heart and taints the soul with guilt. The emotions are released to the words and they spill their power to the page. The last line completes the thoughts expressed like the sun completes the sky both casting a blue hue. I enjoyed the skill and artistry displayed by the author through her charisma to lead the reader to a inner plateau of awareness.
Comment Written 27-May-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
wow
i liked this
very understandable
and relatable
good flow and rhythm
fav part....................
"Prism of emotions <---- but maybe on this line put "A prism" or prismS" ??
hidden in the shadows
of memories,
while silence grows".
just a thought
thanx for sharing :-)
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wow
i liked this
very understandable
and relatable
good flow and rhythm
fav part....................
"Prism of emotions <---- but maybe on this line put "A prism" or prismS" ??
hidden in the shadows
of memories,
while silence grows".
just a thought
thanx for sharing :-)
Comment Written 26-May-2005
Comment from Zenbud
This read like spirit twirling around the room. Its bittersweet message lightly touched by the elf's lingering light. Very nice,, and very beautiful. Zen
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This read like spirit twirling around the room. Its bittersweet message lightly touched by the elf's lingering light. Very nice,, and very beautiful. Zen
Comment Written 26-May-2005
Comment from Charles73
This poem had such a great rhythm to it that I had to go back and read it again. There is really a great deal of talent at this site. It doesn't seem that I am reading the works of amateurs at all.
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This poem had such a great rhythm to it that I had to go back and read it again. There is really a great deal of talent at this site. It doesn't seem that I am reading the works of amateurs at all.
Comment Written 26-May-2005
Comment from Balladeer
Great poem as always my friend.
The sense of smell and memory
are tied into the human responce
system of fight or flight. Subconcious
memories of smells bring up many
more accute memories than a snapshot
photograph of the same thing Skye
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Great poem as always my friend.
The sense of smell and memory
are tied into the human responce
system of fight or flight. Subconcious
memories of smells bring up many
more accute memories than a snapshot
photograph of the same thing Skye
Comment Written 26-May-2005
Comment from Jewell McChesney
In sedating sorrow
I want to forget,
arriving to serenity
deep as the ocean,
washing away
all needs and hopes.
As I touch my skin
I smell like you.
Your tender heart is evident in these words.
Beautiful writing here!
wow...
left me with a tear in my eyes and warmth in my heart.
good stuff!
love it!
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In sedating sorrow
I want to forget,
arriving to serenity
deep as the ocean,
washing away
all needs and hopes.
As I touch my skin
I smell like you.
Your tender heart is evident in these words.
Beautiful writing here!
wow...
left me with a tear in my eyes and warmth in my heart.
good stuff!
love it!
Comment Written 26-May-2005
