From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Is not form in love."Mostly romance.
14 total reviews
Comment from amaranthblue
What an amazing tribute to love... This held such a beauty and read like such a knowing and enduring relationship... The subtle nuances that attach one soul to another in an unending string of forever... This was a joy to read my friend... The profound thoughts in this were breathtaking...
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What an amazing tribute to love... This held such a beauty and read like such a knowing and enduring relationship... The subtle nuances that attach one soul to another in an unending string of forever... This was a joy to read my friend... The profound thoughts in this were breathtaking...
Comment Written 30-May-2005
Comment from mroby731
This is another great work from you. I enjoy your way of acknowledging love in different ways, the imagery is always so available to the heart and soul.
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This is another great work from you. I enjoy your way of acknowledging love in different ways, the imagery is always so available to the heart and soul.
Comment Written 26-May-2005
Comment from clhutchinson
As always your poetry is written beautifully and this one is no exception. Your words are always well selected and flow down the page with grace and deep emotions, complimented with metaphors and art well fitting.
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As always your poetry is written beautifully and this one is no exception. Your words are always well selected and flow down the page with grace and deep emotions, complimented with metaphors and art well fitting.
Comment Written 26-May-2005
Comment from zwriter
Hi Pili,
You have such depth in your love. It really comes through in every poem. For you, I think, love is not simple, but it is simply joyful.
I like the way you play with the metaphors: the lioness, the rose, the light. It takes skill to use multiple analogies in a single poem, and you've done it very well, without confusion or overload. The reader can easily follow the ideas you're expressing.
"Our streams
converge, "
For me, that is a powerful image, and one that I don't remember reading anywhere else.
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A punctuation correction:
"Its not form
in love so strong,
its not distances"
Both of these should be {it's}. contractions, with an apostrophe, since the meaning is "it is."
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Otherwise, a perfect execution of a meaningful and passionate poem.
Thank you.
z
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Hi Pili,
You have such depth in your love. It really comes through in every poem. For you, I think, love is not simple, but it is simply joyful.
I like the way you play with the metaphors: the lioness, the rose, the light. It takes skill to use multiple analogies in a single poem, and you've done it very well, without confusion or overload. The reader can easily follow the ideas you're expressing.
"Our streams
converge, "
For me, that is a powerful image, and one that I don't remember reading anywhere else.
- - -
A punctuation correction:
"Its not form
in love so strong,
its not distances"
Both of these should be {it's}. contractions, with an apostrophe, since the meaning is "it is."
- - -
Otherwise, a perfect execution of a meaningful and passionate poem.
Thank you.
z
Comment Written 26-May-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
ooooh
very very nice!
loved this poem!
fav part........
"when it appears
I close my eyes
letting the light
penetrate my body
becoming whole
once more"
great job!
thanx for sharing :-)
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ooooh
very very nice!
loved this poem!
fav part........
"when it appears
I close my eyes
letting the light
penetrate my body
becoming whole
once more"
great job!
thanx for sharing :-)
Comment Written 25-May-2005
Comment from fastdigits
An excellent poem. It certainly has a sort of spiritual quality to it.
Your line about it is not distances, since you are with me all all along certainly captures the essence of the entire writing.
Love has no boundaries in this world or otherwise.
Again your writing, sometimes your soul leaves me, I calmly sit and wait for its return beautifully written. Love does conquer all, for all time and all places.
The imagery is there to visualize and the words are hauntingly stated.
Well done.
Keep writing.
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An excellent poem. It certainly has a sort of spiritual quality to it.
Your line about it is not distances, since you are with me all all along certainly captures the essence of the entire writing.
Love has no boundaries in this world or otherwise.
Again your writing, sometimes your soul leaves me, I calmly sit and wait for its return beautifully written. Love does conquer all, for all time and all places.
The imagery is there to visualize and the words are hauntingly stated.
Well done.
Keep writing.
Comment Written 25-May-2005
Comment from 24chas
Another lovely poem from you, Pili. I love the way you merge art and words like you do. Having a beautiful picture really brings your words to life. Well done.
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Another lovely poem from you, Pili. I love the way you merge art and words like you do. Having a beautiful picture really brings your words to life. Well done.
Comment Written 25-May-2005
Comment from Bryana
Beautiful Pili! Fantastic imagery.
I can't see you as a lioness, but
you never know. Do we? LOL
I love this...
Sometimes
your soul
leaves me,
I calmly sit
and wait
for its return.
Have a good day my friend. Un abrazo
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Beautiful Pili! Fantastic imagery.
I can't see you as a lioness, but
you never know. Do we? LOL
I love this...
Sometimes
your soul
leaves me,
I calmly sit
and wait
for its return.
Have a good day my friend. Un abrazo
Comment Written 25-May-2005
Comment from Kingsland
this one flows so very smoothly
and your use of imagery is very good also
this is a fine presentation
and I would not change a thing... John
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this one flows so very smoothly
and your use of imagery is very good also
this is a fine presentation
and I would not change a thing... John
Comment Written 25-May-2005
Comment from EmileJP
Love is the panacea for all wounds in life and its absence can be devastating to both physical as well as emotional health. A well thought out and imaginative acknowledgment of the importance of love and trust in a relationship and how that union is strengthened by the mere presence of each other. Your use of simple yet meaningful words and ideas are easy to accept and strike a common cord of familiarity. A well structured poem that says your lover is your shining knight and his love is never far and lies just beyond those emotional storm clouds that threaten to obscure your view. Unrest prevails, until you see him once more and are recharged by his life force freely mingling with yours in mutual strength and contentment.
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Love is the panacea for all wounds in life and its absence can be devastating to both physical as well as emotional health. A well thought out and imaginative acknowledgment of the importance of love and trust in a relationship and how that union is strengthened by the mere presence of each other. Your use of simple yet meaningful words and ideas are easy to accept and strike a common cord of familiarity. A well structured poem that says your lover is your shining knight and his love is never far and lies just beyond those emotional storm clouds that threaten to obscure your view. Unrest prevails, until you see him once more and are recharged by his life force freely mingling with yours in mutual strength and contentment.
Comment Written 25-May-2005
