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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello His Grayness
~God's Song~ What a beautiful poem about God's love.....Hear me now and know I am always here...God's promise.... what a wonderful knowledge to have.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Hello His Grayness
~God's Song~ What a beautiful poem about God's love.....Hear me now and know I am always here...God's promise.... what a wonderful knowledge to have.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thanks so much Gypsy Blue Rose. I am truly delighted that you enjoyed this work and I hope to offer greater enjoyment in the future. Please come back and visit often and I shall do the same for you! Blessings and thanks! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Treischel
A fabulous and joyous spiritual free verse poem. The expression of song is a comforting image, a musical communications itch the Diety. The repetition of the theme gives it melody and strength. Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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A fabulous and joyous spiritual free verse poem. The expression of song is a comforting image, a musical communications itch the Diety. The repetition of the theme gives it melody and strength. Well done!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Treischel! I always enjoy your work and consider this review a real honor. See you soon! Vance
Comment from val fitchie
occasionally a poem.....too pinpointedly focused to be freeverse prose (the IMPORTANT 2 points: musicality....and....God is NOT leaving-are in every verse.) Therefore Our remaining choice would be a pretty sermon. The best one I've heard in a while. This is yet another positive review of positively the most eloquent positive writer I know
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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occasionally a poem.....too pinpointedly focused to be freeverse prose (the IMPORTANT 2 points: musicality....and....God is NOT leaving-are in every verse.) Therefore Our remaining choice would be a pretty sermon. The best one I've heard in a while. This is yet another positive review of positively the most eloquent positive writer I know
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Dear Val: sorry to be so long in responding as I've been engaged in more serious matters, but as always, your wonderful review has lifted my spirits and given me further encouragement so a new offering is forthcoming soon especially motivated by YOU! Endless thanks!! Vance
Comment from robina1978
Most beautiful artwork by Angelheart that complements your poem perfectly. You want to sing to God, all the time. You say to Him, you can't change the world.
And you are always there for him, well said. It rhymes al the way and flows well.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Most beautiful artwork by Angelheart that complements your poem perfectly. You want to sing to God, all the time. You say to Him, you can't change the world.
And you are always there for him, well said. It rhymes al the way and flows well.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks robina1978; it is always a delight to hear from you and read your work! Vance
Comment from GE Parson
Brother Vance,
It's interesting that just a couple days ago, I wondered if Jesus ever sang as he walked along his way; or if He and his apostles ever harmonized.I no more thought these wonders an I believe the Holy Spirit reminded me of Mark 14 :26 that says that they sung an hymn.
WOW! I got all "Pentecostal" happy and raised my voice in song
I would have loved to have heard them sing; and I wonder which of the thousands of David's song they sung.
God bless you y Brother,Jerry
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Brother Vance,
It's interesting that just a couple days ago, I wondered if Jesus ever sang as he walked along his way; or if He and his apostles ever harmonized.I no more thought these wonders an I believe the Holy Spirit reminded me of Mark 14 :26 that says that they sung an hymn.
WOW! I got all "Pentecostal" happy and raised my voice in song
I would have loved to have heard them sing; and I wonder which of the thousands of David's song they sung.
God bless you y Brother,Jerry
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much dear Brother Jerry and God Bless you for your inspirations to me and so many others. I'm especially delighted and honored that you enjoyed this work and let's hope it will bring others to understand God's continuous love and compassion! Blessings always! Vance
Comment from rama devi
Beautiful spiritual psalm-like feel. Humble, prayerful and devotional. Uplifting.
Love these lines:
For the heart I touch
Must swell with joy
Lest silence harm My bond with thee
GOD'S POV, WELL CAPTURED:
Bless My voice with mellow tones
To light your soul with harmony
Accept My love on wings of hope
Trust My gifts and sing with Me
Though you can't see My loving smile
My eyes of joy reflecting you
Nor touch My skin to know I'm here
Nicely voiced stanza. Enjoyed it!
And realize the things I Do--why cap here on Do?
Nevertheless(,) I'm always here
SIMPLY SAID AND TRUE:
Just talk to Me and you'll believe
I'll whisper answers that you need
I'll guide you where you need to be
That sacred place within My watch
When you decide to be with Me
I'll give you love each moment here
When you come quietly along
You'll always find great peace and joy
When you have listened to My song
SO TRUE--EVEN READING THIS POEM, ONCE SENSES THE PEACE!
Don't ask for Me to change the world
Or other people in your life
For only you can make the changes
That will lift you out of strife
Exactly. good point. Life and strife is a cliche rhyme pair, best avoided, IMHO. But it fits in well here.
NICE--sweet:
I will help you with these changes
We can sit and talk all day
Good flow and rhyming to deliver this very true observation:
But you need to hear My music
And I need to hear you pray
I'm always here, I'm always here
And this is where I'll stay
You are the one who makes the choice
To always go away
God never goes, mankind often does.
Nice closing note:
Believe it as you HEAR ME NOW
I'm always here for you
Close your eyes and hush your mind
That's all you have to do!
This made me do just that!
Thanks for the meditation and attunement (at-one-ment and atonement--very similar!).
Blessings, rd
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Beautiful spiritual psalm-like feel. Humble, prayerful and devotional. Uplifting.
Love these lines:
For the heart I touch
Must swell with joy
Lest silence harm My bond with thee
GOD'S POV, WELL CAPTURED:
Bless My voice with mellow tones
To light your soul with harmony
Accept My love on wings of hope
Trust My gifts and sing with Me
Though you can't see My loving smile
My eyes of joy reflecting you
Nor touch My skin to know I'm here
Nicely voiced stanza. Enjoyed it!
And realize the things I Do--why cap here on Do?
Nevertheless(,) I'm always here
SIMPLY SAID AND TRUE:
Just talk to Me and you'll believe
I'll whisper answers that you need
I'll guide you where you need to be
That sacred place within My watch
When you decide to be with Me
I'll give you love each moment here
When you come quietly along
You'll always find great peace and joy
When you have listened to My song
SO TRUE--EVEN READING THIS POEM, ONCE SENSES THE PEACE!
Don't ask for Me to change the world
Or other people in your life
For only you can make the changes
That will lift you out of strife
Exactly. good point. Life and strife is a cliche rhyme pair, best avoided, IMHO. But it fits in well here.
NICE--sweet:
I will help you with these changes
We can sit and talk all day
Good flow and rhyming to deliver this very true observation:
But you need to hear My music
And I need to hear you pray
I'm always here, I'm always here
And this is where I'll stay
You are the one who makes the choice
To always go away
God never goes, mankind often does.
Nice closing note:
Believe it as you HEAR ME NOW
I'm always here for you
Close your eyes and hush your mind
That's all you have to do!
This made me do just that!
Thanks for the meditation and attunement (at-one-ment and atonement--very similar!).
Blessings, rd
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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I am so truly delighted to have you share your blessed and wonderful feedback on this work and I'm honored to know it gave you some level of a gift, which I felt in your lovely review. You are truly a gifted writer and thinker and I'm so happy to know this gave you some pleasure. Blessings and Love! Vance
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Most welcome! :) Thanks for your lovely reply, dear Vance! Blessings and Love, rd
Comment from Nan Beeson
Hi Vance, so happy to see your latest post. Have been patiently waiting....First of all...I think the title is fabulous because it is written that GOD comes first in our lives. I also love the fact that you used the word "Song" as the second word for he is indeed the song of songs homogenized within Himself from the lowest "A" on the piano up each octave to the top of "High C." To me that encompasses and reveals on the piano to the highest "C" in God's language--meaning "See." "A" is the first letter of the alphabet and signifies us as Soul being created and through the trials and tribulation's of daily life on His sale of love to the high "C" to mean "See."
I.E. First we were blind, and at the end of our musical journey of Sound, we finally reach the Light and are able to See. I love the last line and it gives the answer to the entire first stanza, "Lest silence harm My bond with thee.' After all, He is our Father, and wants to hear from his children... Re your second stanza, Perfect. So many words denoting the musical sound of his voice, I.E. "voice, mellow tones, harmony (I love this one); sing," and our not being able go see him because he is in a higher dimension, but we can hear him musically if we quiet our mind and thoughts and just Listen....we will find we don't need to see Him in order to know that He is there (and here.God is omnipresent so is present in all places although we are unable to see Him with our physical eyes......
I am taking up so much space so think I should stop and end this with your last stanza that sums it up in better words than I ever could: "Believe it as you HEAR ME NOW, I'm always here for you. Close your eyes and hush your mind." That's all you have to do! I.E. All you have to do is "hush your mind" and you swill "HEAR " in the universal musical language of the piano keyboard. I forgot to mention the sharps and flats denoting our strides forward, and a fall back--and up and at it til we reach the top of the scale and He keeps His promise and greets us with His ever-loving open arms and we are finally able to "See" in the key of "C." ....God Bless you Vance, you are a visual blessing to all who have the good fortune to come in contact with you. Nan:))
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Category: General Poetry | Posted: May 23, 2013 | Chapters: ...25 -26- 27...
His Grayness
Published my first poem at age 10 written hundreds since then. I've written and published many songs records, and albums. I'm Founder of several technology companies and lived all over the world. My mission is to stimulate CREATIVITY and GRAT - more...
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Hi Vance, so happy to see your latest post. Have been patiently waiting....First of all...I think the title is fabulous because it is written that GOD comes first in our lives. I also love the fact that you used the word "Song" as the second word for he is indeed the song of songs homogenized within Himself from the lowest "A" on the piano up each octave to the top of "High C." To me that encompasses and reveals on the piano to the highest "C" in God's language--meaning "See." "A" is the first letter of the alphabet and signifies us as Soul being created and through the trials and tribulation's of daily life on His sale of love to the high "C" to mean "See."
I.E. First we were blind, and at the end of our musical journey of Sound, we finally reach the Light and are able to See. I love the last line and it gives the answer to the entire first stanza, "Lest silence harm My bond with thee.' After all, He is our Father, and wants to hear from his children... Re your second stanza, Perfect. So many words denoting the musical sound of his voice, I.E. "voice, mellow tones, harmony (I love this one); sing," and our not being able go see him because he is in a higher dimension, but we can hear him musically if we quiet our mind and thoughts and just Listen....we will find we don't need to see Him in order to know that He is there (and here.God is omnipresent so is present in all places although we are unable to see Him with our physical eyes......
I am taking up so much space so think I should stop and end this with your last stanza that sums it up in better words than I ever could: "Believe it as you HEAR ME NOW, I'm always here for you. Close your eyes and hush your mind." That's all you have to do! I.E. All you have to do is "hush your mind" and you swill "HEAR " in the universal musical language of the piano keyboard. I forgot to mention the sharps and flats denoting our strides forward, and a fall back--and up and at it til we reach the top of the scale and He keeps His promise and greets us with His ever-loving open arms and we are finally able to "See" in the key of "C." ....God Bless you Vance, you are a visual blessing to all who have the good fortune to come in contact with you. Nan:))
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Category: General Poetry | Posted: May 23, 2013 | Chapters: ...25 -26- 27...
His Grayness
Published my first poem at age 10 written hundreds since then. I've written and published many songs records, and albums. I'm Founder of several technology companies and lived all over the world. My mission is to stimulate CREATIVITY and GRAT - more...
He is also an active reviewer and is holding the #66 spot on the top ranked reviewer list.
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Hear me now...I want to sing to yuo
A chapter in the book From out of the Grayness
God's Song
by His Grayness
God's Song: by: His Grayness
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Dear Nan: you are a true inspiration to me and your words in this review were a blessing of encouragement and enlightenment. I am committed to bring others in my life to the threshold of gratitude that they may understand the majesty of God's CREATION and KNOW that GOD has blessed THEM also with the power of creation of many things in life and that through embracing this power, they shall not fall into the depths of despair, anger, hatred, but live in the joy of enlightenment and the blessings of discovery of GOD'S endless gifts! Blessings, Love, and Hugs Dearest One! Vance
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Dear Vance. What a perfectly wonderful response to my review. It (your poem) is a truly an inspired piece of writing and teaching. I still think this is the meaning of the message you got when you said it was "JUST WRITE IT" right after Your Carmel (caramel) poem where you posted your first Haiku type poem that you got so fast, you said you barely had time to think what you were writing and then you immediately disappeared for a few weeks.. I think I mentioned it to you in a previous write. When I went to read and review it (this one) I saw you had already received one of the many six stars it was so highly favored and received. So dear precious (one of a kind) man, God Bless you and please keep writing and posting them as fast as you can--especially the ones that you obey and "JUST WRITE IT! (Do you remember telling me that?) I love and respect you for who and what you truly are (as written in the Bible) sent by God to teach and heal the aching souls who so need to hear what you have to say to them. You seem to favor the word "Gratitude" and it has my head whirling with it and there is no end to it...I guess that might have been one of the serious thoughts you were trying so hard to convey in your poems. You know my heart, Nan.))
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Dear Vance. What a perfectly wonderful response to my review. It (your poem) is a truly an inspired piece of writing and teaching. I still think this is the meaning of the message you got when you said it was "JUST WRITE IT" right after Your Carmel (caramel) poem where you posted your first Haiku type poem that you got so fast, you said you barely had time to think what you were writing and then you immediately disappeared for a few weeks.. I think I mentioned it to you in a previous write. When I went to read and review it (this one) I saw you had already received one of the many six stars it was so highly favored and received. So dear precious (one of a kind) man, God Bless you and please keep writing and posting them as fast as you can--especially the ones that you obey and "JUST WRITE IT! (Do you remember telling me that?) I love and respect you for who and what you truly are (as written in the Bible) sent by God to teach and heal the aching souls who so need to hear what you have to say to them. You seem to favor the word "Gratitude" and it has my head whirling with it and there is no end to it...I guess that might have been one of the serious thoughts you were trying so hard to convey in your poems. You know my heart, Nan.))
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Dear Vance. What a perfectly wonderful response to my review. It (your poem) is a truly an inspired piece of writing and teaching. I still think this is the meaning of the message you got when you said it was "JUST WRITE IT" right after Your Carmel (caramel) poem where you posted your first Haiku type poem that you got so fast, you said you barely had time to think what you were writing and then you immediately disappeared for a few weeks.. I think I mentioned it to you in a previous write. When I went to read and review it (this one) I saw you had already received one of the many six stars it was so highly favored and received. So dear precious (one of a kind) man, God Bless you and please keep writing and posting them as fast as you can--especially the ones that you obey and "JUST WRITE IT! (Do you remember telling me that?) I love and respect you for who and what you truly are (as written in the Bible) sent by God to teach and heal the aching souls who so need to hear what you have to say to them. You seem to favor the word "Gratitude" and it has my head whirling with it and there is no end to it...I guess that might have been one of the serious thoughts you were trying so hard to convey in your poems. You know my heart, Nan.))
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Vance. This is a wonderfully written poem, very inspirational, from God's POV, telling us how he loves us and we have the choice to listen or not. Many good lines here. Here are a few that resonate with me:
"Don't ask for Me to change the world
Or other people in your life
For only you can make the changes
That will lift you out of strife"
AND
"You are the one who makes the choice
To always go away"
Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Hi Vance. This is a wonderfully written poem, very inspirational, from God's POV, telling us how he loves us and we have the choice to listen or not. Many good lines here. Here are a few that resonate with me:
"Don't ask for Me to change the world
Or other people in your life
For only you can make the changes
That will lift you out of strife"
AND
"You are the one who makes the choice
To always go away"
Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much for your kind review. It's always a delight to hear from you! Vance
Comment from Jay Squires
This is a lovely and inspirational poem, HG. To me, the central message is:
Don't ask for Me to change the world
Or other people in your life
For only you can make the changes
That will lift you out of strife
I will help you with these changes
We can sit and talk all day .
This is just Lovely. I thought I had a six to award this, but, Alas! You know the story. I'm too lavish with them early on. Then, along comes a more worthy post and all I can leave you with are the words, "It means a lot to me."
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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This is a lovely and inspirational poem, HG. To me, the central message is:
Don't ask for Me to change the world
Or other people in your life
For only you can make the changes
That will lift you out of strife
I will help you with these changes
We can sit and talk all day .
This is just Lovely. I thought I had a six to award this, but, Alas! You know the story. I'm too lavish with them early on. Then, along comes a more worthy post and all I can leave you with are the words, "It means a lot to me."
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much Jay: it's truly a pleasure to hear from you and thanks so much for the virtual six stars. I enjoy your work so much and shall visit often. Vance
Comment from poetadeu
The title is awesome. 'God's Song'.
Dadadadadadadadadadadadadadam, It sounds superb using this rhythm.
His existence is not physical as you write it. He reaches us spiritually
through His scripture and through nature, so forth and so on. You have
written it with such knowledge and feelings that I had to award it thus.
Thank you for sharing this humbling spiritual poem.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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The title is awesome. 'God's Song'.
Dadadadadadadadadadadadadadam, It sounds superb using this rhythm.
His existence is not physical as you write it. He reaches us spiritually
through His scripture and through nature, so forth and so on. You have
written it with such knowledge and feelings that I had to award it thus.
Thank you for sharing this humbling spiritual poem.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much poetadeu and so very glad to meet you. I'm glad you liked this and I do appreciate your kind stars. I shall come around and visit you as well. Kindest regards: Vance
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Glad to have a new visitor.
My acct. isn't set up right
now, but will be soon. We have
met before and I will explain.
No not in person. I knew you would
wonder about that. ::}joyce
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Thanks so much Joyce and of course, I am now trembling with excitement to learn how we know each other?? Hurry and fill me in!! Vance
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I am go glad to know you remember me. It has been quite a long time for
me. I moved away for a year, came home having found I had a cancer. Now
after getting through all that medical
stuff, I am attempting to get my foot
in the door here at FS and are finding
the same wonderful encouraging folks
that I had to leave for that time. Still
not out of the water, but am here and
thrilled to be. You are as sweet and adorable as always and I consider you
a good friend. You write my kind of
stuff, you know so I'll be reading you
as often as I can. I am signing on to
you fan list so you can't get away. I,
I keep saying that, am coming back as
myterypoet and dropping my e-mail
name. I have missed all of you and, by
the way where did gungalo go? She is
the first one I sought and she's not here. Anyway, I have to be thrifty with
my chatter because of spam. Signing off, but let's do this again soon. XOXOXO'S ::}Joyce
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Thank you for the gift, if I forgot to...
::}Joyce
