The rain
A short poem about the rain and how it affects us.4 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Cassidy, What a lovely honest thought you give to us with this little beauty. Great format and even cadence. Loved it ... keep writing. Sometimes the spirit moves like whispered wind and all you end up with is a smile! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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Hi Cassidy, What a lovely honest thought you give to us with this little beauty. Great format and even cadence. Loved it ... keep writing. Sometimes the spirit moves like whispered wind and all you end up with is a smile! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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Wow.thanks am honoured. I love reading your poems.
Comment from Dutchie
Very well written, this Haiku. I can imagine you enjoy the rain. Especially after a long period of drought. Right syllable count, smooth flow.
I live in Holland, it's always raining here. We love the sun... but he doesn't show up this year... Fia
reply by the author on 21-May-2013
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Very well written, this Haiku. I can imagine you enjoy the rain. Especially after a long period of drought. Right syllable count, smooth flow.
I live in Holland, it's always raining here. We love the sun... but he doesn't show up this year... Fia
Comment Written 21-May-2013
reply by the author on 21-May-2013
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hahaha.hey Take ma advice and stick with the rain cause its much more nicer than the sun. Anyway thanks for the nice comments.
Comment from NHazelwood
I really like the artwork that accompanies your poem it's paired up perfectly with the sentiment in your haiku! I must let you before the "haiku police" get you the last line is six instead of five syllables and maybe considering editing the pure in front of genuine so the line reads
A genuine joy
Hope I am helpful and not critical!
-NH
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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I really like the artwork that accompanies your poem it's paired up perfectly with the sentiment in your haiku! I must let you before the "haiku police" get you the last line is six instead of five syllables and maybe considering editing the pure in front of genuine so the line reads
A genuine joy
Hope I am helpful and not critical!
-NH
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Yes u were. Thanks,I never really had time to prepare for the poem. I just wrote it in front of my PC.
Comment from visionary1234
I could do with some of that rain right now cassidy - living in Hawaii and hardly any rain for a whole month! So I particularly enjoyed the feeling of joy with rain softening the soil in your 5-7-5!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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I could do with some of that rain right now cassidy - living in Hawaii and hardly any rain for a whole month! So I particularly enjoyed the feeling of joy with rain softening the soil in your 5-7-5!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Hey don't worry the rains would come very soon.i would pray for it. And don't forget to message me when it finally comes k? Thanks for your words of encouragements.
