Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The Great Escaper Caper"A collection of my poems
76 total reviews
Comment from DRG24
I enjoy the rhyming! Great job. One thing, I can't stand when people rhyme two of the same words with each other. (it and it) Otherwise great
-DRG
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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I enjoy the rhyming! Great job. One thing, I can't stand when people rhyme two of the same words with each other. (it and it) Otherwise great
-DRG
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you.
Yep, I don't like that either, which is why, if you check, the real rhyme comes on the word before - round it/found it...
Steve
Comment from Righteous Riter
Congratulations on your win. This piece tells a clear story of start to finish. The rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the rhymes are not forced. The writer accomplishes the mission of writing a humorous piece.
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Congratulations on your win. This piece tells a clear story of start to finish. The rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the rhymes are not forced. The writer accomplishes the mission of writing a humorous piece.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
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Thank you very much.
Steve
Comment from NicciFaye
first congrats on the contest win. This is truly truly funny, but not funny at the same time. Very creative, imaginable and humors. Great poem. God bless.
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first congrats on the contest win. This is truly truly funny, but not funny at the same time. Very creative, imaginable and humors. Great poem. God bless.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Spitfire
Ha,ha, ha. This made me think of MASH. Love the war or prison metaphors: fence, coiled wire, snipers, and the code signals. All your lines are great, but one of my favorites is:Like a magnet to their noses
Were the most expensive roses,
(That's because my mother grew roses)
Congrats on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Ha,ha, ha. This made me think of MASH. Love the war or prison metaphors: fence, coiled wire, snipers, and the code signals. All your lines are great, but one of my favorites is:Like a magnet to their noses
Were the most expensive roses,
(That's because my mother grew roses)
Congrats on winning the contest.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
Congratulations on your win. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Many pets have been known to outwit their owners.
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Congratulations on your win. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Many pets have been known to outwit their owners.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you, Charlie.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from 9999pool
It reads like a funny story but how can a WWII POW be funny? And we have to dabble with our mind to get to the crux of the story. It was funny reading the sensors and the flood lights and they will find a way to come in, I mean, escape. So the story is not funny but funny the way it was told to us.
great write and congrats on the win.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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It reads like a funny story but how can a WWII POW be funny? And we have to dabble with our mind to get to the crux of the story. It was funny reading the sensors and the flood lights and they will find a way to come in, I mean, escape. So the story is not funny but funny the way it was told to us.
great write and congrats on the win.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Nebukadneser
Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! Actually the other side of brilliant! Long time since I've read a writ as clever and funny. Your talent amazes me my friend and the lovely feel the poem created when one read it aloud was super duper.
Well done
you rock, my friend
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
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Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! Actually the other side of brilliant! Long time since I've read a writ as clever and funny. Your talent amazes me my friend and the lovely feel the poem created when one read it aloud was super duper.
Well done
you rock, my friend
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 04-May-2013
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Thank you.
Long time since I've heard 'cool bananas!.
Steve
Comment from flippant
So enjoyable! Definitely put a smile on my face. :) I love that you have to scheme against their schemes. Hey, at least you can't say you have a dull life!
Love the picture. ;)
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So enjoyable! Definitely put a smile on my face. :) I love that you have to scheme against their schemes. Hey, at least you can't say you have a dull life!
Love the picture. ;)
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Kiwisteveh,
Very nice piece of Humor Poetry!
Its theme revolves around the two mischievous goats who think that the eatables out side the fence are better and try to reach there by all means. The whole episode is very beautifully narrated.
Its language is simple having spontaneous flow from beginning to end with nice rhyming scheme, imagery and lively pictorial quality.
Excellent indeed!!
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Hello Kiwisteveh,
Very nice piece of Humor Poetry!
Its theme revolves around the two mischievous goats who think that the eatables out side the fence are better and try to reach there by all means. The whole episode is very beautifully narrated.
Its language is simple having spontaneous flow from beginning to end with nice rhyming scheme, imagery and lively pictorial quality.
Excellent indeed!!
Comment Written 04-May-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from emjaihammond
This poem was a most entertaining adventure. I found your rhyme and writing style to be most effective. Loved the way you told this little story.
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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This poem was a most entertaining adventure. I found your rhyme and writing style to be most effective. Loved the way you told this little story.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thanks, MJ - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
