Gramalot's Storybook
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Dream Sweet Baby"A book of stories and poems for kids of all ages.
6 total reviews
Comment from muezza56
i really enjoyed reading this really well written lullaby time poem. the poem fits in well with the image/picture supplied for the comp
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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i really enjoyed reading this really well written lullaby time poem. the poem fits in well with the image/picture supplied for the comp
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Muezza56, thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie7
Very nice.I could sing this if you took out a few words (just my opinion ) You don't need "as you" ,in lines 1,9,17. It's such a pretty line w/out it. Again just my opinion. "I'll cradle you in loving arms" you don't need (my) "I sing this lullaby tonight" you don't need (as). "God promises for everyone" or "God's promise is for everyone" might be a little smoother. Again I loved this so please don't be offended I just wanted to smooth it out. I think it has a good chance. Good Luck and Namaste, Debbie
reply by the author on 08-May-2013
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Very nice.I could sing this if you took out a few words (just my opinion ) You don't need "as you" ,in lines 1,9,17. It's such a pretty line w/out it. Again just my opinion. "I'll cradle you in loving arms" you don't need (my) "I sing this lullaby tonight" you don't need (as). "God promises for everyone" or "God's promise is for everyone" might be a little smoother. Again I loved this so please don't be offended I just wanted to smooth it out. I think it has a good chance. Good Luck and Namaste, Debbie
Comment Written 08-May-2013
reply by the author on 08-May-2013
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Debbie, thank you so much for your comments and suggestions. Good well meant critiue is always welcome and offense should never be taken. I'm happy that you liked it.
Comment from Janet Foor
Lovely and tender lullaby poem.
Very nice rhyme and smooth cadence
Perfect words for this sweet baby picture.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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Lovely and tender lullaby poem.
Very nice rhyme and smooth cadence
Perfect words for this sweet baby picture.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2013
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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Thank you so much for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was a very tender and loving lullaby which bounces softly along with a unique rhythm all it's own. The sing-song style of verse and the repetitive stanza make this a wonderful, soothing song that any baby would adore.
Good luck in the contest. Good work!
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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This was a very tender and loving lullaby which bounces softly along with a unique rhythm all it's own. The sing-song style of verse and the repetitive stanza make this a wonderful, soothing song that any baby would adore.
Good luck in the contest. Good work!
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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Dean,thank you so much for your lovely comments and great review.
Comment from lorijean
A lovely and well written poem, came straight from the heart a lovely baby lullaby, it just flows off the page, well done... I almost drifted off myself..
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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A lovely and well written poem, came straight from the heart a lovely baby lullaby, it just flows off the page, well done... I almost drifted off myself..
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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Thank you for your kind comments and review.
Comment from NicciFaye
The picture how precious. I thought your poem was good. I couldn't help but not play that "Hush little baby don't you cry" old time lullaby in my head as I read this, which made it quite hard to read the orientating of the poem.
Overall excellent. Good luck and God bless.
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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The picture how precious. I thought your poem was good. I couldn't help but not play that "Hush little baby don't you cry" old time lullaby in my head as I read this, which made it quite hard to read the orientating of the poem.
Overall excellent. Good luck and God bless.
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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I'm glad you liked it. I did have a very different tune in my head, as I notated in my notes. Thanks for your comments and review.
