Depression
When some special goes away forever3 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Sejal, you have miscounted syllables - this form requires the three lines to have five, then seven, then five syllables
You have 5 then 5 then 8.
I like the alliteration in deep down
and the thoughtful message you deliver. Brooke
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Sejal, you have miscounted syllables - this form requires the three lines to have five, then seven, then five syllables
You have 5 then 5 then 8.
I like the alliteration in deep down
and the thoughtful message you deliver. Brooke
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
Comment from Sam Mendonca
A we'll written 6-7-5 poem with great meaning.
The only suggestion would be maybe a
photo to go along with the poem
Nice work :)
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A we'll written 6-7-5 poem with great meaning.
The only suggestion would be maybe a
photo to go along with the poem
Nice work :)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2013
Comment from angelmagnet
good advice. Your syllable count is not 575. I count 558. The idea of a 575 is to have five syllables in the first line,seven in the second,and five in the third.
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good advice. Your syllable count is not 575. I count 558. The idea of a 575 is to have five syllables in the first line,seven in the second,and five in the third.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2013
