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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Impatience."Mostly romance.
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Hello,
Very beautiful poem with a wonderful flow to it! The romance seems to just jump of the page! Awesome poem! Buddy
Comment Written 14-May-2005
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Pili this is absolutely eautiful my friend. The flow of gentle flows throughout gives soft and loving imagery filled with longing. Something I know so well.
dance in my dreams...dances or dancing...perhaps...
Goodluck with this,
Lainee :O)
Comment Written 14-May-2005
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This poem beautifully conveys great wisdom and a great lesson for all to remember in life. Patience is well expressed in this great writing.
Comment Written 14-May-2005
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Comment Written 14-May-2005
A bud to be bloomed or not, the tree to be plumed or not, your poem with all your bright graceful soul and minds elation has flashed here like the divine sunbeams shining every mind who reads. But I have watched an icy peak of the mount Everest getting glittered by the first light of your thoughts that is in profound plenty. Every lines here is full of eloquence of you versatile poetic gestures and may be I'm provoked by that to gain such fluency to write a long review of it. Let this poem to reign your souls kingdom and your trembling hands be more and more wishful to touch every buds of beauty that is about to bloom inside your mind. Your impatience is glorified by its own glory. I would not keep myself bothered here to have any dissection for any mistake whatsoever. It's my pride that a poem thus published could be so great, so subtle and let me enjoy it to its best. Gautam
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Wow this is a great poem. Spelling and grammatical error are nonexistent and the imagery is excellent. To me this poem is perfect just as it is.
Comment Written 14-May-2005
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beautiful and great message. patience is definitely a virtue and your words slowly draw the reader to this important point...extremely well done
Comment Written 14-May-2005
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WOW! I love this poem! The picture really adds flavor to your poem. I have the highest regard of respect for your creativity here. It is a beautiful poem, with so much essence in it. It flows well and allows the reader to visualize what the heart feels and how the soul yearns for that special someone to slowly unfold and materialize into your arms as your senses bloom with the beat of love.
This is well written and a marvelous pleasure to read. You are by far an excellent poet who has earned popularity. This was deep!
Best wishes to you.
gigi1015
Comment Written 14-May-2005
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If patience is a virtue then your verse shows the way. Beautifully written with concise but passionate words. There sure is a message here. thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 14-May-2005
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It's sweet, and I'm not sure I would have that kind of patience, I prefer to throw everything to the winds and let the chips land where they may. Such discipline, I feel for the inevitability of your words. There's a couple typos, but otherwise, sublime.
TR
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Comment Written 14-May-2005
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>>>P>i>l>i>>P>u>b>u>l>>>
There is much wisdom in the words of your poem, Pili. For me it was a gentle reminder to quell those impatient urges to act on some issue in life...to listen to the Spirit's voice and heed it...for all things will come about at the appointed time...and the blessing will last for eternity, instead of for only a moment. Thank you for this lovely poem. Take care and "BE" blessed.
:)s* smiles
Comment Written 14-May-2005
