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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Impatience."Mostly romance.
33 total reviews
Comment from Marillion
Another beautiful submission, Pili, rife with longing and with love. You've really struck a chord with this one, my friend. Excellent work.
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Another beautiful submission, Pili, rife with longing and with love. You've really struck a chord with this one, my friend. Excellent work.
Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
i have tremendous patience..... have to with kids lol
but i really like this
very creative and imaginative
fav part......
"Impatient
my hands tremble
as I caress
the tender bud,
I want so much
to open its petals
and bury myself
in the exquisite aroma" ;-)
nicely done
thanx for sharing :-)
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i have tremendous patience..... have to with kids lol
but i really like this
very creative and imaginative
fav part......
"Impatient
my hands tremble
as I caress
the tender bud,
I want so much
to open its petals
and bury myself
in the exquisite aroma" ;-)
nicely done
thanx for sharing :-)
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Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from TorySue
This is beautiful, Pili, as is the picture it displays. A simple yet elegant piece of work. Your imagery is always exceptional and flow is always graceful. Thank you for sharing this one
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This is beautiful, Pili, as is the picture it displays. A simple yet elegant piece of work. Your imagery is always exceptional and flow is always graceful. Thank you for sharing this one
Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from Ls
Ha! Sorry for laughing but the "Let It Be" phrase made e think of the old sixties song of the Beatles. I was never much of a Beatles fan but some of their stuff rocked. This is a nice, easy-to-read poem that is laid-back in its delivery and premise. Good.
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Ha! Sorry for laughing but the "Let It Be" phrase made e think of the old sixties song of the Beatles. I was never much of a Beatles fan but some of their stuff rocked. This is a nice, easy-to-read poem that is laid-back in its delivery and premise. Good.
Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a wonderful poem Pili. "The image of your eyes dance in my dreams." What a beautiful line. It evokes such a lovely image. Well done.
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This is a wonderful poem Pili. "The image of your eyes dance in my dreams." What a beautiful line. It evokes such a lovely image. Well done.
Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from ladykay
Hi Pili...
"But the voice
of my heart
tells me,
don' t rush it
just let it be,
And a good solid voice that, we cant rush nature nor her ways. (but genly push them along maybe?)...
Sorry about the boo-boo yesterday, and first I thot, ofh, She's leavung or what, so read and wrote and posted! LOLOLOL
ladykay
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Hi Pili...
"But the voice
of my heart
tells me,
don' t rush it
just let it be,
And a good solid voice that, we cant rush nature nor her ways. (but genly push them along maybe?)...
Sorry about the boo-boo yesterday, and first I thot, ofh, She's leavung or what, so read and wrote and posted! LOLOLOL
ladykay
Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from vkjjwala
The poetry which signifies the emotional and sensory texture of any imagery , defined in figurative language results in impoverishment of sensibilities if it does not speak of and address the realities of life.
it will unfold
sharing all splendor
at its own time
at its own pace.
Please just let it be.
The above lines speak of the truth and echoes the real truth.
There is difference in looking and seeing. When there is impatience, eyes only look and wander into other events but when they see they enjoy the patience of the being of an object. The beauty of an object lies not in the object but the eyes of the beholder, who enjoys beauty without being impatient.
Your poem has multi-sensibleness. One senses the meaning in his own way. That's the beauty of any poetic work
Thanks for sharing
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The poetry which signifies the emotional and sensory texture of any imagery , defined in figurative language results in impoverishment of sensibilities if it does not speak of and address the realities of life.
it will unfold
sharing all splendor
at its own time
at its own pace.
Please just let it be.
The above lines speak of the truth and echoes the real truth.
There is difference in looking and seeing. When there is impatience, eyes only look and wander into other events but when they see they enjoy the patience of the being of an object. The beauty of an object lies not in the object but the eyes of the beholder, who enjoys beauty without being impatient.
Your poem has multi-sensibleness. One senses the meaning in his own way. That's the beauty of any poetic work
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from Genuine Suede
"Every step I take
is overlaid
by a shadow
following me."
Just this one image does not seem to fit in with the rest, yet I'm sure it is there for a very good reason.
"I see you now
in the figure
of a tree..."
I really like how you use metaphor to describe your impatience, needing to wait for the 'budding' romance to unfold in its own good time. Very nicely done.
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"Every step I take
is overlaid
by a shadow
following me."
Just this one image does not seem to fit in with the rest, yet I'm sure it is there for a very good reason.
"I see you now
in the figure
of a tree..."
I really like how you use metaphor to describe your impatience, needing to wait for the 'budding' romance to unfold in its own good time. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from Seancuig
Patience.
I wish I had some more of this at times. This is great and really speaks of how we must allow things to happen at their own pace, or risk ruining them!
Nicely written.
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Patience.
I wish I had some more of this at times. This is great and really speaks of how we must allow things to happen at their own pace, or risk ruining them!
Nicely written.
Comment Written 14-May-2005
Comment from Moonchild28
Absolutely beautiful! All good things will happen in time. We just have to have the patience to enjoy the splendor. If we rush it, we might spoil it. Great job!
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Absolutely beautiful! All good things will happen in time. We just have to have the patience to enjoy the splendor. If we rush it, we might spoil it. Great job!
Comment Written 14-May-2005
