Surcease
a mirage poem168 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
I think surcease is such a great word. Glad you used it. Great repeating lines. Excellent rhyme and flow, naturally. Beautiful idea of the silence forming a psalm. Dawn is a time for silence. There is so much peaceful beauty, it doesn't to be expressed with any sound. Sometimes silence is golden, and this is the golden moment to take in the beauty. Great line "the silence forms a psalm." judi
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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I think surcease is such a great word. Glad you used it. Great repeating lines. Excellent rhyme and flow, naturally. Beautiful idea of the silence forming a psalm. Dawn is a time for silence. There is so much peaceful beauty, it doesn't to be expressed with any sound. Sometimes silence is golden, and this is the golden moment to take in the beauty. Great line "the silence forms a psalm." judi
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Judi :-) Brooke
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You're so welcome. I remember Poe's line surcease of sorrow. judi
Comment from mermaids
I like the feel of this poem, the calmness of the dawn where sound is not needed. This unique form of poetry appeals to the senses. As the silence forms a psalm is wonderfully spiritual, as if the dawn can connect us to God.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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I like the feel of this poem, the calmness of the dawn where sound is not needed. This unique form of poetry appeals to the senses. As the silence forms a psalm is wonderfully spiritual, as if the dawn can connect us to God.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Elaine, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Terror2s
You have written about my favorite time of day on the rare times I am awake to enjoy it before I have to get moving. You have captured the unique peacefulness of the early morning beautifully. T2
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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You have written about my favorite time of day on the rare times I am awake to enjoy it before I have to get moving. You have captured the unique peacefulness of the early morning beautifully. T2
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Abby, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from muezza56
i really enjoyed reading this mirage form poem. really well written and thought provoking imagery, and great choice of accompanying pic
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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i really enjoyed reading this mirage form poem. really well written and thought provoking imagery, and great choice of accompanying pic
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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muezza, thank you so much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
Brooke, this is a beautifully written poem, as always, in perfect form. Sometimes even the sound of birdsong might intrude on a blessed quite. I love the wordless psalm of silence. Love, Jeanie
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Brooke, this is a beautifully written poem, as always, in perfect form. Sometimes even the sound of birdsong might intrude on a blessed quite. I love the wordless psalm of silence. Love, Jeanie
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Jeanie, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from NHazelwood
Wonderfully penned prose I just love that magically moments n the early mornings when all is quiet and calm. Just simplistic joy in silence you successfully captured this feeling in your eloquent poem!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Wonderfully penned prose I just love that magically moments n the early mornings when all is quiet and calm. Just simplistic joy in silence you successfully captured this feeling in your eloquent poem!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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NHazelwood, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Starlit Ink
Silence can be as profound as words, sometimes having even more meaning. As poets, we embrace words, but I love how this poem gives tribute to those precious and few moments of silence. Loved this line: "silence forms a wordless psalm." So true that is, and what a wonderful and creative expression you have here.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Silence can be as profound as words, sometimes having even more meaning. As poets, we embrace words, but I love how this poem gives tribute to those precious and few moments of silence. Loved this line: "silence forms a wordless psalm." So true that is, and what a wonderful and creative expression you have here.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Starlit Ink, thank you so much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
This is very well done, I saw no errors and think you did a wonderful job of representing the style of poetry with lovely verse.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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This is very well done, I saw no errors and think you did a wonderful job of representing the style of poetry with lovely verse.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Roxanna, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from mesp1986
This poem is as beautiful as the picture (which really is stunning). It flowed very well, and I do like the format. Great job!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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This poem is as beautiful as the picture (which really is stunning). It flowed very well, and I do like the format. Great job!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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mesp, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Taffspride
I have not had my laptop with me for the past few days thus have not been able to review.
I am so glad that this was the first piece I read.
The mirage is a nice form, but your subject made it more so.
The entire poem spoke to me, and needless to say sounds beautiful when read aloud. But the stanza that really stood out for me is:
In this hush of dawn so calm,
silence forms a wordless psalm
when first light arrives at last
and the bleak of night has passed.
It certainly reflects those early morning hours, which are my favorite ones of the day. You speak of the time when the troubles of the world are still hours away. Before the TV is turned on to hear the news, or the newspaper arrives with horror stories. A time for contemplation, of the day just gone, and the one ahead.
Thanks for sharing and making my day.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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I have not had my laptop with me for the past few days thus have not been able to review.
I am so glad that this was the first piece I read.
The mirage is a nice form, but your subject made it more so.
The entire poem spoke to me, and needless to say sounds beautiful when read aloud. But the stanza that really stood out for me is:
In this hush of dawn so calm,
silence forms a wordless psalm
when first light arrives at last
and the bleak of night has passed.
It certainly reflects those early morning hours, which are my favorite ones of the day. You speak of the time when the troubles of the world are still hours away. Before the TV is turned on to hear the news, or the newspaper arrives with horror stories. A time for contemplation, of the day just gone, and the one ahead.
Thanks for sharing and making my day.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Ann, I'm glad you like Honeycomb's new form and my use of it :-) I truly appreciate your generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
